Apart from the sheer delight in the lines, " confident in the friction of bare skin" stands out for me Jonathan.
A very fine piece indeed.
Ray
Comment is about Fireweed (blog)
Original item by Jonathan Humble
I think the first line says it all , from that all flows like a stream of dark consciousness -I was thinking of vitriol, a great word, (vitriolic sounds like a new spray cleanser - to be applied liberally! ) Sorry to go off piste.
Best, Ray
Comment is about Crimes against mysanity (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Thanks for the likes Graham and Landi,
The old adage used to be until the threat is illiminated...but I might suggest until the magazine is empty, fire at will.
Thanks again.
David RL Moore
Comment is about Crimes against mysanity (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
A powerful poem for these tough times.
Comment is about What will be is (blog)
Original item by Luke
A splendid poem Luke. A lovely music-filled love song.
Comment is about Dion (blog)
Original item by Luke
I’ve changed my mind several times reading this David. How many bullets are we allowed?
Comment is about Crimes against mysanity (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Thu 20th Mar 2025 19:59
Thank you, Martin, I really appreciate your kind comment! 😊
Comment is about Reverie... (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
<Deleted User> (5011)
Thu 20th Mar 2025 18:07
If I could afford
to buy sand,
a beachful, say,
I'd get my little plastic spade,
and a lot of hessian sacks,
then slowly, carefully,
fill each with bits of beach.
To the top, so there is
no more room.
I'd fasten each one,
tight as a fighter's fist,
then the next, and
the next, until
I had a huge pile
of sacks of sand,
enough to stand
one
on
top
of
the
other.
I would put the first one
beside my front door,
and another
on top of the first,
and so on,
and on,
until you couldn't see
my house for sandbags,
except the door.
Once I'd stacked
the sacks,
I'd empty racks,
of the supermarkets:
loo roll, bread,
fruit, tinned beans,
and coffee
(finest Arabica) -
just the essentials.
When the time
comes - when the
fading sunset appears
to our West,
or the orange glow makes
an off-the-cuff remark -
I would stack the last few,
sand-filled, hessian sacks
in front of my door,
lock it, make myself
comfortable, and
wait for
the inevitable.
Comment is about I Don't Want To Be Great Again (blog)
Original item by Hélène
This poem tells a story anyone can relate to. Nice. Marla
Comment is about Breaking the ice (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
I really like this endearing poem - written from an unusual perspective - it makes for interesting. reading.
Comment is about Breaking the ice (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Hi Ray,
good to see you here, the piece certainly challenges us all to think...if not for those suffering at least for ourselves in years to come.
It is difficult for partners to soldier on when the other is suffering, to witness it and to remain in a receptive mode...this may sound selfish but I feel it is realistic.
Maybe the trick is to love the sufferer and save the bitterness for the affliction.
Things certainly do not get easier for us as we get older. We become invisible to many.
Love to you both pal.
David
Comment is about THE TORMENTOR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Hi Lorraine, thanks for your comment on my TO LET poem. It just very strange to me that we all have a room we all use every day and yet it somehow feels strange to think it is not solely ours alone, knowing what a refuge it can be. Enjoying your work also.
Kind regards,
Rich.
Comment is about Lorraine Settanni (poet profile)
Original item by Lorraine Settanni
Hi Rich, thank you for your image of a nurturing safe haven. I love the energy of your vision.
best wishes,
Lorraine
Comment is about TO LET (blog)
Original item by Rich Brewer
succinct and too the point . Wonderful
Comment is about Traveler's Aid (blog)
Original item by Mike McPeek
Sorry to hear that you have this debilitating condition. It can't be pleasant but none the less I love your poem, particularly
the lines
but not this festering blood bound
contagion that swims through you
and never comes up for air.
marvellous. Glad to see you have not lost your creative edge.
Comment is about THE TORMENTOR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I like this Holden not just for its clever use of words but also for its simple sense of poetry. Nice one
Comment is about Reverie... (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
This is a clever play on words Stephen. Nice one
Comment is about The Player (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Hey Tom,
Your comment had me grinning from ear to ear! 😆 I'm thrilled you enjoyed the poem—your kind words made my day. More laughs coming your way soon!
Cheers,
Rolph
Comment is about TIEd Up in Overcompensation (blog)
Original item by Rolph David
Thu 20th Mar 2025 13:31
Like Graham, I have mixed feelings about 'likes" here, Ray. It is a great achievemnt to write something so profound and readable on such a tragic subject. This is the sort of poem that should be widely read, though behind it there is a difficult personal situation.
I can only sympathise and admire the day-to-day courage.
Comment is about THE TORMENTOR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I feel guilty 'liking' this Ray. I was really pleased to see a new entry by yourself and then I read this tortuous piece about such a pernicious debilitating malady.
You imply it is your better half/partner who is the real sufferer but suffice to say that you have put the fear of christ up us all as we age. Bravo!
Comment is about THE TORMENTOR (blog)
Original item by ray pool
😅😅😅 hilarious Rolph, and then some ( more please 👍 )
A side split thank you sir!
my rib tickled regards my friend!
Tom
Comment is about TIEd Up in Overcompensation (blog)
Original item by Rolph David
Thank you Hélène for liking
''The holding back of tears and anger'
kind regards
Tom
Comment is about Hélène (poet profile)
Original item by Hélène
Thanks @Rolph David. Been a while since but I find it beneficial to craft along the range and be bothered to do so periodically. Most appreciated 🌷🙏🏻🕊
Comment is about each and every way (blog)
Original item by Red Brick Keshner
Thanks @Tom Merton 🌷kind of you to say so🙏🏻🕊
Comment is about each and every way (blog)
Original item by Red Brick Keshner
Dear Rolph,
Thank you for such an insightful and encouraging message. I wanted to explore the idea of hidden intentions being brought to light. The thought that there is comfort in the truth being revealed is something I also find peace in.
Your words are greatly appreciated.
Kind regards,
Naomi
Comment is about PLOTTERS' FALL (blog)
Original item by Naomi
Dear Naomi,
Your yesterday's poem carries such a powerful message. You brilliantly remind us that no matter how much someone thinks they can hide their intentions in darkness, the truth always finds a way to shine through. The way you personify darkness as a force that exposes hidden schemes is striking—it’s like you’re showing that no plot is truly safe from being revealed. There’s something almost comforting in knowing that, no matter the deceit, truth has a way of standing bare.
Kind regards,
Rolph
Comment is about PLOTTERS' FALL (blog)
Original item by Naomi
Manish, you’ve captured something so powerful in your journey. It’s inspiring how you went from waiting for life to carry you, to learning how to take control and harness your own path. By letting go of doubts and taking action, you found real growth and happiness. Your realisation that waiting for serendipity would have kept you stuck in a fantasy is a beautiful reminder to embrace life as it comes, and create your own truth. It’s a message of empowerment and living fully.
Kind regards,
Rolph
Comment is about Wake-Up Call (blog)
Original item by Manish
Hello Red,
Such a very different poem on your part! I also like it very much! In the search for truth, words can twist, but in carefully crafted verse, clarity shines through. The "tree of truth" rooted in simple verse suggests that amidst complexity, something pure remains. Poetry doesn’t lead us through darkness but lifts us with crystal-clear meaning, guiding us along a winding path where truth holds sway. Great job.
Regads,
Rolph
Comment is about each and every way (blog)
Original item by Red Brick Keshner
Hello leonidas: Three years of Russian invasion of Ukraine in violation of international law were already over on 24 February. I like your poem - a nice idea.
Comment is about "Beware the Ides of March" (blog)
Original item by leonidas kazantheos
Another big thank you to my loyal readers. I really appreciate it. Thanks to: Tom Merton, Naomi, Manish, Flyntland, K. Lynn, hugh and Red B. Keshner.
👍
Comment is about Give Her Back: A Sonnet For Liberty (blog)
Original item by Rolph David
Perfect poetry. Thank you VERY much Red'
best of regards as always
Tom
Comment is about each and every way (blog)
Original item by Red Brick Keshner
Thanks for likes: Red Brick Keshner, hugh, Holden & Naomi. ☘️👍
Comment is about Celtic Man 🇮🇪 ☘️ (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Thank you very much, Rolph. I sympathise with your concern that Trump is overshadowing everything at the moment. This must stop one day...musn't it?
Comment is about Fawn, Lick and Grovel (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Hoping that this wasn’t too irreverent in tone or delivery 🙏🏻🕊☘️
Comment is about just my 🍀 luck (blog)
Original item by Red Brick Keshner
I thought the use of the word "Revelation" was way too far up its own arse, I deleted it.
Anyway, lets bring it "Closer to the Heart"
David RL Moore,
love to all xx
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Comment is about Glenborrodale (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Thank you reading my poem about Stuart Adamson.
Comment is about Sea To Cross (blog)
Original item by Mike Bartram
Thanks for the comments Uilleam and Flyntland 😃 I had a lot of time on my hands in January to contemplate the freezing city. I normally prefer to write narrative poetry but here, I just thought I'd let the cold grey winter in...
Thanks also to Red Brick, Hugh, Stephen, Aisha, Holden, Helene, Yasoda, Yanma and Naomi for reading!
Comment is about City of Rooftops (blog)
Original item by Tom
Thank you, Rolph. You are right. It was pure nostalgia, and I saw it through the eyes of a child. For those who worked in the mill and went back to their little back-to-backs and narrow cobbled streets, it was unrelentingly hard.
Thank you also to Holden and Naomi for your likes, they mean a lot to me.
Comment is about MEMORIES OF BOLTON (blog)
Original item by Flyntland
Thanks to RBK, Hugh and Landi for the likes and comments.
David RL Moore
Comment is about Glenborrodale (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
No escape, no easy answers.
I heard a guy hint recently that if you don't know what to do, then you should probably do nothing.
That's my escape )
Comment is about No Escape (blog)
Original item by Jeff Bresee
speaking of personal musings...
someone asked me recently if there were anything about which I was passionate. Sensing a catch, I answered, "my autonomy".
Maybe I should learn to let my guard down sometimes.
Then again, maybe not )
Comment is about three words (blog)
Original item by Landi Cruz
...on 'whale-watching season' - Thank you so much @Rolph 🌷so glad that it came across just as you so eloquently detailed. I too can never look at a grill without noticing the wider world around me. 🙏🏻🕊️
Comment is about Rolph David (poet profile)
Original item by Rolph David
Thank you so much @Rolph 🌷so glad that it came across just as you so eloquently detailed. I too can never look at a grill without noticing the wider world around me. 🙏🏻🕊️
Comment is about whale-watching season (blog)
Original item by Red Brick Keshner
"why are you in such a hurry..."
what a great verse.
Comment is about Gift of Time (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
A lovely piece of writing, and suits some recent personal musings of my own about being in a state of want in this world where there's always something else for which to strive.
Comment is about Glenborrodale (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
raypool
Fri 21st Mar 2025 16:36
A bit of adolescence creeping in I reckon Martin. So many long marriages might have started in this fashion that it is believable with the benefit of age!
Ray
Comment is about Breaking the ice (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder