a very pretty poem this, somehow tanatalising and suggestive too. I love the line to pluck that subtle pinkly plate. Subtle and somehow sexy!
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I think you are being a little prejudiced there Therm. I have known very many lovely Southerners. They are just not as immediately open to strangers. Once you break the ice, we are all the same.
Good luck with the auditions Beulah - I'll be crossing my fingers for you!
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Got to agree with the others. Lovely!
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Thu 26th Nov 2009 16:58
Wigan is around halfway up the M6, it gets a poor rep because the majority of the people who live there are hardworking, honest and friendly. Descended in the Main from gritty mine workers, millwrights, blacksmith’s and carpenters. In other words people familiar with integrity and community spirit, as oppose to the soft skinned pencil necked thieving pen pushers that seem to be rampant down South. ha ha I enjoyed that rant ;-))) The gas towers on the railway and ‘ The road to Wigan Pier’didn’t help though.TC X
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Goodness, thank you guys.
Truly appreciated.
Comment is about Petal (blog)
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quite nice, quite fresh the virgin (memory).
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 26th Nov 2009 15:49
having thought-yes,nice list Chris-regards-Stef
Comment is about typical archetypal archetypes (blog)
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The idea here is very effective but I would have liked to have been carried along with it. The archetypes seem disjointed somewhat. Isn't there a Z?
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<Deleted User> (6292)
Thu 26th Nov 2009 15:42
I have never written a Dear John letter but here goes
,Dear John,
Please be aware that this is a POEM please except that as read and written.
I understand from previous posts and comments that you have just completed your 2nd poem, and are coming hard and fast on the rails to catch up to your third not withstanding that you have undertaken an OU course on Poetry no less where they advise you to omit adjectives and avoid purple patches. Sounds good to me,
Good luck with your third.
Once again many thanks for your comments.
Augusta x
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Thu 26th Nov 2009 15:42
Hi, thank you for taking the time to read my poem and comment, I have always struggled to look poverty full square in the eye, I have worked in some deprived places too, Nigeria probably being the worst I will never get used to it. I am not keen on London either it is an unfriendly place from my experience, you should come to Wigan there is only the odd busker or two in the town centre ;-)) TC
Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)
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a bitch of a hangover mate.
Comment is about Drunk & naked in a graveyard (blog)
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well drawn..graphic, but ummmm
Comment is about Road Block (blog)
True.
Comment is about Blind Innocence (blog)
amen.
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 26th Nov 2009 15:17
mmmmmmm? thinking.........Stef
Comment is about typical archetypal archetypes (blog)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Thu 26th Nov 2009 15:15
smooth and sweet as syrup Chris-love it-Stef
Comment is about Petal (blog)
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nope. it must have been the cat. pithy
Comment is about eyelash (blog)
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Thu 26th Nov 2009 14:52
Good afternoon,
Thank you so much for reading my poem and your generous comments. .
The question of honesty is a doubt throughout the poem, is the girl being honest with herself, her emotions are saying one thing her fear another and foremost her lust and sexual arousal quite another. The honesty of the writer is paramount and of course I am being honest many girls are placed or place them selves in this situation, between a rock and a hard place.
The writer in this instance was the young girl within the poem.
Once again many thanks for your honesty and comment..
Augusta x
Comment is about stephen smith (poet profile)
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Love the feel of this...
Beautifully captured : )
Comment is about s-wave (blog)
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yea i know wat ya mean my problems are of a more smoked nature but same boat really, jese me freinds back home call me kealo haha coincidence!
Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)
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thanks Isobel. As usal there is more in the mortar than the pestle. Bet the young ones don't know that saying. Have two auditions coming up. Now if I get there then I have to get a part in one show at least. yeah.
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am i doing a karate move here? lol
Comment is about Andy N at the Waterside Arts Centre, Sale November 2009 (photo)
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Thu 26th Nov 2009 12:38
Hi Andy, sorry but nothing showing up in the chat box. It might be my connection.
Text me if you like. :-)
Janet.x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
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Kealo! Thanks for your comment on my Istanbul piece. I have something in common with those two poets and I don't mean my poetry.
Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)
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Marianne, thanks for your comment on 'drenched'. You are too kind. I yearn frequently :-)
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Anthony, thanks for your kind comments on my poem ''drenched'. It's the way it comes out. I can be quite cheerful in person :-)
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
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Hi Winston, thanks for your comment on 'drenched'. Did the second verse work better when heard?
John
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Hi Winston, thanks for your comment on 'drenched'. Did the second verse work better when heard?
John
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
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Thank you both for the welcome. My partner lost their Dad recently & the night I wrote this I had just lost my Great Aunt. I don't usually write so deep but it all just came out.
Comment is about Sue Hall (poet profile)
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Bringing up a child is a minefield and no-one gives you lessons - all you can rely on is your mum's example and not always that. I hope that when the time is right, you get her back. x
Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)
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there are so many pictures in Homing, a rich tapestry clearly written.
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Hello Sue. This is deep meaningful stuff. Can't wait to read some poems on here, welcome.
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Well I fear that is generally true Cate, tho we are still getting the opportunity display it as a national trait on a regular basis.
Cheers TC, appreciated.
Chris.
Comment is about Bingo (blog)
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tag cunt? it is a good word, yup tag cunt. It was an Irish guy having to lay down the law to someone who did start something when it was not needed. A peaceful Irish guy. anyway thanks for the comments.
Comment is about No Warning (blog)
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<Deleted User> (7073)
Wed 25th Nov 2009 20:56
Hi John Thx for the heads up on 'Final Inspection' as you say it still is a good poem, and as valid today as when it was first written, but this site is about reviewing new work, so I have removed it. Cheers TC
Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)
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must be not enought of us with those ladders, otherwise we might beat the urban glow, Cate. Thanks for the commentxx
Comment is about Pro-articulated Ladders (blog)
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Hello Sue, your words struck a chord with me as I lost someone very close a couple of years ago. I feel that to enjoy our lives we have to jump in and go for it - you sound a very caring thoughtful person, but joy is, I think, as important as anything else in this world. So . . I hope you enjoy being part of WOL, and will write more - and that, indeed, it will be many many years before you get an answer to your questions! We're all in the same boat, and as you get older, that's a comfort.
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Wed 25th Nov 2009 19:37
nice and neat poem Ann-loved it-not really into long winders,most times(Ancient Mariner)cheers chuck-Stef
Comment is about eyelash (blog)
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Wed 25th Nov 2009 19:19
I've had so many poetry miscarriages that this speaks volumes to me. I've not even managed to give birth to one FTND yet
(full term normal delivery)
ie one that is not still in the high dependency unit
thank goodness for poem mothers like Ann F to keep me trying.
Comment is about Having a poem (blog)
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Rachel Bond
Wed 25th Nov 2009 19:12
I really like the poem 'Man was here' arresting , thought provoking and you read it well at Middleton...i hope you write more with similar theme. thanksx
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<Deleted User> (7116)
Wed 25th Nov 2009 19:11
Do you want him to
Are you able to
live with the consequence
hot or cold
I wish you find your wishes
all come true
Comment is about eyelash (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Rachel Bond
Wed 25th Nov 2009 19:08
like it...precious little wondering...
Comment is about eyelash (blog)
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What a fab poem! I used to have one of those articulated ladders... I sent for it out of the said catalogue so I wouldnt have to get any more decorators in. Unfortunately what they fail to tell you is that they weigh more than a ten ton truck and are completely useless unless youre Mr. Universe!!!!
I love the idea of the sleepless housewife polishing the heavens.... not that we see many stars these days, but the idea is lovely!
Cate xx
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Wed 25th Nov 2009 17:31
I like the way you balance this tribute with the leveller in the last but 1 verse. I usually do this to add a little caveat.
I bet it was fantastic to of stood there and took it all in.
Spencer
Comment is about Taj At Sunset (blog)
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thanks for the lovely comments sian, havent written anything for a while and so you have urged me to pick up my pen once more. I love One Step Behind. Beautiful. take care x
Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)
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How sad. Heroism is in short supply these days with the" turn the other way and ignore it "society we live in.
cate xx
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Thu 26th Nov 2009 18:22
thank you for your comments
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