Just enjoyed "Matese", Steve.

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Hi Paul, I like this very much. I am a big fan of Jorge Luis Borges' work and this very much reminds me of his story "The Lottery".
Matt

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Hey Antionio, I like this piece a lot, it has a great flow that forces the reader into bouncing the words around a bit. I like that quality as it slows you down and makes you take greater notice of the theme.

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Thanks, this is a bit of a running theme due to some past experiences of mine. I am very into anthropomorphism and my connection with animals and the earth (but I'm not a hippie). This is definitely something you'll continue to see if you keep tuned in. Thanks for commenting!

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thanks for the comments- what can i say? my poetry lecturer would scream in horror if he knew how little i revise and re-write nowadadys- very slap dash poet!!! love the calculator poem, what a novel idea!

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This really moved me - been there - only with me I'm not so sure the end was natural. It sounds trite just to say this really moved me - but ... it really did and I can't think of anything more I want from a poem like this other than that profound connection.
Cx

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into the void is a really good short poem and quite deep, who were you talking about, thanks for the comment the other day, its strange what inspires us, it was very constructive and most appreciated. the new edited version is now posted if your interested? chris

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i think your right a poem is never finished thanks for the comment the other day it really helped me, the new version is now posted if your interested, im liking your poetry, its great work and i enjoyed them thoughroughly, chris.

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im liking your poems very inventive, thanks for the comments the other day, it helped me with my second draft, you gave me a whole new angle to look at, its posted up now if your interested, keep the poetry coming, its great, chris.

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Glad you approve - but Dear Jonny is, in fact, darling Larry.....:)
Cx

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Thanks very much Chris, i try to keep a sense of humour when i'm writing about subjects that make me angry or sad.

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Particularly loved the last two lines - unexpected!
Cx

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Hi Phil. I feel the frustration of your situation coming through in this work. I love the bit about the telephone and the optimism and the final act of defiance. All power to you!

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Hi Guys

Thanks for the comments.


The reason that Goliath smiled is that in this poem Goliath represents Hamas, Islamic Jihad, the Al Aqsa Brigades and other militant fragments who fight the Israelis in the name of Palestinian resistance. What the poem is saying is that the huge weight of Israeli bombs and missilses will create more determination among the friends, relatives and comrades of those who have been killed to breed more resistance movements and new ways to strike the mighty David.

When the original Goliath was struck on the forehead by David's pebble he certainly did stay down (along with his 60 tons of armour) because David went and cut off his head with his own sword. Goliath in that story represented the Philistines. Ancient Philistia is the modern Gaza strip and the point being made is that cutting off Goliath's head about 3,000 years ago did not eliminate the Philistines. The Philistines (Palestinians) are now small and David (Israel) is mighty, but the slingshot is still a force to be reckoned with and David could fall along with his enormous armour.

Didn't Dylan say 'Everybody MUST get stoned?'

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Hi Antonionioniiiiii

I like this poem. God seems to alter in apperance like languages across the world. I find it all so confusing. It's great when people, regardless of what they believe, don't really mention their faith or other and practice more in being kind to their fellow man. If only x

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Your work is quite fascinating, though often uncomfortable to read. I get very strong, but dark, pictures in my head whilst reading them - almost like black and white films from the forties but crossed with cartoons. Sorry - can't quite fix on what I mean - definitely film-like qualities, definitely disturbing, anyway!
Cx

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Very lonely, haunting piece of work, Melissa.
Cx

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Thanks, I'm glad you like it, it's sort of about Quetzlcoatl - the Mayan god of gods.

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Hey cool poem!

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Hi Michael, very nice poem here, the words used really make the reader think . take care

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Hi Jon,Nice and interesting poem. I guess Im a fundemental retard.Im very happy with that.For me the virgin birth is a no point subject, and not worth words.Even if the writters of the bible put it there, its of no value.We all have the ability to have the spirit of Good within us, or the spirit of evil within us. The best trick ever, played on humans is the devil card, I have seen the devil/evil in humans, thus I, a retard believe hes/she is real.The energy comes from somplace.Thus it is real.Poor translations of the bible give the impression that the devil is below/ hell is below, but hell is here.Greed builds bombs, that can blow up the sun 7 times over.As long as greed rules the world, there will be bombs, and power hungry bankers, and liers.If we got rid of all those types of people, we could be one, and through poetry and music we are one to a point. Im not sure about the suction, my government sucks the people dry. good poem one that makes you think and wonder!

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Hi Antonio, I agree with Cjd, this is your best God poem. If you dont know James Taylor, take the time to listen to his work on youtube, you will remember him, I bet.For me God is no color or shape, but pure energy, and I find Gods words in all the Good books. Slivers of truth are golden! thanks and a good poem!!

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Dear Melissa, I hope you had a nice holiday. I really enjoyed this poem, and you will find the right guy.I dont know who Eric Close is, but if hes worth anything, and hes the one, he will stick around. PSSS You are free from the cage!

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Please see latest blog - any more to your taste?
Cx

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Hi Mal

As I Recall....Goliath went down and stayed down...

(Everybody's gettin stoned B Dylan)

Regards
Gus

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You're absolutely right - and I'm working on it... really I am! I am getting there. And should you ever meet me I don't think you'd find me maudlin at all, I'm writing that out. Though I didn't think One Touch of Nature was maudlin - I wrote it as a thank-you. And look where it got me when I started writing about shaving pu.....cats!
I do appreciate your comments and criticisms, and thank-you for reading them.
Cx

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Your best 'god' yet, I think! Do you know the James Taylor song 'Look up from your life'? - I think you'd like it.
Cx

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Another one to spend some time reading I think! What are you like? Are you turning to reglion? If I went to pray for all my sins, I would the preist out! lol

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Hi Jordan... Not seen you in hebden since we moved to the upstairs room in the Hole in the wall, It's a great venue, it would be good to see you down there if you can make it. Winston

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Hello David.

Yes, I'm off work at the moment with an injured arm, so I've got far too much time to sit watching the birds in the garden. I've got a regular flock of long-tailed tits that visits my feeder, and there's a red kite hanging around Harrogate at the moment that keeps flying over my house. It'll get a poem written about it if it's not careful! See you at WW sometime soon?

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Very powerful, liked it a lot.
Cx

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I wouldn't even try and impose my beliefs on someone else - not that I think I could.
I, too, related to this poem - just from a different perspective. I find it very difficult to separate the mechanics of the poetry from the subject matter, particularly one which appears to invite debate. If we're being strictly technical then this doesn't entirely conform to the standard sonnet form of ababcdcdefefgg with the last couplet providing a resolution .... a tall order that! - justify god's behaviour in two lines, make 'em rhyme - and don't forget ya iambic pentameter!
Cx
P.s. - really do enjoy your take on things Tony, and admire the way you can get it into 14 lines! :-)

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Hey Winston. Thanks for reading and leaving some feedback. In answer to the question about 'pyronoia'; yes i would love to work with someone to have this (amongst a few others) animated. i can envisage a kind of anime style:see. the end of akira perhaps? Also can I say I really dig 'DECREE NI'SI' very dry. It purposefully slows the train of thought down from a normal reading speed, to a much more contemplative tempo. Liking it.
Matt

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Who indeed. I have only been there once, honest ;-)

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what's happened to the rest of my feedback??

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Well, being a firm believer of the existence of One God for all, I was able to leave my own thoughts behind andd read this and still relate to it. I don't impose on anyone else so I don't expect the same from elsewhere and I read poetry as poetry (the creation of another's work)

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I like this stuff and I think the poems are better formed than your others. The humour is good in this and worksI can relate to them as being a Muslim, I don't misuse any of the names from any religion. There is one 'Ya'Allah' which I hear people use which is 'Oh my God' and said in the same way.

Nice poem.

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Phew! Glad I didn't offend about the existence or not of a supreme being. And I'm extremely pleased that you haven't even made mention of the fact that I used 'their' when I meant 'there'!
Cx

P.S.I've also left another reply to you after my last blog entry.

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I wouldn't for the world want to offend you, or anyone else for that matter, my apologies if I have done. When it comes to the question of religious beliefs - I believe that we should both be free to believe whatever we wish and to express those beliefs.
As to your challenge to us non-believers
to prove their is no god, well - you can't prove a negative .... but I still look forward to the day when you can say to me 'See! Told you so!' :-)
Still think the last 2 lines need looking at.
Cx

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Hi Winston.Thanks for your comments. It's actually about my grandmother dying. She was upstairs in our house. I was too young to handle it at the time and I went up the fields to sit with Willow instead.I love the sensitivity of horses ( but am also scared of some) and she seemed to understand.Sorry I rambled and it is unclear. Deb

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The title and opening of this one reminds me of the Metalica lyrics -
All that is / ever / ever was / will be / ever
Twisting, turning .
from "Through the never"
Winston

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Hi there Matt... Can you imagine a short animation of this one. I certainly can. It would contain all those strong images. Winston

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interesting piece, tone when my pc is working proper - you can expect more feedback than a quick 2 minute as this piece deserves more than that certainly!

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I love this poem and it is one I can relate to.

not only that it is well written

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Hi Alison, i'm fine thankyou.
Thanks for your comment on " Nobody ever visits..." I tried to portray all the imagery and emotions mentioned in the comments received but placing personal experience of the subject matter to one side. Hopefully, i managed it.

Love, light and peace to you, hoping to see more from you soon. Janet.x

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Hey Andy. Pardon my ignorance but do you mean to tell me your real name is David Robilliard? If so, i have a question for you but not here. It's concerning my other work.
Thanks for all your comments by the way.
Love Janet.x

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At the risk of offending (which I always do TRY to avoid), and certainly going against the concensus of opinion here ... maybe there is no test ... maybe there is no being there to test us....maybe we're all just talking to ourselves? Anyway - whether or not we are just characters in some superior being's game of Sims is somewhat too big a subject to debate through the medium of a comment box. I liked the way the poem begins to ask questions, but then the last couple of lines seemed - to me - to belong to a different piece of work. Or maybe this one just ends too abruptly. First 12 lines - has this entity got a plan for us? Last 2 - hypocrisy of confession - big subject for 2 lines. Might have worked better with repentance than confession.
Just a thought.
Cx

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Why is it that when things go wrong we think of life as a test but when they're going swimmingly well, we think of it as a welcome challenge.
If you think of God as being a father and you want him to embrace you then surely you should embrace life. Whatever!
Perhaps that's the test. Endurance and survival against all odds.
There's a song in there somewhere.
Maybe we just can't accept that there are things in life which are no longer relevant or valid so we plough on regardless and everyone concerned is unhappy, instead of coming to agreeable solutions. Like closing one door before we can open another.
Whoo! this poem has raised some issues Antonionioni!
When is a door not a door?
When it's a jar! (boom boom)

Thanks for this. Can i come back when i die and tell you if there is really a person called God in the heavens? Unless you die first of course in which case i give you permission to come back and tell me.
Janet.x

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Clarissa ,thanks a lot.
well you know theres a song called '19' which is how I got interested in the vietnam war, the song used samples from a ABC documentary called 'Vietnam requiem'

theres more to this story, I just posted this little bit.

Pete

Hi Antonioni, thanks for your comments too

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Helllooooooo there Clarissa!

Lenor its a washing powder, well you know how it is they paint all these pictures of wonder...........


How are you

thanks for the feedback

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