thank you for the tip andy
i like your poems they make
you think and see whats happening
they are really great cnt wait to read more
from you - Hollie

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Original item by Andy N

You've given me a idea for a poem there, Pete.. I'll have to be careful with me as it'll probably upset people - lol.. Excellent otherwise!

Comment is about these things I despise (blog)

David

Thank you for your comment. It is suppose to have that feel to it but I do not always succeed in getting the stressed/unstressed syllables to meet the iambic rules that my english teacher told me to disregard! Other than that it is a narrrative poem that has a thought to be heard. You should read the 'hoodie' poem, it has a little more rhythm to it.

Regards
Sam

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Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

Hi Steve
great stuff last night. Interesting as ever that when performed the poems mean more / different things. For example for the first time your poem, Hearthside and its repetitive ending made sense. Speak to me AS the oak tree hollows. I see now (lazy reader I guess) Winston

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Hi Darren i think you have a point in what is the criteria for poem of the month - will post this as a discussion methinks...

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What is the criteria? Maybe it really IS just one persons opinion. Are we alowed to take into acount what we know of the of the writer?. I did when I left my feedback (see below) and felt that this as well as Phil's personal back story (Having also met him) was qualification enough. (Darren, don't be daft, put your coat back on the peg. Constructive comments should never be isolating). Winston

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Err, can I go against the general consensus here? While I totally agree with the sentiment,
I've watched Phil perform his poetry from his WOL debut up until fairly recently. He is much improved in both his delivery and style. And Sean, poetry is subjective and you're more than entitled to your opinion. However, I believe that there are far better poems on this site that are more deserving of the 'poem of the month accolade'. Poems written both for performance and for the page. I know I risk further isolation/alienation but even having considered the cause and affect of my words, I still think that it's only fair that I'm allowed to say what I think.
Phil's poem sounds and reads like a narrative. It could qualify as 'narrative of the month' but again - that's subjective. There are typo's in the piece and some grammatical errors and while this shouldn't distract a reader - it does.
This is not a dig at either Phil or Sean - just perhaps a public bewilderment at what the criteria is (apart from one person's opinion) to be considered for 'poem of the month'?
Now, where's my coat?

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What are you insinuating sir?
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Hi Winston
I've tried to explain further the "recursion" poem thing - have a look and maybe we'll discuss tonight
P

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Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Pete - I ran out of superlatives a long time ago. I enjoy your work (you know that anyway) and we share our advice over beer. You know what I drink...

Comment is about from beginning, end and back again (repost) (blog)

Really engaging - I wouldn't change anything here . Brave and poignant.

Comment is about Annie Lennox get your gun (blog)

thanks you lot!

hey Gus, what Jag you got?

hmmmm well the poem is about things I despise :-) but it is tongue in cheek, I hope I have not offended . I like Jags.
:-)

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Hi Alison,
I agree, it's great to see your work here again.
This particular one is very deep emotionally and has some fantastic imagery for my taste.
Personally, i don't think the content is so very different from others you posted. Just the format.
As usual, i feel the beauty of your soul in your work and that goes a long way towards the beauty of your poetry.
Love Janet.x

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Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

I liked this better read Pete.
I did have a picture in my minds eye of you standing on the stage with your arms open and upright stance. Bardesque is the word which springs to mind.
( i remember mentioning this once before to you though with a few others.)
Janet.x

Comment is about from beginning, end and back again (repost) (blog)

This is another of yours which had me laughing whilst sitting on the edge of my seat.
And that was just reading it before listening to the audio. Very funny and oh so true!
Janet.x

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Mike... the few poes of yours that I have read have a beautiful stark quality... like a winter moorland scene... its a cruel world but rare and beautiful...we make it ugly.

you havea quality and quiteness.... that is deafening
Regards
Gus

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

Hi Pete,
Right well, thats woken me up... You are Captain Rantastic! (you forgot the end of selotape and the long cue whic you join and when you get to the front there is no one behind you) Great stuff. Winston

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Cheers Janet, thanks for commenting! If ever you're in York on the second Wednesday of the month, come along and check out the Speakers' Corner (web link above).

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Original item by Andy Humphrey

Are you suggesting I have little imagination? - it's one recording - you might sound like Terry Thomas in real life! and anyway I like my Dylan's! and furthermore what in hell's name are you complaining about? .... you've never even remarked upon, let alone complimented my voice!
:-)
Cx

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Original item by Gus Jonsson

Yup - had own (talk) show for BBC CWR. But the bit I was showing of with was the RSC voice coach - lol.
Difficult to do workshops online but I'll give it some thought and put together some exercises that may or may not help, certainly won't harm. It'll take me a few days to get some material together.
Cx

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Hey Up a minute Peteo babe.....
I've got a Jaguar.....spend at least £300 a month on cat litter!
And as for 'sleek slippery casanova's'....well..be honest is that not ..calling the kettle black....

Fondest as always
Gus

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Hi Nabila!
thanks for your comments, I'll be improving all the time with all this help! thanx

Hey CJ! wow wow I never realised you worked with radio, yes I would love advice on speaking, and I do normally try and warm up, I did 3 takes fo this poem, I can do fast stuff if you look back at 'tacky falaracky'

Ok all great

thank you girls for the feedback today
most appreciated.

Love
Pete
x

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I'm clapping for you here - loved it (sounded like me with PMT!) .I purposely didn't read it so as not to overshadow my judgement and I enjoyed it.

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Good work.
Cx

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

I don't want to interfere with anybody's natural style or interpretation but I am an ex BBC radio presenter, have taught adult returners to C&G in media studies (training for presentation), and my voice training has been with the second best voice coach in the world - Andrew Wade (when he took me on about 8years ago he was head of voice at the RSC and only took one other private pupil). So what I'm trying to say is - I know a bit about voice, and about recording voice - if you feel you'd like any 'tips' or training exercises please feel free to ask.
Having said that - I thought it worked beautifully, and I liked the soft intimate style. My only criticism woul be it sounded like you hadn't really warmed up beforehand - just try a few tongue twisters to get your mouth and tongue freed up - then you don't trip over your own words.
Cx

Comment is about from beginning, end and back again (repost) (blog)

Wow Pete! This is amazing. You really do have a skill with words and keep it up. All your work flows in a natural rhythm and beat and I look forward to hearing this one live.

Just the usual response - I think break it up a bit but don't lose any of it.

Keep writing

Comment is about from beginning, end and back again (repost) (blog)

Really really well written
powerful and evocative

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

Hi Chris,
first of all thank you for taking the time to read and listen.
It means a great deal to me what you do.

Well it was a challenge because the poem needs a gentle touch, whilst I find moaning easy, being gentle is natural but more personal and hidden within me.

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I found this very moving first time around, liked it better read. Why did you find it a challenge?
Cx

Comment is about from beginning, end and back again (repost) (blog)

Excellent! And so please it's not just me that constantly gets pissed off with the little things - my pet hates (in addition to most of the above) - people driving whilst holding a mobile phone, kids running out in front of the car (this is a ton of metal - you're 7st of squishy bits .... which one do you think is gonna come off worse!) and tv presenters who say ridiculous things like ...it's 3am in the morning - as opposed to 3am when? and people who .... erm, perhaps I should right my own!
Cx

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Have you read any of the war poets? - The war to end all wars! Dulce et decorum est pro patria mori indeed.
Thought provoking piece.
CX

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Beautiful.
Cx

Comment is about Fragile (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

liking the shoes Gus!

thanks for that, I'm really made up you like it.
there is an explanation but I have become into the enigma of this poem now.
its taken on its own life!

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This and battles like it have waged for milleneum and until love conquers all no if and buts... love
its the only way....costs nothing ...and everyone is capable....and yet find it impossible....prefer the greed the need the politics of war and the distance of religions
Gus

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Allison, I'm fairly new to the site (not necessarily write our loud). If this is the quality of poetry I am placed among, then I am honoured. I have a fair ways to go to be up to this kind of standard, nevertheless I shall continue, inspired by poems such as this. I only have one criticism, and that is probably born of greed; so enthralled by your words, I felt that the last two sentences need not have been repeats, i felt that the poem would have been even more potent, should it have ended with new lines. I think you get my drift. You have a new fan - Big Smiles. x

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Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

Hi Pete
Your poem takes me one way and then another,,,its almost as though you change places...weird... really nice imagery... one of your best dare I say .....but still strange.... but then we are all a little nutty.... when it comes to ...??? I;m lost again
Fondest Regards
Gus

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There are bushfires starting all over our planet. The thing is, it is 'our' planet, and is meant for sharing. One day, lets hope that there are no borders, no false patriotism, and a genuine love for one another. Peace Love Unity and Respect.

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Thanks guys, as you already know, your comments mean a lot. Possessive apostrophe gone Darren! Thanks again..

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Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

that is the word that should be there, yes, thank you. that'll teach me to try to write when I'm tired, i'll try to amend it. It wasn't intended to be either "desperate" or "futile ".that wasn't what I was thinking at the time but as it turned out it kind of was futile as some of my family slipped through my hands and broke. Maybe I saw that coming, I don't know.

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Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

i have read this a few times , it would, i know, be easier to wait to hear you read it , ... we all carry our own demons . and this one has its advantages. Of course i like the poem and its a little bit different each time i read

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Love the fragility of "fragile" Deborah. Something desperate and futile about the end of the poem. Moving (should the word in the 4th line be inconsequential), Best Wishes. Winston

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Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Love the killer heels by the way. How do you walk in them? - I can't .... I always look as if I've lost my horse.
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

All I ever seem to say about your work is Fantastic! - loved it. Like Clarissa - struck a few chords - 'I offered you all....found empty psalms of you' - brilliant imagery.
Cx

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Hi Alison - great to see you back. This has great rhythm and meter and a good use of lexicon. It is different from how I remember your previous contributions but that sense of 'enigma' remains in your work.
Just one thing - 'it's' may be better suited as 'its' without the possessive apostrophe. That's the only thing that jarred the reading for me.
I'm a fan of your work - it's always more than one dimension.

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Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

One of the best poem I have read! Like the imaginative, innovative nature of format which reflects content - very thought out. Language is fantastic


Only constant quibble I have is the capitals on most lines other than that there is no other distraction in this for me - well done and would love to hear you read this.

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

HI Phil, this poem is great!!!

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Original item by Phil Golding

very nice poem, it drifts away on the winds.

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Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

HI Alison, I have really enjoyed this poem, its very good and seems different from your others in the past. hope you had a good new year.

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Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

By God this is great!I have had the exact same feelings, except for the devil and swine part. Yep it hurts to know your never first.God there are those people that never say a word when mad, and they are the worst.So to blot one out, be it for you or a friend, well the poet says it all here, it should be enough to cause a sane person fear! A she devil, and a pig, amazing! good poem!

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Hello Alison, thank you for your lovely kind comments. I have wanted to get in touch with you before now but I have had Uni deadlines I onlyl just completed, my head felt like it was going to explode. It's so nice to be able to return here and read all the poems. I love your last blog poem but I want to give it the time it deserves and read it again. Should be able to now, for a while at least..I hope 2009 brings you all you desire..Best Wishes, Deb

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