Phil - yes I will stay for longer next time and we'll chat!

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I read and I listen and I too felt quite humble, i wish you love and strength to face the road ahead, God bless you and your family. June

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Hi - just voiced up SNAFU - if you have 5 minutes to spare I'd particularly like your opinion.
Cx

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Hi - just voiced up SNAFU - if you have 5 minutes to spare I'd particularly like your opinion.
Cx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Thank-you for your comments about 'Confetti' - I think weddings, in general, have a tendency to be cliché-ed - but, perhaps, those that are imagined in particular!
Your work is interesting - people are on here for all sorts of different reasons, and I don't know whether you're on here hoping to be told that your work is wonderful, or for serious feedback, so I hope you don't mind if I offer a criticism or two?
You say you have a predisposition to grandiloquence - I would say try and keep it out of your writing, nothing is more alienating than pomposity, and without a reader you're not a writer, you're a diarist. I also wouldn't bother mentioning that you write crap poems that you don't post - we all do. People (in every walk of life) have a tendency to believe what they're told - often despite evidence to the contrary. Go around saying 'I'm really fick, I am' and they'll believe you - even with your degree firmly tucked under your belt: so tell them positives, or better yet - let them judge for themselves by showing them your best, accessible, work.
And if you want a serious critique - post to Write Club! - they will certainly let you know what you are doing right or where you are going wrong, though I must admit I haven't had the nerve to do so myself - yet!
Good luck,
Cx

Comment is about Joshua Van-Cook (poet profile)

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Hi Shirley, I'm now posting things here, so far I've posted 3 poems in the blog. If you could, I'd appreciate feedback on them. Thanks again.
Josh

Comment is about Shirley May (poet profile)

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A sardonic poem that's abouts as true to life as you can get.
"but where is the sanity

in living life with no freedom or original thoughts"

Those words really got to me and I agree totally.
Congrats

Josh.

Comment is about Revolutionary road (blog)

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Thanks

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Thanks, I pretty much reeled this one off the top of my head some time ago. The underlying meaning is that through my eyes, such things as heaven and hell are only what we make of them and that both exist here but as they are mutually incompatable, our feelings of the day affect which one exists to us but the constant vying of relious sects is dragging this world through Hell. I don't know how much sense that makes to anyone other than me but I worded it as well as I could.

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Hi Daniel, thanks for the praise on "The Grand Fallacy" I've been reading your sample poems just now and I am very impressed. I particularly liked "The Poetry Bomber" both for the fact that it was an inspired idea and the great tempo it had. I bet it would be great as a performance peace.

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Jeff you always leave a comment so I am leaving one here.Its great to hear that you are performing your poetry I would like to perform to a wider audience but I am always so nervous I shake!
Good for you!
peace and love to you!
Dan

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

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welcome to write out loud!

Comment is about Joshua Van-Cook (poet profile)

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Great imagery I will have to re read it again to get the full meaning!

Comment is about The Grand Fallacy (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Thanks to you all
To Darren;
I wrote this poem as a rant against myself for believing in the rubbish that society tries to enforce on us through social norms I was asked recently if there was anyone romantically "on the scene" I said no I don't think happiness always lies in being a couple or being in love I actually think there is alot of pain involved with being in love!
society enforces pier pressure on anybody who is different. And tries to force them to conform I hate that! I want to be happy but I would rather lead a life of meaning if nothing else where I make my own path or road and walk it!

Comment is about Revolutionary road (blog)

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The punk who tuated it is really beyond sorting.

Comment is about Guerre de Plume (blog)

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I think that one will be well worth the time sorting out the punctuation.

Comment is about Guerre de Plume (blog)

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You said - "do you have to sing song lyrics in order for them to be song lyrics?" Yes absolutely. There are some songs where the lyrics are weak nonesence scribbled on a fag packet during a recording session and would not stand up as poetry. And yet due to the music, somehow, the resulting song is brilliant and a big hit. A Poet is not afforded this possibility of improvement but don't get me started on that. lol Winston

Comment is about Seize the Day (blog)

Oh it's me reading the poem, but 'Digital Smudge' chopped it up and added the music. I think the question re. poetry vs. lyrics is an interesting one. Obviously, lyrics on a page are simply poetry, but then again do you have to sing song lyrics in order for them to be song lyrics? Personally, I would like to think that it all comes under the very inclusive umbrella of 'poetry' which is by its very nature subjective; open to interpretation and ever changing. It also falls victim to fads and fashions, but don't get me started on that.
Thanks for reading / listening!
HT

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Hi Helen.
Well , What to make of this project. First of all just to say I am really interested in others reading my stuff and I have recently had a successful (On both sides I think) poem swap experiment with Cayne White, when we read each others poems in our own style. I am also regularly involved in long discussions about lyrics v poetry. (Are they the same thing / different / similarities) In Your example it certainly gives things a new twist. Interesting choice of mood in the music for these words. (I think I would have chosen something less ambient) Actually I don't think this is poetry now but being able to say why is the reason my recent debates have been long ones! lol. Very interesting. Have a search for "Glimpse of god" in Cayne's blogs. Its in many ways the opposite end to his style as a punk poet dude ! In April we are having an evening of lyrics as poems at the Puzzle Poets in Sowerby Bridge. Winston

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Glad you like it Julian! It would never have occurred to me to splice it up and stick the original title on the end; I think it's quite interesting entrusting your writing to someone else and just letting them do what they will with it, and I love the fact that I sound like Max Headroom's Mrs. You're right about the pic though - I could do with a shave...

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Not sure your photo does you justice though.

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I love it Helen, and don't usually like poetry with music attached thereto. But I recently had some of my work cut up (without music) and respliced, as it were, and can see how this works really well.
With this, I like the effects created, it sort of dramatises the work, and the results are perhaps even more poetic than the originals; it gives it more rhythm somehow. Excellent, thank you!

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Oops too much 'of'.

Comment is about Guerre de Plume (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Burn baby burn.
Heed not the siren calls
of of gorgeous glens
or black and dappled streams
that babble, never slide,
upon their asses
at the nexus
of firm folded
hoof unstoned.

Comment is about Guerre de Plume (blog)

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Found you at last Jeff -wurv yer bin?
I like ' As I cough the thick black...', lots of meaning in just the word 'black'. Keep it simple,it works well. And 'Epilogue' is spot on.

Comment is about Jeff Whitehead RIP (poet profile)

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So that's what a 'drugs mule' means - a donkey with two joints!

Comment is about Guerre de Plume (blog)

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I don't approve of double jointed donkeys.

Comment is about Guerre de Plume (blog)

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Wow. Talk about Postmodernism. Now Write Club's gone self-reflexive on our asses!

Comment is about Guerre de Plume (blog)

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Paul you look confused, did you hand back a costa coffee to Pete Kalu, then realise it was a frappachino after all?

Comment is about Pete Kalu and Paul Blackburn at Kulture Klub, Rochdale Oct 2008 (photo)

Hi Gus,

Thank you for your comments about my poem. I feel that I'm beginning to find my voice in my poetry, and it's awesome :)

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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typo - Hamas

Comment is about La Carrière des Fusillés (blog)

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This is positively one of the most moving things I've read, well - possibly since reading Levi's 'If this is a man'.
I went to my first poetry evening (Leamington Spa) last Sunday evening; the young, inadequate man who compered had just returned from finding himself in India (I won't bore you with his stunning revelations about what he found there - I put it down to the naivety & exuberance of youth) and he closed the show with his hopes that 2009 was going to be a good year, that it had already begun well with the election of Obama, then he said - 'if only Israel weren't such fucking cunts'.
I am not condoning the actions of Israel (or Hama, or any other who uses violence) nor suggesting your poem does so - merely highlighting that anti-semitism is alive and well, and is, it seems, applauded amongst middle-class poetry writing circles in the midlands.
Thank-you for the poem.
Cx

Comment is about La Carrière des Fusillés (blog)

Original item by Rod Whitworth

Enjoyed reading you poem,you have a unique quality with words Pete. Its good to know you are happy too.

Comment is about superb world of positivity (blog)

We couldn't afford rubbers....we used bread....
15 girls in the lower fifth were pregnent...

great poem
loved it!
Gus

Comment is about Monday morning blues (blog)

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Beautifully expressed, though immeasurably saddening. Makes me want to take you down the pub, get you a pint, and reassure you that despite everything, everything's going to be alright...

Comment is about Sick Of Myself (blog)

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Three good drips. Quite warm.

Comment is about Radiant (blog)

Original item by Simon Rennie

Hi Belinda,
I like the pace of this poem. It's pleasantly speeded up as it runs along.
Janet.x

Comment is about Monday morning blues (blog)

Original item by Belinda

Go on Daniel. Sock it to 'em!

This is quite a bit stroppier than what i'm used to reading from you.
Good stuff.
Janet.x

Comment is about Revolutionary road (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

All four of the buggers look dangerous.

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

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Three of them aren't me.

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

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There are now four identical DG's? What is this - iRobot Burns?

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Hi Belinda - 'erasers' - bloody hell! We had 'rubbers' at our school.

Hope Japan is treating you well.

Comment is about Monday morning blues (blog)

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Lavender seems to have the power to evoke beautiful haunted memories for many people, strange. I like this piece Anthony, plaintive and evocative....but heck i wish you'd change your picture, it's scarey.. Deb

Comment is about The Lavender Path (blog)

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I wonder if I should take chainsaw to mine? agree with about Mitch and Mac. Louise got me to cut up a few of my poems once and stitch phrases together to make a new piece. Brilliant idea, not least because it does encourage me to chuck out the pap I was gamefully hanging on to; my little darlings.

Comment is about Freeform as a bird (article)

Concrete poetry - a dripping faucet with a profound message too. I'm not really a huge fan of this style - but constant water, as they say...

I enjoy your writing and the way your words only appear to be included if they're deemed worthy enough. Nothing is left to chance - well, that's what I think anyway - but I know very little. Although I did read a book on self- depreciation once...

Comment is about Radiant (blog)

Original item by Simon Rennie

lol Julian trying to convince us how useless facebook is :)

Comment is about Some of the guests intermingle at Kulture Klub, Rochdale Oct 2008 (photo)

Some good truthes in there Daniel. Make your own road. Winston

Comment is about Revolutionary road (blog)

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Hi Daniel - I can't argue with your reasoning and the content. You make some wry observations. Wasn't sure if this was aimed at one person in particular or it's a general theme - or both maybe?

Particularly like this line:

'I Can tell you settled down because it was easier then being alone!'

How very true.

Comment is about Revolutionary road (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

The last line is linked to the above line it is a statement of hope it can touch peoples lives and make things happen that you don't expect I am always impressed by poetrys ability to touch people and change thier lives!

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