Dear Graham!
I am writing in the comments because my computer is ancient. In the beginning, everything was fine. Now everything has changed. I don't know why. I think the computer is very old.
Larisa
Comment is about The Greatest Day (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Larisa I first posted this to you in April
Hello Larisa,
Can I ask why you post your poems in the comments section and not in the blog pages? There is more chance of people seeing your work in the blog than the comments. Have you had some sort of problem before that we can possibly sort out?
Graham
Comment is about The Greatest Day (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
The 8th -9th of May — the Greatest Day,
The Saint Holiday — the Victory Day.
A holiday with glee and spree,
a holiday with tears that appear
Remembering those soldiers,
The heroes of the Second World War.
***
Those hardcore days
We don’t want to face anymore.
That was the largest war
In the history of mankind,
It would help if you weren’t blind
But to know and remember the facts:
Almost 58 million men were lost.
Wasn’t it the highest cost?
***
62 countries out of 73
fought against the fascist regime
In one international team.
More than 80% of the Earth’s population
were involved in military operations,
covering the territories of 40 countries,
bringing only grief, hunger, suffering, and worries.
***
I looked at the pictures of those young guys,
Those heroes of the Second World War
and tried to realize who they were before.
***
It isn’t easy to guess, but I would like to suggest:
Among them was someone’s son
who had never seen a gun,
Someone’s first student or a teacher,
someone’s darling, friend, or a preacher.
***
They had lain down in the fields of fights
struggling for freedom and human rights.
They had given their lives for you and me,
for everyone to be free and live happily,
for the grass to be green,
for the sky to be blue and clean.
***
Someone in ancient times once said:
“If you want peace, be ready for the war.”
These words are not for today.
Yes, we shout “Hurray!”
But if we want peace, we must do everything to increase love.
***
But do not use military force
which is only the source of suffering and losses.
Yes, we celebrate this day and shout “Hurray”, and say “Cheers”
wishing everyone to live in lasting peace,
not to know a war decrease.
***
We remember the most impressive celebration
When two nations, American and Russian soldiers
met on the banks of the Elbe and could finally see
The end of that horrible war.
With admiration and joy, they embraced one another
as if they were old friends or even brothers.
***
So, today, on the 8th of May, I would like to say:
People of our planet Earth!
Remember! We are part of the whole Universe.
Take care of our Land!
Everyone has to understand:
if you want peace
You have to do everything for love to increase.
©Larisa Rzhepishevska
Comment is about The Greatest Day (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Description of the Poem:
"A Sonnet for Bangladesh" reflects the current socio-political and economic challenges faced by Bangladesh. The poem is structured as a Shakespearean sonnet, with 14 lines, a rhyme scheme of ABAB CDCD EFEF GG, and a clear thematic progression from problem identification to a hopeful call for action. The poem opens by describing the beauty and richness of Bangladesh, but this idyllic image is quickly overshadowed by the "unrest and chaos" that have disrupted the nation’s peaceful existence. Corruption is portrayed as a deeply rooted issue, which not only affects the country's development but also disheartens the youth who seek brighter futures. Despite the growing frustrations and protests, the poem emphasizes the lack of unity in finding a resolution. However, the volta, or thematic turn, occurs in the second half of the sonnet, where the tone shifts from despair to hope. The poet emphasizes that despite the nation's challenges, the "heart of people beats with strength untold." Through unity and collective action, Bangladesh has the potential to rise above the struggles and create a brighter future. The poem ends with a call for justice, love, and action, urging that even the smallest step—"one voice, a deed"—can spark change. Ultimately, the poem is a reflection on the country's current turmoil, but it also conveys an optimistic message of change, resilience, and the power of collective action. It urges the people of Bangladesh to come together to overcome adversity and reclaim their nation's future.
The sonnet at a glance:
1. Form and Structure:
A sonnet typically consists of 14 lines, and your poem meets this requirement.
2. Meter:
Most sonnets are written in iambic pentameter, where each line typically consists of 10 syllables with an unstressed-stressed syllable pattern. While your sonnet doesn't strictly follow iambic pentameter in every line, it generally maintains a rhythm and flow that fits well within the sonnet tradition.
3. Rhyme Scheme:
Traditional sonnets, particularly the Shakespearean (or English) sonnet, have a specific rhyme scheme of ABAB CDCD EFEF GG. Your sonnet has maintained a similar rhyme scheme with:
o ABAB CDCD EFEF GG:
The rhyme scheme is consistent with the Shakespearean model, which is excellent for a sonnet.
4. Volta (The Turn):
The "volta" is the shift or turn in a sonnet—where the argument or theme transitions. In your sonnet, the volta happens between the 8th and 9th lines, where the tone changes from describing the problems facing Bangladesh to proposing hope and solutions through unity and action.
5. Theme:
Your poem effectively follows the traditional sonnet themes of reflection, problem identification, and resolution. The poem discusses the current struggles in Bangladesh, the hope for change, and a call for action, which aligns well with the typical progression in a sonnet.
Conclusion:
This sonnet meets most of the key requirements, such as the correct number of lines, rhyme scheme, and thematic development. The meter could be adjusted to follow iambic pentameter more strictly, but the overall flow works well for a sonnet. The structure, tone, and content make it a strong piece. It is clear, poignant, and carries a message of hope and transformation.
About Poet:
Jobair Mahmud is a Bangladeshi poet, writer, and social entrepreneur born on October 10, 1999, in Teknaf, Cox’s Bazar. He is recognized for his contributions to English literature and his active involvement in humanitarian and youth leadership initiatives. Mahmud pursued a Bachelor's degree in English at the National University of Bangladesh and has been engaged in various volunteer and organizational activities aimed at societal development. In addition to his literary pursuits, Mahmud founded the organization "Humanitarian Enhancement Aid for Resilient Transformation" (HEART), which focuses on community development and resilience-building in Bangladesh. His work has earned him recognition and awards, including the SDG Hero and Best Cadet honors. Mahmud's poetry often reflects themes of social justice, human rights, and the struggles of marginalized communities. One of his notable poems, "Ode on Poor Man," portrays the life of poverty and the resilience of the human spirit. His literary contributions are available on platforms like Poem Hunter, where readers can explore his works. Through his dual roles as a poet and social activist, Jobair Mahmud continues to inspire change and advocate for a more equitable society in Bangladesh.
Comment is about A Sonnet for Bangladesh (blog)
Original item by Jobair Mahmud
Thank you for your comments, appreciated.
Comment is about The 24/7 365 Cell (blog)
Original item by Rick Varden
Congratulations, Graham.
Long may the short line prosper.
Comment is about It's never too late! Graham Sherwood makes live poetry debut (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Great news. Yet more reasons to celebrate the increasingly rich literary, artistic and musical cultures of the British Isles.
Comment is about Surge of sales as Welsh rivers anthology is launched (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks for your comment and observations Uilleam.
I believe it is correct to say fascism has arrived in power in the US and is currently being practiced in government. With non judicial repatriations and detentions what else could such acts be referred to as. People are nervous about calling something what it obviously is, and that is exactly what fascism requires to grow.
I'm pretty sure we in the UK are well on the cusp of similar circumstances.
Last year I wrote an essay about an ordinary Russian citizen called Alexander Demidenko (he was anything but ordinary) Demidenko was declared a "foreign agent" for assisting Ukranian citizens to return to Ukraine from Russia, he was criminalised and ultimately murdered in a Russian prison. Russian authorities stated he had committed suicide, classic modus operandi of tyranny.
Ever since that story I have been alert to similar tactics being used worldwide in varying degrees of visibility. The greater frequency with which such things happen is a clear indicator of the traction fascism is gaining.
David RL Moore
Comment is about Spectator (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
I once had a Marxist friend who was a wife-beater, had robbed a bank and was an axe murderer.
That doesn’t make Benjamin Zephaniah - or anyone else - wrong or unprincipled. 😐
Comment is about ‘Lifelong republican’ Henry Normal turns down MBE - and tells his poetry audience why (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Imagine living on the 6th floor of that tower block and gazing out on a brick wall all day. What ridiculous design.
Comment is about May 2025 Collage Poem: Recent Encounters (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Thanks, Uilleam. I had never really looked at it that way. I must have led a sheltered life!
Thank you, Graham. I have been fascinated by disappearances and the industry which grows up around the supposed aftelrlife of those concerned. Looking back to the original incident brings back memories, to which many people hang on grimly. Still work in progress, I think.
And thanks to all who liked this poem.
Comment is about Johnny Exit (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
This is honest. I like it. ChatGPT, the popular A.I. chatbot (chatbud) helped me with 'digitally detoxing'. I also had help from others (humans, animals, plants, etc.).
Just thought I might share it with you.
Comment is about The 24/7 365 Cell (blog)
Original item by Rick Varden
I admire a principled stance, but these declarations can sound a bit precious. I remember a Marxist friend (did I really have one?) who said: "We live in the mixed economy; the thing to do is to mix it".
Not very original, and to be fair not very principled either.
Comment is about ‘Lifelong republican’ Henry Normal turns down MBE - and tells his poetry audience why (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Yes, I wholeheartedly agree Uilleam. Get our heads on straight & get up into action. As former Catholics, my husband & I watched the unfolding of the new pope selection & were SO relieved a man of integrity and compassion appears to have been appointed. I'm still waiting for women priests...sigh.
Comment is about Intention (blog)
Original item by Hélène
Thanks for extra likes: RudyardK & Stephen G 👍
Comment is about Blue (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Thanks David, you’re very much ON piste, both in your poem and in your comments.
You ask, referring to Russia, and the criminalising of independent journalists:
“How far might we be away from such a similar state of affairs…?”
To quote Mehdi Hasan, of Zeteo News, concerning Gaza and the USA: “Fascism isn’t coming, it’s here”.
The same currently applies to the UK, where journalists are sacked, harrassed and imprisoned; as are anti-genocide protestors, be they Jewish or not, under the guise of anti-terrorism laws for speaking out; and parts of the UK "news" media are collaborators in all that.
Comment is about Spectator (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Many a true word, Rick!
In my effort to rid myself of any such "addiction", I've become technology's "enemy within".
I relentlessly use it's all pervasive powers of research to be creative in my writing, music-playing and other interests.
Yes it's easy though, to be distracted by mindless nonsense!
Comment is about The 24/7 365 Cell (blog)
Original item by Rick Varden
Thanks kindly, @Uilleam 🌷🕊🙏🏻
Comment is about a reckoning of voices (blog)
Original item by Red Brick Keshner
Thank you Stephen and Greg,
I'm pleased you both saw something worthwhile in this piece.
Also thanks to Nigel, Holden and Helene for the likes.
David RL Moore
Comment is about Spectator (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Intriguing it is, and somewhat of a departure Stephen that I rather like but what's going on?
Comment is about Johnny Exit (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Here on WOL we only have two citations. AWOL and the WOLY
Answers on a postcard 😂
Comment is about ‘Lifelong republican’ Henry Normal turns down MBE - and tells his poetry audience why (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Maidin mhaith, Rolph.
Well spotted...the influence of music and poetry eh; let's make a song and dance about it !
Comment is about Naofa Deatach! [Luimneach Thriarach] (blog)
Original item by Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh
There's an intriguing concept (pardon the pun) Stephen; a pregnant door!
Comment is about Johnny Exit (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
If Miriam Margolyes supports the campaign, so do I !
Yet another famous face who refuses to rest on her laurels, and who has taken a stand in defence of human rights and freedom of speech.
Comment is about Campaign to save Wordsworth home as museum after Rydal Mount goes up for sale (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
The monkeys reach through the bars to grasp the bananas then won't let go.
Comment is about Beyond The Midas Touch (blog)
Original item by Rolph David
Benjamin Zephaniah displayed moral integrity when he refused an Order of the British Empire title, hitting the nail on the head when he said: “Anybody who has thought of giving me this OBE can't have read my work".
I agree with Normal on Republicanism and Empire. In my opinion, the honours system in the UK works by unnacountably privileged lizards, basking in the sunlight of others.
It’s a self-serving system, whereby the approval of “The Great and the Good” gives the impression that they are somehow the arbiters of good taste; that therefore it is to their values that we “lesser mortals” ought to aspire.
Yes, every child born in Britain should be equal under the law, but they are not.
Every position of power should be available to all honest citizens, but it is not.
As for housework, I wish to lodge a complaint; I once managed to find the ON switch on the hoover, where’s my gong!😟
Comment is about ‘Lifelong republican’ Henry Normal turns down MBE - and tells his poetry audience why (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
This poem says so much, John. The work of a fine human being.
Comment is about CHARLIE (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Good morning Uilleam,
What a thought-provoking piece that doesn’t shy away from making bold statements. Great. Some lines of it also remind me of N. Sinatra's song: These boots are made...
Regards,
Rolph
Comment is about Naofa Deatach! [Luimneach Thriarach] (blog)
Original item by Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh
Thank you Hélène.
I speak as someone who, in his youth did quite a bit of sitting at the altar and chanting with rosaries.
Might I venture that "intention" is all very well, but actions speak louder than words; and that hopefully, Leo XIV, despite my cynicism, might help lead society from mere rhetoric to action.💗🌷💐
Comment is about Intention (blog)
Original item by Hélène
Since writing my last comment, I have heard good news.
It seems that Leo XIV and his colleagues might actually be getting around to doing their jobs. IE... annoying the oligarchs, thieves and warmongers, those who've been getting away with murder - literally and metaphorically.
We shall see!
Comment is about Elected by Smoke: 133 Men Decide for over a Billion (blog)
Original item by Rolph David
Now, why would anyone put washing up liquid in Grandpa's pipe?
I know one little comedienne who might.😉
Comment is about May 2025 Collage Poem: Recent Encounters (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Thanks RBK.
"no moment stands untouched by the past"
because the arrow of time will find its target.
Comment is about a reckoning of voices (blog)
Original item by Red Brick Keshner
Our connections with our fellow creatures are so important. We forget them at our peril.
Comment is about CHARLIE (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
They Come Then Go
Travelling to somewhere
Lines to follow
Tracks to connect
Train of thought
Arrives to complete.
Comment is about May 2025 Collage Poem: Recent Encounters (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Very fine poem, David. Yes, I read this as being more contemporary than referring specifically to VE Day.
Comment is about Spectator (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Thanks, Rolph. Yes, the wisdom of old men, again.
Still, it makes good theatre...and a book...and a film.
Comment is about Elected by Smoke: 133 Men Decide for over a Billion (blog)
Original item by Rolph David
Fri 9th May 2025 12:24
Thank you so much, Stephen, for your lovely comment, it really means a lot! 😊
Comment is about Gossamer. (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
I read you.
Don't think it's all lost. Many of us are aware of the importance of trees.
Comment is about The Cut-Out-And-Keep Guide To Trees (blog)
Original item by Clive Culverhouse
Thank you, David. The structure of this poem, with its devastating conclusion, gives it such power.
Comment is about Spectator (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
An absolute gem, Holden. Every word has its place.
Comment is about Gossamer. (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
Thank you Reggie, Telboy and Graham and to those who have sent likes.
I wasn't specifically motivated by VE day to pen this piece although it is entirely relevant in that context.
The deluge of grim news that informs us of the suffering of others can have a numbing effect. Sometimes we trick ourselves to believe that merely by talking about terrible events and denouncing them we somehow impact them. It is true to say that discussion raises awareness, but awareness without action doesn't move things forward much.
It is also true that people and societies over time have devolved or surrendered their own voices to governing bodies who no longer represent their subjects desires, although to do so exclusively and with equity would be impossible. Such a state of perceived sterility by the masses over time becomes a reality, we believe we are powerless...this I think is the intended impact of many governing agencies, so as to harness all power for themselves...resulting in the death of or at least the decline of democracy.
If we as indivduals act outside imposed parameters we are deemed rebels, anarchists, criminals, revolutionanaries even terrorists...are we? dependent on specific acts of course we could be, although merely to voice dissent is not enough if we are to realise change.
To clarify the term "foreign agent" it is a label that the Russian State has been imposing upon many independent journalists and academics within its own borders in order to criminalise them so they can be silenced. How far might we be away from such a similar state of affairs if we remain inactive?
Sorry for going off piste a little there (if you thought I did)
David RL Moore
Comment is about Spectator (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Sláinte Uilleam - You are a true Celt. ☘️
Thanks for likes: Rita, Larisa, Hélène & Nigel Astell.. 👍
Comment is about Blue (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
What a shame that the oft-repeated phrase used by our politicians: “Getting back to basics” couldn’t be implemented by the so-called Christian Church.
An obscene show of wealth, pomp and power, totally divorced from the original message of one loveable rebel, who put two fingers up to the military – industrial – religious complex of his time and was executed for his pains.
What was that, Jesus: “love your neighbour”? Yeah right…what genocide? I see no genocide – I hear no genocide.
Comment is about Elected by Smoke: 133 Men Decide for over a Billion (blog)
Original item by Rolph David
The Irish Blessing. We used to sing the English version in chapel.
Go n-éirí an bóthar leat
Go raibh an ghaoth go brách ag do chúl
Go lonraí an ghrian go te ar d’aghaidh
Go dtite an bháisteach go mín ar do pháirceanna
Agus go mbuailimid le chéile arís,
Go gcoinní Dia i mbos A láimhe thú.
Comment is about Blue (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
I’m a post-war baby. I now have children who also have their own.
Thank those who fell that none of us have been faced with what they were. Bravo for this David.
Comment is about Spectator (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Would today's population have the same resolve as that during the 40's?
Comment is about Spectator (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Frances Macaulay Forde
Mon 12th May 2025 17:50
Hi Binte,
As promised I have read and enjoyed your sample poem 'Silhouette'. It reminds me of a performance by an Eastern European sand artist who very cleverly wove a similar story with shadows.
I look forward to reading more...
Frances
Comment is about Binte Afroz (poet profile)
Original item by Binte Afroz