Hi Belinda, happy new year, I'm just catching up!

Like this, quite mysterious in a way, hope things okay over there, take care Jeff X

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Hi Phil, happy new year, I'm just catching up, great fun this and well put together! Jeff

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Hi Melissa,

I'm just catching up! poignant with those feelings that won't go away, very familiar, well put, take care Jeff x

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Fucking love The Commuters, so good! Nice staccato rhythm really getting to the heart of the horror of it all. Great economy with language too... good work.

Comment is about Louise Fazackerley (poet profile)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

Ref: Shed Fire - spot on.
I live in a Norfolk coastal village & when my mate move to Sheffield he would regail me with tales of big city crime. About 4 wks after he moved the front page of our local paper (Lowestoft Journal) had a picture of a sofa in the sea below the headline " SOFA WASHED UP ON BEACH." - careful now.

Comment is about Attila the Stockbroker (poet profile)

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Hi Maggie
Thank you ....Your comment was All that I could hope for...

Thank once again
Gus

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Original item by Maggie

Thank You Andy

...and thanks for Listening.... often overlooked by the page scurrie always in a hurry poets..
Once again thank you
Gus

Comment is about Andy Williamson (poet profile)

Original item by Andy Williamson

MC Johnson:

Precisely. I do gigs quite often in front of audiences who a) don't normally listen to poetry and b) have elements who are quite bigoted. The last verse is for them. If I only ever performed in art galleries it wouldn't be needed....

Nabila - define 'positive'!!

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HI Andy, very nice poem!

Comment is about A Memory (blog)

Original item by Andy Williamson

HI Daniel, nice poem!Id rather be delusional, then Godless.Im glad God gave us the power of reason and thought, and guilt, when we do wrong.Im glad I was given freedom to feel and think as I please.Bonding in a family is very healthy, and bonding with other humans is good for you.good poem!

Comment is about Darwin versus religion (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

The dumber than thou big reveal of the last verse was not needed unless it is assumed that the readers don't "get" the epic satire. Of course it's funny & goes de dum de dum de dum nicely.

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The God Delusion eh?
Bonding in social groups can also aid individual survival (ants/baboons etc) but I agree humans have choice over instinct.

Comment is about Darwin versus religion (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Would spelt any other way would sound Stiff

Comment is about Phases of phrases (blog)

My view is that if stereotypes are to be broken down and positive images represented, then a positive tone and approach in a poem is needed, which I feel is really lacking here

Hate to be blunt- but don't like this at all

Comment is about Asylum Seeking Daleks (article)

I have downloaded this from 57.com this such a great poem!!!

Comment is about Asylum Seeking Daleks (article)

Cliché ?
Hm! I like cliché. But you knew that already.

Getting adventurous too i see.
Janet.x

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Hi Dermot,
i've read this several times and thought at first it was meditation based.
I really like the first two and the last stanza but the third one lost me a bit apart from the
'still fixing me with her bright eye that shone and shone, like one reflecting the yellow setting sun.'

Somehow, on the whole, the poem makes me feel quite cold. Can't fathom that but mine is not to reason why.
It's good to see some blogs from you.
Janet.x

Comment is about The Water Sprite (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Hi Melissa,
this reminds of the festival of 'Imbolc.'
I think that was on Tuesday!
The groundhog legendary story. As long as you don't see your own shadow on this day, all changes will be for the better.
Or something like that.

I like this poem too.
Janet.x

Comment is about Over Edge (blog)

What a great flow from old to new to old again.

Word play, familiar phrases, rhyming slag, tradition, it's such a perculiarly British thing !!

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Brilliant! had me in stitches the minute I read it.
Your kind of humour is a great way to get the message across.

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Hi Melisa. This is what happens after too much cheese just before bed time?
It seems we have both been writting about the end of the world (see my recent contribution to erite club - The last moon). Well when it actually comes and no one else has predicted it then we will be able to stand up and say "I told yo....

More seriously - Lovely piece nice mixture of sadness and beauty.

Winston

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Hi Steve, should there be an extra "s" "and lies as bright"

you have managed to get a lot accross in these few lines. nice

winston

Comment is about Snow Marilyn (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

I love a bit of alliteration and I think the 'f' sound is perfect for a poem about snow with its associations with things like fluff and feathers.

I also liked the subtle internal rhymes of 'freezing season' and 'frightened evening' aswell as the echo between
'frozen fleet' and 'fleeing fate's'.
I find sonnets really difficult so respect anyone who can make them look so effortless, and to write one every day? That takes stamina!

Comment is about Salford snowfall (blog)

It made me think of those seeds that will only germinate after a forest fire.

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Hi Antonionioni.
Glad you liked "High-life-low-life" and thanks for your comments.
I went to Uni in Salford many years ago - a wonderful place, full of life and character. You certainly managed to pack in the f*****g alliteration here! A small grammatical observation:

Outside the third-floor window, snowflakes float

Sailing, then sinking in full formation

Frail frozen fleet, soon flattened underfoot

Failing, falling to its destination

Headlights, tail-lights flow from Salford station

In line 4 I think "its" reads better as "their" - plural for the snowflakes. There is a Betjemanesque quality about this - I suppose it's the mention of suburbia and the filing away of city workers. Nice one.
Regards,
A.E.

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Hi alison.
Thanks for stopping by to comment on "The Lavender Path." I thought that one had sunk without a trace! I guess the idea was that a scent should spark a specific, happy memory to give a passing soul direction. Fanciful I know, but an interesting idea to play with.
I just had a wander through your work for the first time - it's a BIG site and difficult to see everything. What strikes me about what you write are the ethereal romantic qualities you bring to your subjects - a gentle hand exploring the big ideas and themes of life. I often find that poetry written in the first person can easily veer off into the self-indulgent, but you manage to avoid this well. I know it's something I struggle with, and therefore rarely attempt. There is a pleasing depth to what you write which is borne out by several re-reads. Much enjoyed.
Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Words (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Steve
like the body sculptured snow especially

enjoyed.

Comment is about Snow Marilyn (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

Cheers Gus

Just changed the word 'Teeth' to 'Smiles' in the third line. Felt more natural and fitting.

Thanks for your comment.

Comment is about Snow Marilyn (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

Hi Steve
.....I LOVE IT !
Wow!....Blew my candle out for sure!
Well done
Gus

Comment is about Snow Marilyn (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

Hey Melissa, lovely write. This dream/poem of yours kind of says 'wake up, the world is beautiful, enjoy'. :D x

Comment is about Over Edge (blog)

Hi Anthony, this is a beautiful piece. Although the subject is of someone's passing, I felt comforted by it's gentleness and beauty. Quite vivid images it brought to mind. Hope the transition between worlds is really like this x

Comment is about The Lavender Path (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Liked this one very much - liked the alliteration and some beautiful images. If you don't mind me saying though - I would replace the oblique with a comma - isn't it that the piles are both light and dark at the same time? The oblique, to me, suggests an either/or. Just a thought.
Cx

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yup, there is more i could say about the injustices the military carry out. Not alls good in her majesties finest im afaid. the poem is based on factual events surrounding the death of a colleague in the former Yugoslavia. It has been a cross to bear for so many years. Nightmares too. Thanks for the empathy antonionioni.

Alison, i will check out the website. thanks for the comments. Im not always as intense, there is a comedy too. its just my high spirits have been tainted a long time ago. Wish i could find that place where ignorance is bliss. But its hard to find it these days. i do like art, and have been known to put brush to canvass. again, only a limited few passable.

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

Nope - had to come back and further clarify - the viewpoint character is a heavily disguised me 11 years ago.

Comment is about The Water Sprite (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Thanks - the subject is a heavily disguised me eleven years ago.

Comment is about The Water Sprite (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Hi Anthony, thanks for the feedback. Can you have another look at News seller? left comment there. Winston

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Good point, well made.

Comment is about The Water Sprite (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

In which case - vivacious?
Cx

Comment is about The Water Sprite (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

I removed my earlier post of this and edited properly (even added punctuation this time) before reposting). Good advice, Gus.

Comment is about The Water Sprite (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Don't come. Don't strut your stuff. (?)

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Hi there Anthony
Was just going to write "Great rhythm and love the punch lines (shorter lines) then read the footnote and had to read / sing it again. LOL
Original comment still stands great stuff.
Winston

Comment is about High-life-low-life (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Have you written any new poems recently

Comment is about Bill Brierley (poet profile)

Original item by Bill Brierley

Thanks for your visit/Comment:

By "trad" I mean traditional; by "metre" I mean the rhythm of a poem.

David

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