Wow! This is a really nice poem. I like the japanese wordage at the end.
Mike

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Nice one!
Mike

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Original item by Christopher Dawson

Hi Pete, sorry I couldnt make it to the Olde Boars Head last night. For reasons you write above I wasnt well enough to recite anything. Just a temporary glitch. Occasionally PTSD manifests itself in ways akin to your poem. Nightmares etc. This poem I can really empathise with. For I, for all my service career (and coping with this thing we call society), have spent time on these wards. I do think in the main, a lot of psychiatric patients are not necessarily treated that well. And the language the health professionals can be somewhat daunting. For example, they use the word 'comply', with regard to taking your meds or not. 'Did the patient comply?' If you look the word up in the dictionary, it means 'Yield'. How are survivors and sufferers of a society that put them there in the first place, supposed to 'Yield', within the sphere of society that dictates those that disagree be placed. I think you get my drift. I have been unwell in the past, and have seen many sufferers. Most just needed some love and a hug and empathy, not lingo that frightens in environments akin to a prison. Nice work blue. Speak soon
mike

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Lots of subtext going on here! Like it
Cx

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would like to help you co-host your new night Gus.
Love your profile pics, have you a list of them? I would like them as wall art, if you saw my house you would understand why.
Pete

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Original item by Gus Jonsson

You are quite the poet with your flow of words and rhyme, and congrats on being published in the poetry anthology.

Comment is about Scabby Knees! (blog)

lol. I hate the dentist too, and this poem fits perfectly with how I feel about sitting in that chair and opening wide. But it's good to have teeth, isn't it? ;)

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Original item by Jeffarama!

A breathtaking piece with a beautiful picture to flow poetically with each and every word. Well-done. :)

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Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

fabulous poem, Pete. each moment described and guided through with a beautiful serenity i'd love to be able to replicate. soulful content. lovely x

Comment is about swimming underwater (blog)

Hi Mike,
Blame the mattress, a work of fiction, but I did meet someone who swore that's how she got pregnant, she had five kids. If I had eight kids I'd have no time to write anything.

I really like Noel Hill gritty and thoughtful.

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

Sian, what a beautiful piece. that period of adjustment and letting go after he's gone is heartfelt. x

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Original item by sian howell

i agree with Pete. your reality punctures our pampered lives, i'm always holding my breath when reading your war poems- your powerful raw accounts are vital in waking us up to think beyond the sterile and diluted stories fed by the media. humbling stuff, Mike x

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

goodness what pain this conveys , it is remarkable how you have put across the agony of war. sian X

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

Well done Pete...my sort of poem...

loved it
Gus

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Standard? You commented on my standard!
have you read this Mike?
Maybe you dont know how powerful your work is!
The power and commitment in the war poems you write just sends me out there mate.
its pure, tight, raw right to the bone, no frills
it hurts to read as I know you were there
unbelievable mate.
classic.
what can I say.

March you bastard / starch

oh yes, like that couplet
the regiment and the ritual mate
the regiment and the ritual

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

Poetry reveals as much, or as little, as we care to look. Once again, your work is demonstrating a sense of depth that I enjoy. Graham 'touches' (I sense anyway!) upon what is contained within these words.
I'd be tempted to use the present participle for the verb 'turn' and not past tense.
'I turn to an empty chair'. or simply 'turning to an empty chair'.
Another good 'un. Keep 'em comin'...

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Original item by sian howell

Enjoyed your poem Chris. I am sure many Dads share your thoughts. Well done.

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Original item by Christopher Dawson

Photographs by Melanie Rees

Comment is about Gus Jonnson at the Tudor House, Wigan Feb 2009 (photo)

nice poem

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cheers for the comments maggie there most appreciated, im glad you enjoyed it. i like the way your poetry has such insight aand is straight to the point yet gets the message accross so directly, cheers, chris. x

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Original item by Maggie

hi chris, nice poem.

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Original item by Chris Heidtbrink

hi chris, this is a very nice poem, im sure you will come up with a title for it, just look within your words for one, its there.

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Original item by Chris Heidtbrink

Thanks for the comment hun, look me up on facebook or myspace and would love to share more work with you. Love your work

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Original item by Maggie

Thank you Val re Summer's Day...

Love ya to bits
see you soon
Gus x

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Original item by Valerie Cook

Thanks again Sian

For your lovely words re Summer's Day...

Gus x

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

Perhaps someone you both loved and feared a little? If not the ambiguity is cleverly worked.

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Original item by sian howell

Hi Gemma

Congrats on a great gig at ShangriLa last night. Impressive stuff under a lot of pressure!

Cheers

Tony

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Original item by Gemma Lees

like it, I was on Bournemouth peer at the time. Remember it well.
Mike

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Original item by Rodney Wood

Hello Pete, your an inspiration. I wonder how long you been writing to reach this standard. I read it a couple of times and each time i found something new to ponder on. Yup! Fine wordage blue.
Mike

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No it isn't Rodney. It is an observational piece certainly, but that is very different from voyeurism. It is a story highlighting in verse the horrible reality of the dangers of this way of life and the kinds of emotions it raises as well as the fact that it continues unchanged by the horrible violence that has always gone with it. To suggest that it is in some way sexually titillating misses the point by a very long way.

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Original item by Malpoet

This has great rhythm, expect this sounds good in performance!

Comment is about SEARCHING... (blog)

Hi Sian

Your poem
depicts a sense of longing and disappointment many can identify with..

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Border Crossing...had me from the first line, I thought it was great, made me laugh out loud. Very funny. I wish there was more of your pieces to read. Sian

Comment is about Jeff Cottrill (poet profile)

Original item by Jeff Cottrill

Wow Sian, I can totally relate. This says it all, beautiful and plaintive. Sigh..never mind, you can always use the chair to pile your laundry on and no-one will tell you to move it..cos it's your chair.. thank you for reading my words and your comments on my writing, hope your weekend is a good one,Deb x

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Original item by sian howell

thank you Rodney for your comments on Belladonna. the repetition..witchy herb..spell... ; )
Deb

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Original item by Rodney Wood

I really enjoyed the above "death will come"... I liked the idea that when death comes it resembles an ordinary day...giving the impression that death can visit any of us without warning. Sian X

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Original item by Carol Falaki

Enjoyed this thoroughly...a very well thought out
piece and great idea. Sian X

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A bit voyeuristic eh!

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Original item by Malpoet

Thanks very much i really appreciate your comment its nice to know that theres some people left that are real....And appreciate realness...Thats put me in a gud mood! Lol thank you!

Comment is about NAKED (blog)

The content of this poem is brillaint, makes you think. The comment from Elise is valid, I have to agree, on the page it needs, not necessarilly an order, a structure, but it needs better presentation. I think this one could be an epic, but the links make it sound a bit disjointed. If it were perhaps a little more fluid and flowin, it would provoke more than just a startle, it would jump out and grab you. Nice poem, needs a lil fine tweakin but really good.
Mike

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I can really empathise with this. Some people say too often, "You wear your heart on your sleeve." And I wonder whether this be a taunt for the fact they find it hard to express themselves. It can leave you wide open to ridicule. But this poem, says all about the passion that some people have. And the fact, they're not afraid to ask of it. If more people expressed how they truly feel, perhaps the problems of communication would be overcome. Nice one Yosh.

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Aye, when a woman becomes pregnant, and the bump is there for all to see. you can only admire how proud they be. I feel this one. Women do bloom when carrying babes. Wonderful. You must be proud too. Biggupz and good luck.
Mike

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Original item by Christopher Dawson

I like this poem, the last stanza is just genius.
Mike

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Original item by Christopher Dawson

Hi Sian, did you succumb to the subtle blackmail that is tescos or did you rush home to make a red rose out of toilet rolls and pipe cleaners?..hmm they make it all too easy...damn them....thank you for your kind comments on my wee poem, Deb

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Original item by sian howell

Thanks for your input its appreciated! Ive been writing since i was little but ive only jus started putting it out so any feed back is welcome! Thank you!

Comment is about SHOOTING STARS (blog)

i was floating along with the romance of that 'til you burst my bubble at the end. i liked that- it's true, too x

Comment is about Girls and bubbles (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

As it is presented it reads well as a performance piece, on the page i feel it would benefit from the stanzas being more visually defined, but maybe thats because i'm rather new to this. would you do a sound clip?
I really like the poem, the images it creates and the message you're sending out. shine on :)

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thanks for the chat , yeah it broke ,
i too have an essay to write :)

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Original item by Simon Rennie

Please feel free to leave ur comments!

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Yeah, he could probably put her six feet below the surface but it was probably worth it. :-)
I'm happy in my bubble by the way.
Janet.x

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Original item by Christopher Dawson