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Dusk seeps up through marshy ground

Gases bubble, a spooky sound

The owl swoops softly overhead

The bat flies from his foetid bed

But here is where I’d rather be

Not in the house where you haunt me.

 

The house looks warm and cosy though

Through the doorway I won’t go

Look through the window, you will see

A  kitchen homely as can be.

But I know better so I stay

Safe outside and  far away.

 

The night is long and I am cold

I could creep back inside the fold

But I know what is waiting there

In the cottage, on the stair.

 

I sleep curled up under a bush

I’ve no nightdress, comb or toothbrush

My clothes are damp and wet with dew

But better that than be with you.

 

And so I’m trapped here for all time

The house is yours, the garden mine

You never sleep, you’re always there

And I won’t enter, I don’t dare.

I hate you, ghost, and you hate me

And that’s for all eternity.

 

 

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Jeff Dawson

Fri 29th Jul 2011 14:46

Hi Ann, this should have a good chance in the ghost comp, really enjoyed it, Jeff

<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 27th Jul 2011 22:49

Dave Bradley's right BTW -
"stopping by woods on a snowy evening" (R.Frost)

<Deleted User> (6895)

Wed 27th Jul 2011 10:23

what happened to the scary windy-woo in the background? as in your earlier poem..er..'Beast'?-it would have rounded it off scaringly well! nine and seven sixteenths out of ten,I am marking this one(she must try harder!..tee hee)

<Deleted User> (7212)

Wed 27th Jul 2011 09:06

I can't see this being bettered IMVHO (ghosts) - First Rate - gave me shivers.

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 26th Jul 2011 21:50

No, we just pushed them all off the cliff! Actually I was a bit worried this morning cos I heard about 12 sirens blaring. In a village you always think it's someone you know. Glad she's OK whoever she is!

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Dave Bradley

Tue 26th Jul 2011 19:36

A good write, this, Ann. Teasing the imagination. Reminded me a bit of Robert Frost in places.

PS St Agnes in the national news! You must be knee-deep in reporters at the moment

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Tue 26th Jul 2011 10:48

Very nive write and read

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Greg Freeman

Tue 26th Jul 2011 08:52

Haunting rhythm. I love "gases bubble". Makes me think of Wuthering Heights.

Philipos

Mon 25th Jul 2011 22:19

Ghosts eh? Sounds autobiographical this - sort of imaginings I had as a kid. My fav stanzas 1 & 3. Really good.

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John Coopey

Mon 25th Jul 2011 21:34

Nice one, Foxy.
Couldn't help but think of the film "The Others".

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Jon

Mon 25th Jul 2011 20:18

A bit unsettling this one,Ann.Perhaps harking back to some awful happening in the past'but I know what is waiting there,In the cottage ,on the stair'.
Is the main character a ghost herself?
Very interesting and something to think about!

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