great stuff John - one of the more complicated rhyme forms I think - because the rhyme pattern is easy enough - but making sense of the whole thing by using that pattern is where the real skill is at - and I think you've done this expertly
Ian

Comment is about Cradle - A Triolet (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

powerful stuff Jonnie - I liked it a lot - really gets across those brave, yet resigned, emotions.
Ian

Comment is about Camp (blog)

Original item by Jonnie Falafel

Francine :-) Think maybe it's a one off ha ha And yes, you should :-)

Comment is about Four ( June exercise ) (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

hey Laura :-) not sure that I am back but we'll see how it goes!

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Last Humanist funeral I went to, he over ran,
and there was no time left to play 'My Way'
(Thank God, Or whoever?)

Comment is about Humanist Funeral Rap (blog)

Do not be born beautiful!
Your beauty will fade away.
Be grateful to be born happy.
Happiness with you will stay.


Wise words Larisa - can't believe I almost missed this poem. Thanks so much for taking part - the competition is heating up!

The picture fits the poem perfectly and the weeping willow makes a perfect metaphor for the subject of loneliness.

Well done you!

Comment is about The Lonely Willow (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sounds like a lot of fun Laura - though I'm afraid I'm a fair weather camper myself - and I definitely don't do no loo roll - a hangover from my childhood I think - you'll find stacks and stacks of it round my house - just to make sure I never run out :))

Great that you committed to going paperless also. I think the secret with that is having the confidence not to bother if it goes wrong - being able to pick yourself up and carry on - that's the key - and that ability only comes with time and experience.

I enjoyed the review.

Comment is about Paperless at festival - but no complaints about the Ravenstonedale loos (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thank you so much for your kind comment. X

Comment is about I am (blog)

Original item by Amy McCawley

Thanks Mike, I have been sat on this one for a while and desperately needed input so thank you. I am going to take your advice and have a trim down see if I can get the best from it.

Comment is about My pond (blog)

Original item by Amy McCawley

Really enjoyed reading this!

Comment is about Humanist Funeral Rap (blog)

Thanks Steve. I am not giving up though.Plants are pushers x

Comment is about Greens (blog)

Original item by Cathy Crabb

Oh Harry - you've excelled yourself with this cautionary tale!

I was hoping someone would do a humorous take on the theme and this is it - the big one!

On a serious note, love poetry is not something that rings my bell - unless it is very original in its handling of the subject - and restrained - it must be restrained - constipated even...

It's such a personal feeling that to throw it out to the vast wide world seems like a debasement in some way. Or maybe that's just cynical old me ;)

Poetic and marine excretions - I can do them!

Comment is about Passing (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

awwwwww absolutely lovely!!well done girl!x

Comment is about The Lonely Willow (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I wil on one hand,say this is good,but,
on the other hand I will say-its effin fab!

why do I talk with my hands?
maybe my French Father could explain?

Comment is about Passing (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

thanks ann this is a great site

Comment is about David R Mellor (poet profile)

Original item by David R Mellor

IMHO, I can see what you are trying to do here and it works well, one critique i would give is that you have gotten bogged down with detail and in so doing have lost a little of its poetic potential. I would try a rewrite because i think it is certainly worth building on. But that's just my humble opinion. Judging by how you write, my suggestion is that it is a deep pond indeed, full of life and filled with awe. Yes there is reference to regrets, we all have them.

Great poem, great theme and great thinking.

Best wishes, from Mike

x

Comment is about My pond (blog)

Original item by Amy McCawley

As sad as it is, this is what many fear it has all become. So sad really. It is not born of genuine human interest or enquiry, what it is, is surveillance and a form of imprisonment.

Soon we may even have curfews, and if you look up Agenda 21, it makes for some very frightening information.

Mike

Comment is about Prism (blog)

Original item by Wez Jefferies

Nice work Alex. Very sad but well written.

Keep posting,

Mike

x

Comment is about Perfect Day (blog)

I don't log on much these days, my life being taken by two adoring children. Nevertheless I felt compelled to give you a big 'thumbs up' for this piece. It speaks to me of hope for the future and not be dissuaded from the positivity that 'could' become.

Nice work Joshua, biggupz!

Comment is about Worlds (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Thanks for your comment on "The City" Cynthia. Your point were very much appreciated as your pointer was accurate.

Thanks again

- Josh

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

You know I like this so well done again! x

Comment is about Perfect Day (blog)

I do some of my best work on the pot, I'll have you know!

Comment is about Passing (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

A wonderful piece of poetry. Powerful and human and personal but accessible to an outsider too . Lovely. Wish I could channel my deeper feelings on to the page like that. Best wishes, Steve x

Comment is about Perfect Day (blog)

Powerful stuff but well worth sharing just as Cynthia says and a very honest updated profile. Came on to see how soldier blue was going but looks like you've thought better of it. When you feel better about it post it again, best wishes, Steve

Comment is about Comatosed (blog)

Hi Chris - a very warm welcome to WOL - hope you are enjoying the site! :)

Comment is about Chris Stone (poet profile)

Original item by Chris Stone

Hi Victor - welcome to WOL. I hope that you will enjoy being a part of the site :)

Comment is about Victor D. Sandiego (poet profile)

Original item by Victor D. Sandiego

Hi Terry - a very warm welcome to WOL. Hope to see your work in the blog section soon :)

Comment is about terry ireland (poet profile)

Original item by terry ireland

Hi Joe - welcome to WOL. I hope you will enjoy taking part in the site! :)

Comment is about Joe Nodus (poet profile)

Original item by Joe Nodus

(When you find your pen...)

Comment is about Vik (poet profile)

Original item by Vik

Hi Vic - welcome to WOL. Hoping to see some of your work on here soon :)

Comment is about Vik (poet profile)

Original item by Vik

Hi Simon - a very warm welcome to WOL - hope you will enjoy being a part of the site :)

Comment is about simon mccormack (poet profile)

Original item by simon mccormack

Hi Isadora - a warm welcome to WOL. I hope you will take part in the site - and enjoy it!

Comment is about Isadora Vibes (poet profile)

Original item by Isadora Vibes

Hi David - a warm welcome to WOL - hope you will enjoy being part of the site :)

Comment is about David R Mellor (poet profile)

Original item by David R Mellor

Unfortunately I cannot make it to your book launch but just down the road from Manchester, in Stockport Art Gallery we have a Write Out Loud meeting on Monday July 8th at 7pm - 9pm.

If you can make it bring a few copies of your book and I can always put it on our blog.

I would like a signed copy please!

Comment is about Anna Percy (poet profile)

Original item by Anna Percy

Tremendous stuff - enjoying discovering your work, if not the figures for that woman's funeral!

Comment is about £10 million for this? (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

love this poem mate some deep stuff in here cant get on to chat tho

Comment is about Spirit of the air (blog)

Original item by Richard Alfred

Keep the cats safe, the poem is excellent.

Comment is about Give him a grid reference, for the love of god. (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

Comical and serious at the same time. Excellent work - Best wishes, steve

Comment is about Old Age (blog)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

Nice one!

Comment is about No means... yes, Charles? (blog)

Original item by steve pottinger

You compose fluidly with a haunting beauty that eludes most writers. Your diction delights, your structure woos and the hidden drummer within your lines pulses like a heart.

And I'm done. Can't believe I've really said that - but I'm not changing it.

Comment is about The Oak Tree IV (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

Brilliant.

Your profile is candid, and very interesting. You have set an enormous stage for your work with boundless material to explore (like life itself, yes?)

Comment is about Exit Stage Left (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

This is ripe catharsis. But, unlike many outpourings, it is worth sharing because it still has a 'considered element' as though you have thought through your ideas/feelings, and recognised the universality of them.

You have posted a very specific profile. I really commend you for such honesty. In many ways, I feel like a soulmate. I think you would enjoy more of my work, and I mean that without being pushy.

My name is just my name. I am my past as well as my present; my husband was a bit sniffy about it at first, but he is fine now. I think he felt threatened, undervalued. I felt unvalued, as a woman who had ceased to be a whole person the minute she married. I wasn't having it.

Comment is about Comatosed (blog)

For taking the time to read my entry, "Thank you...."
Best wishes
Starfish

Comment is about Steve Higgins (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Higgins

Thank you for your comment on "Spring".
Best wishes
Starfish

Comment is about Richard Alfred (poet profile)

Original item by Richard Alfred

I'm wondering whether there should be a walk instead of a talk in line 2?

I love the poem Katy - it's a bit Bridget Jones - I love the vulnerability - you capture it perfectly.

Comment is about Talking the Walk (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

If I ever perform this it will be off paper - I only commit to memory things that I really love or feel proud of. Not that I'm ashamed of this - it's just a bit of fluff and musing - nothing more! But I'm glad we made a connection on the table groove - I'm sure you and me would both have a lot of shit that could fall down there ;) x

Comment is about Wondering (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Meadowland sated with grasses so long
Sway to the tune of Mother Nature’s song



very nice Starfish

Comment is about Spring (blog)

Original item by Starfish

aha johnboy

Comment is about John Darby, entering into the Tudor spirit, Write Out Loud Wigan, July 2012 (photo)

hey I like your work I also have a poem called "I Am", hope your well I like this poem a lot

Comment is about I am (blog)

Original item by Amy McCawley

a sweet piece richard! nice one mate!

Comment is about Empty deckchairs (blog)

Original item by Richard Alfred