Hmm - from the look of her I reckon she goes bareback :)

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Yeah - get the quantities right -"would yer like to Supersize that?"

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Whadda ya mean fags Banksy? I thought you'd be the first to point out the absence of 'featherlight'. Great for anyone practising a healthy regime and guaranteed to make one lose weight...

I make a point of avoiding anything that says low fat or no sugar. They might as well write 'shite' on the side. Eat whatever you want folks - just get the quantities right.

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I love the title for this Tomas. Also some of the lines and the simplicity of the music.
'And none to blame bar me the fool' is a nice line. I think the following line needs changing a bit though to make it flow better. Not sure also about the boats and ports imagery. Ships that pass in the night is a bit of an overused concept. On the whole a very pleasant piece with a gentle, tender, whistful feel to it.

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Cate
Thanks for the comments on Tom Pudding. I assume when you refer to the old girl chugging away you weren't referring to Our Gert!

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Thanks for the comments on Tom Pudding, Greg. As you probably guess I still live in Selby and had 20 years in mining, so these are well remembered amongst us older lot.
Don't query the accuracy of it all though - there's a fair bit of poetic licence in there. For instance, Prince of Wales Colliery isn't on the canal.

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Thanks all, you're very kind.I really like the 3rd verse, though I say it myself.It's topical.I'm not sure about conceptual sex, actually. Originally, I had consensual sex, but I got told off so I changed it.Now I wonder what's wrong with consensual sex. I've probably not worded that too well. Lager and wine to blame.

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You've forgot the beer too. I think it would be better without the lines in brackets, more real. Dairy Milk Sharing Size - that's a good one. Is there such a thing? Should be the title.

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Fags ! you've forgotten the F***ing Fags !!

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I love the rhyme, flow and story of the poem. Truly, technology is more and more coming in the way of real talking: communication is becoming less and less face to face...

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Thanks both, in a lot of ways this is a happy poem to me, largely because of the of the locals faces on Pont Sully as I chucked the watch in the river and the feeling of freedom I got moments later in a fab riverside cafe. xx

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Here's a gush back, 'Stuck Unsaid' great language. Thanks for your comments on mine, now in yokelsound too.

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Love this!
What the watch, Paris, and the play on 'Seine' represent is brilliant!

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I see this as a meeting up with an old friend who has become completley materialistic and lost their soul in the process. So nice to have your clear presence back here! xx

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Yeh, I've read it again and it's so brutally honest I think it's great. I'm usually a happy bunny, lucky me! I don't think I could survive being a deep soul like you. Having met you, I salute! x

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This is quite interesting. I really like the play on words, and what is implied with the first and last lines...
Also, love the line: 'the ability of landscape to say exactly the opposite of what it means'

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"the ability of landscape to say exactly the opposite of what it means." Great and true. It is so good to see you posting!!!! Maybe another happy outcome of the Hebden Bridge weekend?

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What a wonderful poem. You are so honest, and so poetic! I've only read it once (off to have me tea!) but will return to it, deffo! x

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Love it, brilliant use of rhyme almost hidden with the familiarity of the list.

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Hi Ann, it was great to meet you too, your peonies have been circling my head all week! xx

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Thanks for the comments on Tom Pudding.
Quite spooky that you detect an "Irishness" about it. When I wrote the final lines I kept singing the song "Farewell to the tent and the old caravan, To the gypsy, ti-tum-tim, the travelling man, And farewell to the life of the rover".
Liked the shopping list. It reminds me of the times I've have fish and chips twice with a can of diet coke.

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Thanks All for the comments.
I feel I've missed a trick in not explaining a "snake". A snake happened when a cross-wind caused the trail of pans to, well, er, snake.

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What a wonderfully evocative piece of writing. Like Ray says you can taste the grime and the smoke and hear the old girl chugging along with her industrial load. I really enjoyed reading this!
Cate xx

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Very moving, Rachel.
Love and kisses...................

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Gotta get going Tommy - spookeh, eh?

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Hi Laura...something is happening here...I posted a reply to your 'discussion' and linked to your 'poem' and was immediately struck by the memory of when I was a kid and asked the shopkeeper for a 'thick un-sliced loaf' she laughed as did the women shoppers as I insisted that was what my Ma' asked for. (maybe my Ma' had?)

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Aw, thanks Ann. Lovely thing to say,
Rachel
xxx

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Thanks Cynthia, both for the comments and for the warm wisdom.
it's appreciated,
Rachel
xxx

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I actually didn't notice the rhyme - which to me is a good thing as obvious rhyme brings me out in hives... Must be down to the way you've spaced the verses, as well as to the plainess of the language and the 'unpoetical' nature of the subject.

I think it works because it doesn't have the poet telling us how to read the poem - we get it by implication.

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Well thank you for the inspiration, Steven - managed to recreate most of that list in about 20 minutes, hehe

Clearly, there is artistic licence at work - the original didn't rhyme, nor could I remember the original items!

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I like this - the aspiration and the reality summed up in one list

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Well done Steven.

Apparently the Eskimos have at least 150 ways of saying 'White as...' unfortunately they all involve references to snow.

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I love the cut-up & Far Too Real the best - but then I would love the cut-up...

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Yes - I think if I was in the same room as "Her Fordness" I'd probberly be on the receiving end of a glass of Lambrusco :)

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I'll look forward to reading some more then :-)
That facility has been there ages.
Enjoy your coffee.x

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Janet - I've just found out it can accept open form poetry, with all the spaces and indents intact. Which the discussion forums don't.I'm actually typing this in the Starbucks across from Fallowfield Station/Remedy/Sainsbury's where the poem is set.

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Thanks for the comment on my attempt on the freedom theme.
I won't say where it alludes to. I prefer to leave it to the imagination in the hopes it will perhaps allow readers to be reminded of a similar place they might have been themselves.
It's a trial and error with poetry i have going on here which i haven't tried before so hope it works in that sense for you :-)

Janet.x

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Nice to see you posting in blogs Steven :-)

As to the entry, it certainly evokes a varied mix of imagery and colourful ones at that.
I like the ending as if there was a post mortem. It's different, i'll say that.x

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Wot Janet said - the rhythm of this is right up my street, and I LOVE the story.

'Never no more than 3 miles an hour' rings of Irish songs to me (thinking about it, it's specifically The Wild Rover I'm thinking of!)

I was listening to some old Loretta Lynn last night, and one of her songs struck me that it could never have been written by anyone else - it's called The Pill, and documents what it was like to be a mother in the Appalachians and how liberating it was to take the contraceptive. Stuff like this needs to be documented - so nice one, and thanks, I've learned something today :)

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Before you get sore? Oh aye?!

I like lots of this - this line especially 'your walls were beginning to bleed'. I don't know what it's alluding to, but I like the implicit danger of it.

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I enjoy reading poetry that is uplifting. This isn't one of them but it is very well thought out with a very humane thread running through it which is most likely due to the authors own nature :-)

A bit of cognitive behavioural therapy might go a long way for the subjects.x

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I just adore the rhythm in this as well as the story within it.
It's factual, fun and atmospheric :-)

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I'm no techno tart! :-)

Loving this poem Ray. Gentle rhythm has great effect. It's so smooth! Those last two stanzas are super and there are some great lines and imagery too.x

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I decided to have a bash at the freedom theme. Comments welcome :-)

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Glad to hear it - I thought I was going nuts :)

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But, Winston, how could you resist the temptation to put this:"Lord, this is hard. I don’t want to do it any more. It bores me too much!" after "do what you like with me,"?

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bravo!

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Oh Mr Plowes! Your poem is so much better than mine! You can go off people you know! ;-) xxxx

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Nah - she's a babe :)
(vinegar strokes)
Hi there - I liked the muntjack poem, but the later one, I couldn't make any sense of it.
I didn't want to say so on the message board though in case it's just me being thick. XX

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And in turn I have taken these words and rearanged then again to create something else entirely. Who's next? An interesting exercise, being limited to a small vocabilary of words that wouldn't normally come to mind :-) Win x

A visitor for Mademoiselle Fanshawe


This dear young man
with a magnificent Irish Hat
of a soft green colour,
old open laced boots.
and a particularly watchful eye!

do what you like with me,
(I whisper several times.
maintaining an air of misplaced innocence.)

Poor Dr John . . .!


after A. Foxglove after C.Bronte

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