I've finally worked it out Taylor. The shape is you and lover drunk on wine, entwined. Very clever. ?
Comment is about We (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
I'm with Ray on this Keith. As much as we don't like the way things are going it will take mass people movements to have any effect. Society has become too greedy and lacking in empathy. We can write poems (which fellow poets will appreciate, yes) till the cows come home but it won't make a scrap of difference. Sadly.
On the other hand, poetry provides an individuals way of 'getting it out' and expressing themselves. Even if we end up being voices in the wilderness.....
I feel the same way as you Keith. Your poem expresses it well ?
Comment is about Too Late (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Has all the ingredients of a clever, well-thought-out fun haiku..?
Comment is about Joy of Aging (blog)
Original item by Jezer Ureña
Thank you Keith and thank you Jacob. I am fascinated by the fourth dimension, time; man is not made to live in the continuous present but past, present and future mingle always to catch him unawares, in a different time and place. This is illustrated most poignantly, for me, in the Cornish poet Charles Causley's haunting poem 'Eden Rock':
They are waiting for me somewhere beyond Eden Rock:
My father, twenty-five, in the same suit
Of Genuine Irish Tweed, his terrier Jack
Still two years old and trembling at his feet.
My mother, twenty-three, in a sprigged dress
Drawn at the waist, ribbon in her straw hat,
Has spread the stiff white cloth over the grass.
Her hair, the colour of wheat, takes on the light.
She pours tea from a Thermos, the milk straight
From an old H.P. sauce-bottle, a screw
Of paper for a cork; slowly sets out
The same three plates, the tin cups painted blue.
The sky whitens as if lit by three suns.
My mother shades her eyes and looks my way
Over the drifted stream. My father spins
A stone along the water. Leisurely,
They beckon to me from the other bank.
I hear them call, ‘See where the stream-path is!
Crossing is not as hard as you might think.’
I had not thought that it would be like this.
Comment is about Poem for an anonymous Moorish Poet on the defeat at Seville November 1248 (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Sadly Keith all we can really do is our own thing whatever that may be, and that's all anyone really does in truth. If we want to be saviours of the world we need to have a guiding light. Some have that, like yourself, many don't. There is fire and brimstone in your poem, and is a genuine plea, well done.
I feel perdition is an old testament kind of word and not really helpful in normal parlance, but it adds weight to the poem undoubtedly.
Ray with respect.
Comment is about Too Late (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Big Sal
Sat 13th Oct 2018 22:06
Looks like a great book.
Comment is about The Other Guernica: Derek Sellen, Cultured Llama (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Big Sal
Sat 13th Oct 2018 22:01
You have to love yourself before you can love others correctly. Good piece.?
Comment is about Me Not Me (blog)
Original item by Joanna Halliday
The instant I read this I was overcome with sadness.
Good poem
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about Star crossed (blog)
Original item by Rosie Priest
Sat 13th Oct 2018 21:28
we have and still, have the same audacious kind of visitor in
our house. In fact, he has been here for so long we have given him or her? the adopting name of Freddy. But since I'm not up about fly gender and it is a she, we may have to use the name Freda haha. Thank you. Jemima.
Comment is about The Fly Who Came In From The Cold (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Sat 13th Oct 2018 21:19
and while we tarry time is passing. A great poem Keith. Thank you. Jemima.
Comment is about Too Late (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Big Sal
Sat 13th Oct 2018 19:58
Good to see you going strong with the music, and keeping up the vibe!
I always thought that was great how you transitioned the poems over to song format.
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
A very clever and well written poem which begs the unanswerable.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about "WE" and.. (blog)
Original item by AVISHEK GHOSH
Superb.Read again and again. Thanks for sharing.
Comment is about Too Late (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Big Sal
Sat 13th Oct 2018 17:24
Great piece Keith, and the last three lines end it well.?
Comment is about Too Late (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Big Sal
Sat 13th Oct 2018 17:21
What about the flies that don't fly at all, you know, the ones that walk carefree across the surface of the table like their wings don't work?
What's up with that??
Comment is about The Fly Who Came In From The Cold (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Big Sal
Sat 13th Oct 2018 17:08
Very well done with the topic. You carried it well, and the brutal honesty must be appreciated.
Great pic by the way, you two look like the happiest of couples.???
(I had to copy Anya's style of comment a bit for this)
Comment is about My Wedding Day (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Big Sal
Sat 13th Oct 2018 16:46
❤
Taboos need to be written about more often to help in removing the surrounding stigma associated with them. Whether returning soldier, struggling mother, or homeless beggar - the problems are often not known by a huge portion of the population as the problems are often glamorized or downplayed.
Great piece filled with excellent emotion, and a familiar story of suicide I'm sure for too many. ?
Comment is about Woman incomplete (blog)
Original item by TROY
An entertaining piece but a bloody irritant when one arrives uninvited.
Thanks for this
Keith
Comment is about The Fly Who Came In From The Cold (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Emotionally charged take care Damon..?
Comment is about The Starry Night (blog)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
Thanks guys.
Don't know if I can stand up to pun-ishment like that Rose!
Comment is about Where’s The Chuffin’ Cheese (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Having the sane problem her D.K. excellent...?
Comment is about The Fly Who Came In From The Cold (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Thank you for reading We Hugh..always appreciated...Taylor ?
Comment is about hugh (poet profile)
Original item by hugh
Thank you for commenting on We Avishek....?
Comment is about AVISHEK GHOSH (poet profile)
Original item by AVISHEK GHOSH
Thank you for commenting on We Trevor much appreciated.. Taylor ?
Comment is about Trevor Alexander (poet profile)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
This is based on a real life event that happened a few months back in India.
A country as rich and complex in its past and future, as it is with present day wide social structure.
FYI sex determination of an unborn child is a punishable offence in India.
Feel free to share your feedback on the subject and the peotry.
Thanks ?
Comment is about Woman incomplete (blog)
Original item by TROY
Thank you for your cement on We Jon..as always it is valued and appreciated... Thank you ?
Comment is about Jon Stainsby (poet profile)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
David and Laura,
You and Jane have together really made my weekend and much more. My appreciation is boundless, my thanks are legion.
Peter T
Comment is about THOUGHTS OF AUTUMN (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
Jane then did give Jim a big kick
And it wasn't where you thought, on his lip
But it had an effect, he doubled up with great pain
Which severely affected his night's kip
That'll teach the old bugga to be smart
Jane thought with a smile on her face
Then suddenly realised what she had done
Would slow things in bed quite a pace
Please forgive me now Hugh for my tack-on
To the ongoing saga of your story
I can't help myself, (I'm a poet)
Who wants things to go on and get more-y ?
Comment is about A missed kiss (blog)
Original item by hugh
<Deleted User> (19836)
Sat 13th Oct 2018 13:39
Graceful and intuitive! You seem to know more about marriage than those who are married! Well done!?
Comment is about AISLE BE SEEING YOU! - Saturday Verse (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Another wonderful poem Peter. Love the analogy with a human life, and this flows like the breeze through the leaves. Some cracking assonance and well-placed understated alliteration. It deserves to be read out loud.
I'm a huge devotee of ephemera, it constantly gives me pleasure.Your knowledge of its importance rings through this.
This is sweet, colourful, lyrical and musical, with some fantastic imagery, and some strong points to be made about how we live our lives.
It's a real shame that every day just seems to be a race on here now, with quantity totally replacing quality. Something like this needs to hang around, and be sipped at slowly.
Lovely, thank you Peter.
Comment is about THOUGHTS OF AUTUMN (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
A wonderful video by Becky Who,
A pleasure to listen and a delight to view.
Well done.
Comment is about My Wedding Day (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Big Sal
Sat 13th Oct 2018 11:55
Thanks for noticing the profile pic!
Great title by the way. A title that simple but workable could suffice for an anthology.
Has a great rhythm to it.?
Comment is about We (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Excellent M.C. and I cry 'No Never'...?
Comment is about AISLE BE SEEING YOU! - Saturday Verse (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Any excuse for a party, eh? ?
Enjoyed this.
Comment is about My Wedding Day (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
John,
I was strangely introduced to you after you so kindly commented on one of my articles on Poets of the Great War. This has led me to explore some of your poetry which I have found fascinating. This particular poem took me back to the Al Hamra in Granada and then to Seville. Andalusia permeates through your words. Thank you for this poem which is so rich in so many ways but the last three lines stopped me in my tracks and made me think even more.
Keith
Comment is about Poem for an anonymous Moorish Poet on the defeat at Seville November 1248 (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 13th Oct 2018 10:39
' grate' poem Trev. I used to date a guy called Gordon Zola who liked cheese-lived near the cheddar gap-but I met him in Wensleydale-called me his little cracker and loved getting on top of me-strangely afflicted by not wanting to go out in the hot sun?.
Eventually got himself into a pickle by crashing his motorbike and sidecar he had bought off two odd characters called Wallace and Gromit ?
Rose ?
Comment is about Where’s The Chuffin’ Cheese (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 13th Oct 2018 10:29
and I'm more than willing to marry my comments to this pearler Mrs C!
Rose ?
Comment is about We (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Good Morning John,
Thank you for your comment on this particular chapter of my series of Poets and the Great War. I appreciate all you have to say and echo your admiration especially for Owen and Sassoon. Both were men of courage not only in the service of their country with Military Medals awarded to each but also their integrity and valour in challenging the very reason for and conduct of the war. They are to be applauded. Poetry indeed became the medium for expression during this futile conflict with many others who wrote some remarkable poems and prose.
My next article deals with the Home Front with a couple more to follow before we arrive at 11 November.
Thank you again,
Keith
Comment is about Poetry & The Great War, a series: 3 The Battle of the Somme (article)
Original item by Mike Took
WM - please see my comment on your WOL page about Capra/Capa etc.
Cheers.
MC
Comment is about DOOM AND GLOOM (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
No longer at the Tap and Spile. Now in the North Bar.
Review is about Poems Prose and Pints on 17 Oct 2018 (event)
To solve the unable-to-do-two-likes problem I'm gonna split each in half (like you would a chocolate bar) and do the nice poet-share bit....?
Comment is about My Very Disjointed Theme Contribution (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Don Matthews
Sun 14th Oct 2018 00:58
I echo Big Sal's comment Becky. Your brutal honesty was appreciated. So well put together and presented ?
Comment is about My Wedding Day (blog)
Original item by Becky Who