What an absolutely beautiful poem. It is very gentle and I love your rhyme scheme. A very soothing poem.

Mel
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Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

A fantastic poem Jordan. I really like the format of the poem. I think having stagnation on one line works really well.

Mel
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Original item by Jordan

Mirna

The title intrigued me very much as did your poem. You seem to have a heightened sense of awareness and certainly you bring a spiritual element to your writes.

Fascinating to read...

Ally

Comment is about Music of silence (blog)

Mirna

I feel your frustration in this write. As though you are both locked in a chamber with no doors and it seems the only key is to speak out.

Mysterious

Ally

Comment is about Oddness (blog)

Nice one Jordan, like your philosophy and the way you have played with words, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Fiction (blog)

Original item by Jordan

You're always up to no good!!

Enjoyed this, yes would have liked a line though about the Dutch giving the Italians a good hiding!! Like the line about Germany's invasion of the Polish box! cheers Jeffarama!

Comment is about Wilkommen Euro 2008 (blog)

Wow. Loved your poem and I'm a smug veggie (and now contemplating veganism).
Thanks :)

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Antonio

Was trying to picture your write with this scary cannons and the frightening Bertha woman...Not sure what kind of cinema you have been watching when creating this poem. A little mystery there - Interesting write!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

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HI, Richard

The poem shows your innocent teenage love toward someone special...A little mystery, thoughts hidden there. Sounds like a Challenge write.

Thank you,
Zuzanna

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Alison
The poem shows your desire to escape from where you are. Dreamy style of a write.

Nice short poem.

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Astray (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Hello, Pete

I am not much of a meat person and never was. I like fish on occasion and love natural foods. I am upset when the animals are being tortured kept as slaves to be fatten and sold to the butcher shop. That really annoys me that my stomach turns around. Sorry…The cave people were hunting for a natural animal and they consume raw meats. Still our Eskimo people are doing that on the far North. They seem to be healthy people. The picture you have in your poem show the meat being poisoned disgusting to eat. When our children getting obese and sick so the adults too. Chemicals given to the farm animals rose on the farm. Yes, it is scary world now days. Thank you for the thought provoking poem. EXCELLENT!!

Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

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Antonio

This is very nice write, really enjoyed the honest approach toward writing as well as the humorous side of it!

"""As writer’s block hits and the clock ticks by
My tea’s all gone, the chocolate tasted fine
And I’ll walk home, now that this poem’s done"""

Great picture painted in my mind when you walked home on Friday - happy that the day was done...Smile…EXCELLENT!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Sky of blue and tea of green (blog)

Mirna

Beautiful write- you have caught the very essence of the emotions when love is present.
The picture shows FOUR SEASONS as in a complete life circle. Really like the end how you wrapped up the emotions… Great poem !

Thank you,
Zuzanna

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Hello, Phil

Wow! The poem is a real good write. You have caught all life events. A la Grand use of metamorphosis, too…There is politics, sport and every day chores. The write is a huge picture that embedded many things in one frame. You have given a lot of thinking to this composition of words. There are some feelings of dislikes as well as criticism in a good way. It makes me feel at times if it was like a song to sing...GREAT WRITE SIR!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Squabbling Bubbles (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Hello, Mirna

You got all perfect in this poem. This is exactly how kids are today. With no computer, there is no life...Smile. I remember how we played with our neighbour’s kids and had to find different games to entertain ourselves. We sang songs; learn from each other new games... Now the brains of our children are not expanding, they tend to shrink-Glued to the computer screen…Picture perfect not only in you write but the picture that you attached...Smile. Beautiful Poem !

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Children’s Future (blog)

Dear Ally

The picture you have chosen is amazing!!
This almost shows a full ellipse of the Moon.

Awesome!

Zuzanna

Comment is about An Ode to a Poet (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Alison

Your poem shines!
It has depth of feelings and emotions. It shows the poet that enjoys being with the group of other writers, beautifully penned. Thank you for the special ‘ODE TO POET' It is wonderful piece of poetry. GREAT JOB!!!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about An Ode to a Poet (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Dear Alison

You poem is very nice… Shows unfold mystery especially in the last stanza. I have enjoyed reading your thoughts provoking poem...Keep up the great work!


Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Truths Untold (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Hello, Belinda

Good to hear from you!
Hope you are doing well there.
I like your poem about lilies.

Sounds like a litlle song!

Keep in touch!

SAYONARA ~ Zuzanna

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Belinda

Hello, Antonio

Agree with you on the Euro CUP... Yes, indeed some TEAMS are better then others, Still the Manchester is the BEST!! The other ones need more practice, to get more speed and action. Like you poem as always...Very good to read, it is like a listening to a TSN - Canada's Sports Leader...Smile - GREAT JOB!
Thank you for the comment on my latest addition.
Hope you are well after the clinical trials.

Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Wilkommen Euro 2008 (blog)

How enchanting, nice stuff Ally, you're on a roll! Keep it up, enjoy your work, Jeff

Comment is about Truths Untold (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Hi Ally, very thought provoking and deep as we are! like it and lovely pic! Jeff

Comment is about An Ode to a Poet (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Hi Mirna, You're so right, I try to get my 8 yr old daughter to do some normal stuff!! Great poem and love the pic, best wishes Jeff

Comment is about Children’s Future (blog)

Hi Barrie Obviously I don't think it obscure but if you check out some details of the arctic hare's habits and the mythology surrounding the animal, it may help. Here I'm almost identifying with it, as a mother, (and grandmother!)
Best Christine

Comment is about christine bousfield (poet profile)

Original item by christine bousfield

Hey Belinda

How is Japan? lovely, lovely poem. sending you love

Mel

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Original item by Belinda

well said Clarissa! some good points.
I think you could write some great stuff on this

Comment is about he kills animals (blog)

David Andrew says he'll provide the full-sized versions of the photos on request, to poetry.gym@ntlworld.com. In some cases he has more images.

Comment is about Gemma O'Neill, singer with The Dirty Normans at Riders, Bolton June 2008 (photo)

HI There, you know I have had a pet Hedghog, wrote a story or two about him. Had to wear gloves to handle him, but all in all it was interesting.he would get a little upset if people moved to fast and roll into a ball of prickles, thus his name Mr Prickles, he would hiss a bit....soooo we would watch him alot. I think they are adorable really, those little black eyes and that tiny nose! Mine did not have fleas, but the dog did, so I understand what you say! take care and thanks! Clarissa

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Original item by Barrie Singleton

Great Poem Pete,
Sounds like you saw the same show on TV that I saw.The cows and bulls, dont even look like cows and bulls I saw as a kid. They are breed to be huge, pumped full of steroids, and antibiotics, feed antibiotics daily, and doctors wonder why humans are now resistant, to many antibiotics that worked for years to get us well.Machines kill the animals, its mass production. I have to say that I was raised eating meats, and I enjoy it, till I think about a "normal" cow or a" normal "chicken, that does not exist anymore, and I feel sorry, for the animal,I guess I even feel sorry for the mutants, created by scientist.If I could live on deer and fish,or some form of turkey, I would be glad for it! I dont think its wrong to eat meats, its wrong to get fat and lazy, its wrong to waste foods, when others go hungery in the world. Its wrong for "farmers" modern scientists to put drugs in the foods that cause people to get sick and fat! great rant!

Comment is about he kills animals (blog)

Why no poems? Isn't that the idea/ Or have I missed something.

Comment is about Rachel Pantechnicon (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel Pantechnicon

Thanks for the comment, Jeff.. Must admit too I like your newest poem here (Your other stuff is really good stuff too) - you have a beat in your pieces that is kind of like some of my own stuff.. (although I can't rhyme to save my life - lol) that I could certainly imagine going down really well.. I'm doing this piece myself at a reading in Manchester Central Library next month which I am looking forward to getting responses to!

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

'Don't be in a hurry to stop the freedom of the train' I like this..

Comment is about Broken Down (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

I want to thank you for your comment, and for giving my writings some of your time.
We can't run away from sadness, it will always be there, running ater happiness... everywhere.

Comment is about Forbidden Love (blog)

Hi Alison, really enjoyed this, as richard and Antonio said romantic and haunting, quite spooky really but lovely sentiments, nice one, Jeff

Comment is about Your Shadow (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Hi Mirna, beautifully written, this, Music of Silence and Oddness. A lot of sadness and frustration in there but well chosen words, I can feel the sadness.

If I'm reading it all correctly, a very good friend of mine is going through a similar thing, I will ask her to have a look at your work, best wishes, Jeff

Comment is about Forbidden Love (blog)

Photographs by David Andrew

Comment is about Gemma O'Neill, singer with The Dirty Normans at Riders, Bolton June 2008 (photo)

haunting but romantic images here. I love the line "I always reach for you, though i'm afraid of shadows"

Comment is about Your Shadow (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

You are awesome. I am totally in awe of your creative ability. This poem is outstanding Neil.

Ally

Comment is about After reading a Huxley quote (blog)

Original item by Neil Francis Brooks

I admit defeat. I can write convoluted and obscure but am useless at reading it! I love "grand manner" hence slightly puzzled that you open with the condensation "I'm".

Comment is about christine bousfield (poet profile)

Original item by christine bousfield

Balm to my wounds. Nice-three Jimmy.

Comment is about Jimmy Andrex (poet profile)

Original item by Jimmy Andrex

Just picking up again on the old "no Spoken Word category" theme, here's an illustration of why it makes it so frustrating. As you say, Helen, it's often a straight choice between Comedy and Theatre for poets at the Fringe (leaving aside the Rodgers & Hammerstein option for a moment). So - the first few times I took a show there, I rather dubiously put it into the Comedy section, because there were one or two faintly amusing poems in it - although at least half the material was serious. And then what happens? You get absolutely slaughtered by the Comedy critics because they don't find it funny enough (their only criterion) and because they don't understand the conventions of a live poetry show.

(Or maybe just because it was crap. I don't know.)

Comment is about Poetry at the Edinburgh Fringe 2007? (article)

Great poetry graham!

Comment is about pebble (blog)

Original item by Graham Eccles

So sorry about that, needed a breath of fresh air but it was too noisy outside.
I've AlaWays got songs running through my mind. It can be a real pain sometimes when you try to remember more than what pops into your head. That racking your brains is not good for your libido. speak soon, well, u no wot i mean.

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Comment is about Doing Bird (blog)

hAIIIa, ( can't be arsed changing text and deleting words i think are in the wrong place today.) my head feels like its bin round the world in 42 days. yurgh!

Comment is about Doing Bird (blog)

Hold your head up,oh oh
Hold your head up,oh oh
Hold your head up oh,
Hold your head high.
There's a song in there somewhere.
How's that for brimming with positivity.
( along with the possibility of no job.)

Comment is about Doing Bird (blog)

It'd be simply too "hard" to resist the temptation.
Get over here!

oops, a bit too forward?

Comment is about On The Pavement (blog)

HI Joanne, welcome to the site! Many nice people here, try a poem post. take care and have a blessed day! Clarissa

Comment is about Hello! (blog)

Thanks, Tomas. What did you think of the music?

Comment is about christine bousfield (poet profile)

Original item by christine bousfield

Dreams can come true..by Gabrielle.
Gabrielle is also the name of an angel.
A raye of sunshine awaits you now.xxx
Thanks for this beautiful poem. Janet.

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Original item by Jordan