thanx for your comment, Andy! Yes, the latest piece is the sad one, and it's very jumpy in rhythm and uneven, passable lines are not supported by rubbish lines, but i suppose every now and then everybody writes just "steam-out" piece :-) Hope your computer is fine by now.

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Original item by Andy N

i read the sequel before this, chick - this defo feels like a prologue nicely to the second piece..

i hope there is more to come as there is a mystery building here or is it a thriller??????? lol x

Comment is about Last day (blog)

defo could be part off a book - you may need to look at your line endings here in particular, chuck as it is a bit odd in places.

However, the content is good stuff - orange light is nice and the ending while not lovely (if you know what I mean) defo has the feel of a thriller for some reason.

keep it coming! x

Comment is about Last day part ii (blog)

good one pete

Comment is about Make me a child (blog)

un-usual piece, isobel but i enjoyed this...

Comment is about Invisible (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Arsony, arsony, it has to be arsony. Infamy, infamy, someone's got it in for you.
Can it possibly be true that you are cancelling the Bards? Couldn't it possibly take place on the ashes? Was amazed to read about it on the home page - let's hope the character isn't spoilt when they rennovate it.
Hope to see you soon anyway. Isobel x

Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Regan

I loved loved loved this poem! Im all for information, and it seems you have a clear understanding of the world of green and corruption.I was amazed and enjoyed the poem very much!

Comment is about Green is.. (blog)

sounds like part of a book. I like how you write.

Comment is about Last day part ii (blog)

nice. enjoyed many lines, esp
forever refreshed
in the luxuries
of the anonymous.
oh and thnaks for reding my work.

Comment is about Shade-Walking. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

hog...all awash with that same whiskey smelt welsh breath.

love it my brother.

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

Original item by John Darwin

hey john...new poem ferryman has to go in as its most gruesome thing.

ill bring it tomorrow.

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

Original item by John Darwin

thanks paul...some believe the camera steals your soul...which is why i am the firm owner of one xx

Comment is about Old Boars Head, Middleton April 2010 (photo)

ooo good stuff like a revalation...a nightmare...a vision...keep em coming x

Comment is about Last day (blog)

I like this ... though I wanted the second verse to scan with the first. But the emotion I can certainly identify with.
Cx

Comment is about Invisible (blog)

Original item by Isobel

nice

Comment is about Last day (blog)

I could have written this!
Are we on the same wavelength or what?

C'est magnifique ; )
xxx

Comment is about Invisible (blog)

Original item by Isobel

ha!coincidence or.......... your pic showed up on the front page after I just posted this :-)

WOL picture lottery
WOL picture russian roulette
WOL picture bonzai? lets take bets.

Comment is about Invisible (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Isobel, I enjoyed the 'strange comfort' atmosphere. I like the concept, it evoked a feeling of a gateway to someone by means of emoticon, if that makes sense. Its gentle, feels calm

"how strangely comforting to see you there, occupying space,breathing air"

Great!

Comment is about Invisible (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Francine, I think that really the urge to round up to one hundred is the biggy that would be the aspect of human nature that, if I had to pick just one and say despise all human nature for this one reason alone, that would probably be it.

Comment is about To drift (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

well... sometimes, I am comforted by quietly despairing.

Comment is about To drift (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

thank you for your comment about my poi painting. As it happens i sometimes visit Hebden Bridge Trades Club and find atmosphere quite interesting!

YOu can find more of my paintings at my flickre page http://www.flickr.com/photos/35994202@N04/.

BTW was enjoying your poetry! X

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Love this one. Yes - the hope of new beginnings, the acknowledgement of old scars, life, love and humanity with all its grime - ready to be scraped clean and renewed.

Comment is about at the end of your arms (blog)

Thank you for your comment, Andy ! ( somebody said that i should answer comment in profile rather than in the thread). What i absolutely love about this place - nobody said that it reminds Emily Dickinson ( practically the only poet that I know).Artists and amateur artists are not like that - if they give you a compliment it's always accompanied with "it looks like Degas( Monet, Soutine) :-)))

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

not quite sure what you are writing about here, bud but knowing you - it reflects your views and i did enjoy reading it.

narrow shadow image is top though.

keep it coming!

Comment is about Shade-Walking. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

enjoyed this, emma.. i like writing about silence and the gaps in real life where nothing happens.. particularly like the image of cats in the first bit.. good stuff - keep it going! x

Comment is about In Grip Of Silence (blog)

Original item by Emma McCourty

lot already said, pete that sums up what i feel so i won't add any more except saying i really enjoyed this!

Comment is about at the end of your arms (blog)

like the use of the short lines here and the movemnet in the piece, kathyn - not quite sure where the piece is leading to however(but it is very early so perhaps i am missing something - lol) x

Comment is about bodytalkin' (blog)

lot off detail in such a short piece... seems a bit different to other stuff of yours i have read - not sure what are you doing with your writing, chick but would consider trying to get this published or if you are writing for a collection - put it in x

Comment is about Winters eve (blog)

You need to cheer up, get some medication and take Mystic Ted more seriously

Comment is about To drift (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Lots of interesting concepts, not sure about the poem, Mr Shrodinger. The numbers never add up, and time is just a an artificial construct anyway. Telomeres don't tie your life up, they just stop it from going wonky round the edges (some of us less effectively than others!); and a future tied to tealeaves ... are you trying to say you just gotta picka pocket or two? If you keep on looking for meaning in the completely arbitrary you'll end up finding god you know! ... and THEN where will you be?
;-)
Cx

Comment is about To drift (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Alors... J'attends toujours une réponse...
Tu sais que je suis patiente, mais quand même !

Comment is about To drift (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Hi Isobel, thanks for your feedback and lovely words on 'Ankle Chain', means a lot that you liked it. x . Peter.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Do you still Dib Dib Dib then Jane?

Thanks for your comment - glad you enjoyed it. Might try to make the Howcroft this month - it would be good to catch up. x

Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)

Original item by jane wilcock

Thanks for the link Ann - yes it did go on a bit - I guess sometimes you just have to be there! It is good to see old traditions being kept alive though. So much of our culture is now influenced by American TV.
I had a good bank holiday anyway - for once made a trip South that didn't involve painful traffic jams each way. Perhaps the bad weather put people off travelling!
Hope you had a good one. x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks Cynthia,I take your point but I like to think forgiveness is possible and is in all of us.

Comment is about Brothers & Sisters (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

thank you for commenting me. I think this one is wonderful! You can clearly imagine it all, like in a short videoclip.

Comment is about Becoming Real (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

I'm sorry for not giving you more notice about the new rules for WOLOP Cynthia - I just suddenly realised that there wouldn't be enough voters to run it properly this month. I would hate any effort you have gone to, to go to waste, though. Let me have the list of worthy poems you have already compiled and I will add them to the list for May - that way, they get to be highlighted and possibly chosen. Let me know about good May ones as you go along, then you don't have to trawl through at the end. I so wish we had another 50 site members like you - you have an enthusiasm and the commitment that I adore.
Isobel x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi I hope 'On The Front' makes some kind of sense. I didn't realise it was such hard going! I like 'A Time That Glowed' a lot. The title for a start is intriguing and it's full of telling detail. The final couplet is very strong. Yes, great about he book and the fact I can draw a line under stuff that's been knocking around so long.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

thank you for your comment I suppose "seed of death" means all these things rolled in one. The poem is started as an answer to my friend , who is younger than me. But it can be interpreted differently

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

interesting angle on the puree.
Chris, Ann, Cynthia, thanks for these comments on this one. I apologise for using the blogs as a virtual workspace as opposed to posting the finished product, but for some reason it works that way for me, it only makes sense once i hit the post button. Its almost like there is a barrier that is only lifted once posted, not sure why. I always wanted to share my ideas, a form of confessional therapy, from the earliest age. I suppose its the same for many of us, it must be a challange to write for 'an exercise' how can we write without an emotional connection to the subject. I think there is a debate / thread on this.

i think ill stick with the 'puree' word and have removed 'decompose' though it is close to 'compote', intersting Ann that you used the word 'Jar' (which i agreed with 'decompose' did 'Jar' ) but also it connects with 'Jar..of...' like a jam jar, as I always thought emotions quite like jam in a jar, sweet, messy, screwed down, lid on emotion etc......

other poets have used the idea, I think Donalds Maple Syup was one.

Comment is about at the end of your arms (blog)

Wow, Pete, line after line presses on with vital, fresh ideas and gripping images. 'Grotesques and gargoyles' captured my attention immediately, and 'permafrosted problems' grabbed me totally. The rest of the poem just continued to command total commitment.

Comment is about at the end of your arms (blog)

Really good, Val. It's an honest topic to hit head on. You have highlighted so many tensions that a little mutual respect would circumvent. I, myself, don't think that many of these relationship crises are actually forgiven, let alone forgotten. In my opinion, toleration isn't really happiness.

Comment is about Brothers & Sisters (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

The 's' sounds do induce a soporific mood. Your chosen words are musical as well, in vowel assimilation. (This is downright 'catching'. I'm not making fun, only amazed at the influence of words.

Comment is about Slow down (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

thanx, Cynthia! yes, the picture is mine. I like to dance and meet lots of people who are ( whatever you call it - spiritual, new age, or gaia...Thank you for your comment! X

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

"asparagus" Hi Cyn - and many thanks. No - I missed J-Lo on TV; she's lovely, but about as bright as a cheese sandwich though, but I'd forgive her that ;)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Ann, this is very good. The theme is consistent, well supported with some original imagery: 'like a homoerotic missile' is excellent. I make one suggestion: 'zooming through the water' might be better, with the repeated 'oo' sound actually simulating the idea of swift, lean motion. And, perhaps, more accurate. As always, just a thought.

Comment is about the biggest splash (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks Greg. A friend drew my attention to a story a couple of weeks ago of a bus driver in Birmingham who'd been sacked for reading a book whilst driving his bus.A passenger posted a clip on You Tube.I was sort of challenged to write about it. I'd love to know what he was reading!Probably not On The Road!I have this idea now of performing it using cardboard signs with shop names on like Dylan did with Subterranean Homesick Blues.

Comment is about Reading On The Road (blog)

Lots of good ideas in this, Ann. The splash of the beautiful pool and the beautiful people swimming in it, and the careless splash of the paint pot in old age, which turns out to be another masterpiece after all. Enjoyed it!

Comment is about the biggest splash (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

This is very interesting, Dave. By limiting yourself in the words you've chosen you've found yourself exploring new territory. It has a marvellous calmness and sense of freedom. It's strange how restrictions can liberate us!

Comment is about Slow down (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Ray, I loved this. I think that all poets must have attention deficit disorders, or else they'd miss so much going on around them. As you certainly haven't in this poem. You virtually provide a video with it, so many sights seen out of the window. And as for the bus driver reading On The Road ...!

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