This took me back to my errands as a boy of about the same age
at that time in a ration-book English village with one shop, a
garage and a church. Thank you for this gentle evocative
reminder of a time long gone.
Comment is about Le Petit Parisien, 1952 (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
Thanks for the info. JC. It all seems a long way from "Roy of the Rovers"! 😃 Indeed, the only contemporary comparison might
be with Harry Kane. an almost Shakespearean hero for England.
Perhaps more so, if you think of him as "Harry Hot Spur"!!
Comment is about WE'RE ON THE UP ! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Home as a state of mind is an interesting concept Jordyn. Sometimes the journey is more important than the destination.
Comment is about Vagabond. (blog)
Original item by Jordyn Elizabeth
A poem well present as a call for inclusivity.
Thank you,
Keith
Comment is about Weaving the Threads (blog)
Original item by Hélène
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Fri 28th Apr 2023 15:35
<Deleted User> (35565)
Fri 28th Apr 2023 15:32
Nothing less than fabulous John! A great package.
LS
Comment is about Sketches in a minor key (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
<Deleted User> (35565)
Fri 28th Apr 2023 15:29
Hi Adam-clever reference to the Dale Trumbore poem-
' Where go the boats ' ( love it and yours too )
cheers A.W.
LS
Comment is about Thoughts Drifting from A Cove (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
A lovely poem Hélèna. This poem has a message that needs to be widespread. Especially, the first four powerful lines.
Thank you for this.
Comment is about Weaving the Threads (blog)
Original item by Hélène
Harry,
Welcome to Write our Loud. The Site is full of interest, with good poets and equally good poems. I look forward to seeing some of your work in the future.
Keith
Comment is about Harry Lopez (poet profile)
Original item by Harry Lopez
Thanks Ed.
I agree with Manish- a cracking last line.
I've told my children, who were concerned about what they perceived as their impotence - concerned as they are with keeping a roof over their heads - that as long as they do whatever they are able, their consciences are clear.
Comment is about Hate Billion (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
Keith/Manish,
Thanks for comments , very much appreciated, I know it’s a subject on which much has been written, and I feel kind of helpless to do anything , but hopefully a few lines will somehow help us all along the way
Comment is about Hate Billion (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
I am very grateful for your interesting comments, Keith and John.
This was based on an incident that I observed on my way to Bangkok Airport in a taxi and it occured to me that no matter how much we try to understand the country we visit (history, customs etc), there is bound to be a huge gulf between us on so many levels.
And thanks to Steve, Jed, RG, Nigel, Leon and Manish for the likes.
Comment is about Leaving Bangkok (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Ed,
This poem took the air from my lungs as I was held in suspense as the poem unfolded. You have summed up my feelings in their entirety. On those occasions when I vent my feelings about the world and all that ails us, I know from this poem that I am not alone. A tirade which should not be spoken but shouted from the hilltops.
Thank you for this.
Keith
Comment is about Hate Billion (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
Powerfully written Ed, every single line is evocative! It lures in any reader from the very beginning and ends with an uplifting message of acting towards a good change now, for a better and greener tomorrow!
The last line is concisely said - "For one Green Man is stronger than all".
Thank you.
Comment is about Hate Billion (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
Thank you Keith (best keep your 'findings' in your mind, eh? 😄)
Manish, much appreciated. Stephen, probably a good idea!
& Jed, you're probably right!
And thanks for the like Leon! 🌈
Comment is about Sinister Psychologist... (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
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Thu 27th Apr 2023 21:56
You always make the readers work for their money Tommy but that suits me fine because I love having a choice of angles to come from-keeps me out of mischief!
LS
Comment is about The Madness of the Sheltered Sun (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thank you Layla, Manish and Grace for
your likings 🙂
Comment is about The Madness of the Sheltered Sun (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thu 27th Apr 2023 19:07
Here is GPT4's interpretation:
This poem appears to be an exploration of the interplay between life, death, and the human psyche. It employs vivid imagery and evocative language to create an unsettling atmosphere, inviting the reader to delve into the chaotic and often dark realm of the mind.
Structure: The poem is divided into six stanzas, each containing three lines. This triadic structure could symbolize the balance and tension between life, death, and the human experience. The poem does not follow a specific rhyme scheme or meter, which contributes to the sense of instability and chaos.
1st Stanza:
"Holes in the net between,
My mind gone between the two,
Not trying to be heard be seen."
The opening stanza introduces the concept of "holes in the net," which could represent the gaps in our understanding or the ways in which we may fail to fully grasp the complexity of life and death. The speaker's mind is caught "between the two," suggesting a struggle to navigate the space between these opposing forces. The last line implies a desire for anonymity or invisibility, possibly indicating feelings of powerlessness or insignificance.
2nd Stanza:
"I care for the trumpet siren,
A bloody wind of mind not dying,
The vivacious ashes in piles crying."
The second stanza introduces a trumpet siren, possibly symbolizing a call to action or a harbinger of change. The "bloody wind of mind not dying" may represent the resilience and persistence of human consciousness, even in the face of adversity. The "vivacious ashes" evoke the idea of life emerging from destruction or decay, reinforcing the theme of rebirth and transformation.
3rd Stanza:
"Dead bed worms in thighs,
The agony of a bed sick child,
The fallen grace of Deathly hallow."
The imagery in the third stanza is unsettling, as it juxtaposes "dead bed worms" with "the agony of a bed sick child," conveying the notion of decay and suffering. The "fallen grace of Deathly hallow" alludes to a loss of innocence or purity, further emphasizing the darkness and despair that pervades the poem.
4th Stanza:
"Vernacular and sentence past,
He free in me the pastor garden,
Buried deep silent pouring."
The fourth stanza hints at the transformative power of language, with "vernacular and sentence past" perhaps referring to the capacity of words to shape and influence our experiences. The "pastor garden" may symbolize a place of sanctuary or spiritual nourishment, while the phrase "buried deep silent pouring" suggests hidden emotions or secrets that may be gradually revealed.
5th Stanza:
"The mind is but the sweet embrace,
The second before death and grace,
Vicious toddler drowning miles."
In the fifth stanza, the mind is described as a "sweet embrace" that exists just before the boundary between life and death. This could be interpreted as an acknowledgment of the mind's capacity for beauty and solace, even in the darkest of times. The image of a "vicious toddler drowning miles" is jarring and disconcerting, highlighting the brutal and unpredictable nature of existence.
6th Stanza:
"And blind to the sea."
The poem concludes with a reference to blindness and the sea, which could represent the vastness of the unknown or the infinite possibilities that lie beyond our comprehension. This final line underscores the limitations of human perception and understanding, leaving the reader to contemplate the mysteries of life, death, and the human experience.
Overall, this poem offers a haunting and evocative exploration of the complexities of the human psyche, as well as the interplay between life and death. Its vivid imagery and striking language create a powerful and thought-provoking experience for the reader, encouraging a deeper examination of the mysteries and challenges that define our existence. The poem's unconventional structure and lack of a clear narrative contribute to the sense of chaos and unpredictability, reflecting the complexities of the human condition. Ultimately, the poem invites the reader to confront the darkness within themselves and the world around them, while also acknowledging the potential for beauty, resilience, and transformation.
Comment is about Good Mourning (blog)
Original item by Alita Moore
Very, very interesting piece of work Mike! Loved how science and the scientist made a mathematical and poetic remark of the empty spaces being filled by emotions for the ones around us. An exquisite story and perspective.
Thank you.
Comment is about Theories from the Micro-Verse (thank you Ann Napolitano) (blog)
Original item by Mike McPeek
I love the economy of your story telling. You say so much, in so few words. The brevity of your poem mirrors the brevity of the life lost and the contrasts are expertly made!
Comment is about Leaving Bangkok (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Seeds of Friendship
Undaunted shopper
Routine commands
Passing by - - -
Meeting place stall
Concerned Scarf Lady
Deep potted conversation
Tweed Cap Man
Unwavering persistent stare
Green fingered people
Chatterbox plants listen
Words reflect life
Seeds of friendship
Grow into reasons
Giving a purpose
Days seem shorter
Time marches onwards
Still they talk
Distant years remembered
Memories never die
Alive exsiting inside
This photographic view.
Comment is about Stall_discussion.jpg (photo)
Original item by Stockport WoL
There is a sadness about this. Unusually I read it through a number of times.
Comment is about Thoughts Drifting from A Cove (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
A poem skillfully composed which brings to light how easily we can be taken in by initial encounters, by the superficial before our expectations are dashed to the ground. Your use of the word wisdom is very apt. Something we all need an abundance of to walk carefully through life.
Thank you for this.
Keith
Comment is about Life lessons (blog)
Original item by Jaded_Jas
Stephen, A poem which describes well how temporary and tenuous is our experience of other countries despite visiting them. It brings into sharp perspective the difference between cultures and value systems.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about Leaving Bangkok (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Thank you to Stephen G., Stephen A., Manish and John B., for their kind and encouraging comments and to Helen, K Lynn and Leon for their likes. I was moved to write this poem as I feel there exists a strain of autocracy which prevails during present times throughout the world. We need to be watchful and alert to what is taking place in our own society and nation.
Thank you again..
Keith
Comment is about The Voices of Freedom (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thu 27th Apr 2023 08:26
I've had trouble with awful psychiatrists....lead me to think that psychiatrists are merely doctors who want to stay in college longer get paid more and be less useful to society as regular doctors.
Comment is about Sinister Psychologist... (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Best of luck to David. He has posted some wonderful poems on the WOL site.
Comment is about David Cooke looks back on poetry stops and starts as he unveils a bumper volume of poems (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Nice one, Stephen. I think I'll stick with my GP.
Comment is about Sinister Psychologist... (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
A powerful poem, Keith. 'The kiss of death comes from the dictator's lips' is particularly good.
A timely warning about what is important in our society, and what we should be wary of.
Comment is about The Voices of Freedom (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I love the idea that his shadow can only just keep up, David.
Comment is about Le Petit Parisien, 1952 (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
I like the savage humour, Steve.
Comment is about Kings and Queens (blog)
Original item by Steve White
Beautifully written, heart wrenching and a similar kind of agony and regret that most of us can resonate with. On the contrary, "we grow through what we go through" has become my mantra to certain events and speculations from past life.
Thank you for this.
Comment is about Life lessons (blog)
Original item by Jaded_Jas
An exceptional, heart-wrenching poem, Jordyn. Thank you.
Comment is about Dad. (blog)
Original item by Jordyn Elizabeth
thank you both
Comment is about Seaport with the Embarkation of the Queen of Sheba, by Claude Lorrain 1648 (blog)
Original item by JD Russell
Very well written with watertight imagery! Enjoyed every bit of it.
Thank you.
Comment is about Seaport with the Embarkation of the Queen of Sheba, by Claude Lorrain 1648 (blog)
Original item by JD Russell
Like the title suggests, this indeed feels like a sinister psychologist trying to get hold of your darkest thoughts, secrets, love, grief, etc.
Very well written Stephen!
Comment is about Sinister Psychologist... (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Immaginative poetry at its best.
Thank you for this,
Keith
Comment is about Seaport with the Embarkation of the Queen of Sheba, by Claude Lorrain 1648 (blog)
Original item by JD Russell
A great and humorous poem, as I can envisage you on the couch about to have your mind probed. If I were similarly analysed I'm sure the findings would find their way to the News of the World or some sordid publication. Thanks for this,
Keith
Comment is about Sinister Psychologist... (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Devastating poem, Keith. Sad but true to life.
Comment is about A Gay Dismissal (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Well said, Keith. A Poetic Triumph. Thank you!
Comment is about The Voices of Freedom (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Hey Stephen,
Thank you so much for leaving such kind comments on my poem, it means a lot to me being a beginner. Cheers! 🌈😊
Comment is about Stephen W Atkinson (poet profile)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
I think Manish said it all!
A great piece, Keith 🌈
Comment is about The Voices of Freedom (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thank you all for your kind words and taking time to read.
It means a lot.
-Jordyn
Comment is about Dad. (blog)
Original item by Jordyn Elizabeth
M.C. Newberry
Fri 28th Apr 2023 18:25
Indeed, we should, each in our own way and within our own
ability, make a contribution towards freedom. Evil and embryo-
tyranny emerges with every generation - a dismal fact of
human existence - and we should never ignore it. I note a book
that lists those marked for "attention" by Hitler had he
prevailed here in the UK. And his kind exist today in varying
degrees and it is essential that we understand that reality and
combat it at every turn.
Comment is about The Voices of Freedom (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries