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Surfaces May Be Slippery

 

This poem was recently published in Manhattan Poetry Review :

 

Due to inclement syntax

it seemed we were in the Far North

the next station is Isengaard (sic.)

 

            Fafnir and Thor skate eyes

            over  snowblind streets

            stationary with cars

 

a group of bleak and morbid etchings

there’s only so many ways to say white as

and we’re running rapidly out of them

 

I just fell over on the ice

 

Strengthening south-westerly

one-eyed Odin makes coffee with cardamom pods

porridge with raisins and fruit

 

I bought 5 bags of shopping pizza and catfood frozen ready meals

            Hot honeyed mead for the halls

 

No ship navigates the whale roads of Central Lancashire

            hearts low on grit

            no firm grip on the scene

the ability of landscape to say exactly the opposite of what it means

 

I just fell over on my arse

 

Loki offsets his carbon with body heat

Prius abandoned on the road     dragon boats on frozen canals

Snake Pass                  Cat and Fiddle

 

I just went over on my arse

 

hunkering down

giant of pent-up emotion

 

Valhalla burns its chintz to keep warm

the next station is Winter

            Baldur the beautiful ice

 

Due to wet weather

            dances with Freya on the bridge

syntax may be slippery

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The Word No Is A Long Sentence ►

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Steven Waling

Sat 23rd Oct 2010 16:30

Cynthia - they publish quite a lot of British poetry anyway so they're probably used to it. And the section I was in was a feature on the poetry of Manchester & Liverpool, edited by Liverpool poet Chris MacCabe.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 23rd Oct 2010 16:12

It is good, Steven, skittering around with syntactical annihilation and strong allusions. Interesting that Manhattan accepted 'arse' instead of 'ass'; did they qualify you as English?

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Sat 23rd Oct 2010 12:37

Congratulations on this being published :-)

It feels very cold and the scenery is ice blue. I love the coffee with cardamon pods that warms it up just enough to read to the end without the need for a scarf.x

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Francine

Fri 22nd Oct 2010 19:42

This is quite interesting. I really like the play on words, and what is implied with the first and last lines...
Also, love the line: 'the ability of landscape to say exactly the opposite of what it means'

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Ann Foxglove

Fri 22nd Oct 2010 19:16

"the ability of landscape to say exactly the opposite of what it means." Great and true. It is so good to see you posting!!!! Maybe another happy outcome of the Hebden Bridge weekend?

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Paul F Blackburn

Fri 22nd Oct 2010 15:53

Well done Steven.

Apparently the Eskimos have at least 150 ways of saying 'White as...' unfortunately they all involve references to snow.

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