nice, like this rachel in particular the last stanza but it's a strong piece...

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particularly like the reference to 'A patch worked rescue attempt' here, Rachel but i like the full piece and i think you've got it about the right length too.. x

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i have no idea :) but it felt like a good thing to write

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

good piece is this

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Original item by John Togher

I haven't read the Auster novel you mentioned, but have read some of his other stuff.

I'll check it out.

Thanks.

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laura...just watching mock the week...has anybody ever told you that you are like Jo Caulfield?

er i think she likes poetry.

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nice stuff Dave. clever. Win X

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from the first 2 lines I am gripped. You go on to provide a pallette of words for the reader to paint his own picture. In this case however it is meaner / harsher and we are in a brutal conflicting space. Loved every word of it Marianne, Win X

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

"Oh, I'm just waiting for Mr Right"
- Ann - you might be better with Mr Right-now !!

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He's thinking 'What's in it for me?' She's thinking...'Sand'

:-)

Jx

(as for my 'untrimmed sprouts'....you dancing?)

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

by just saying-brilliant! quantifies my personal intent!

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Larisa - you ever hear about the German gun "Big Bertha" ?
.. well, that's me, that is :)

from the look on that girl's face, I reckon he's packing a .22

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thanks Elaine - much appreciated. B
(leaves on the line)

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Hi Val - I hope we will still be seeing you at Butterflies in Bolton - have missed you the last couple of times I went to the Howcroft. I like the new venue - I always found the Howcroft a bit too bright - like an operating theatre. The welcome was always lovely there and a good atmosphere - though Sunday isn't a great night to have anything on. They will have to get more seating in Butterflies if it takes off though - or maybe I'll start taking my mum's shooting stick...heating also!
I can't make the first one but hope to see you there at some point.
Isobel x

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That will be because of all the vodka your men drink over there Larisa - the nose probably enflames - I'm not sure it does the same for the penis. Large hands and feet are rumoured to be a good indication - but I really wouldn't know :)

John - perhaps that has something to do with all the untrimmed hair you sprout in later years...

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thanks for your comment on my latest. Am looking forward to seeing everyone tomorrow - and since I've got something new to read will probably enjoy it more. I read somewhere that Petrova will be there too - it looks set to be a great night! See you there. x

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Original item by Elaine

I think our earlobes continue to grow as well.

:-)

jx

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Well, I have noticed that getting older the nose becomes bigger. Is it the same with the ......? lol

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Ha - love it Larisa - this made me laugh - the picture also! Yes - a man can get to hide his lightness under a bushel and most of us women are incredibly forgiving anyway - but if you are a titman you are just never going to go for a flat chested girl... unless she wears a wonderbra I suppose..

Shame you can't read this at the Tudor tomorrow!

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Hm, I think you have a fair point! But don't they say to look at the nose - and the fingers? Just a tip! (Actually true in my very limited experience!) xx

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hey Stef - even more spooky! I must have been putting my Snickers ref on just as you were telling me about your chocolatey preferences!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Neat, in a dishevelled way. You definitely have a 'voice' and a great way with words. It would be lovely to see you try something that wasn't about dissolute alienation. Your verse...

'But I digress; take my pasty limbs and words
to work, stare at a spider in a window frame,
become obsessed with it, and chew my pens,
until they burst on my chin. Objectively'

sums up your oeuvre beautifully.

Stretch yourself!

:-)

Jx

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Many thanks for useful and kind comments

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Original item by Elaine

man - that's some poem

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Original item by John Togher

Fantastic!
(I don't know what's happening on wol right now - there's some real Quality on this Street !)
I think you'll find it's Curly Wurly tho
I once had a Curly-Wurly on the town-hall steps - got arrested for it though :)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hey John! My partner used to love to fart in the open air - but not indoors. But then he was very well brought up! ;-)

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Great poem - that last line really nails it down !
(that's TWO on W.O.L. I've complimented in one day !!)

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What do I do it with it then? I actually would choose Snickers as my chocolate bar of choice - but what on earth rhymes with . . . uhoh!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

I am a super keen gardener and 'allotmenter' type personage. I love this poem, although the phrase 'a gusting waft soars up then dips'

would probably be more recognised by my wife. For some reason, I believe a man should be able to fart freely while gardening.

Call me old fashioned.

:-)

Lovely stuff.

Jx

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Original item by Christopher Dawson

Nature knows best! This is fun, like it.

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Nice haiku - I genuinely mean it - this is one of the best such poems I've seen.

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Original item by Dave Bradley

A man and a pen?
A man and a pencil?
A man and a keyboard?
A man and a writing utensil...
Great poem John!
writ

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Original item by John Togher

Be careful with the Lion Bar - don't bite it, and definitely don't crunch or chew it!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Naughty and might lead to diabetes pdq but enough to make of us drool and allows to dream in the world of chocolate - great feel good factor too

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

reminds me of drunken numbness flailing around supermarkets buying more booze in that florescent light that highlights all the smudges of drinks debris, panda eyes and baboon ringed red lips and red wine. minging in anger.
i like the way the pen spills all over the chin clumsy and reminds me of another poem on here about red ink spills that stain...
i think we all like to think we are different but really its an arrogance as all people are the same, we're made of the same stuff and our experiences are all in common its a privaledge of our time to consider ourselves unique.
we're all arrogant and selfish but some of us write good poetry, and this is a good one :)

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Love it.
Cx

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Hello John

As promised I have re read your poetry postings and find them all delightful… why indeed would I not.

Under the Wire - is my most favourite, in a class of its own..

‘Lost’ Ghazal - Once again superb in it crafted simplicity…. I’m not a great fan of this style of poetry, something missing I feel ?

Liken to fine china that clunks rather than pinging..

As to the slightly more erotic, the pretty ‘Triolet’ is, I think very well crafted and observed, however I would have been unhappy including the words ‘alleviate’ and ‘stress’, in my humble opinion I find them angular and jarring in a poem which outlines a ritual so secret and special.. I would, had it been my poem, chosen to replace it with a new line altogether utilising the word ‘press ‘or ‘less’

Sometimes (Extended Rhyming Mix) - is my favourite in this genre wonderful lovely echoing imagery, beautiful mood paintings within all of the lines.

I also have a feeling that you yearn to write more erotica but are perhaps self limiting by your intellectual inhibitions , what I mean is, that you perhaps try to completely smother the sometimes absurd, gaudy, and gratuitous nature of the subject by overworking cleverly constructed subtleties. Instead of be as intellectually timorous perhaps, dare I say, a more hands on approach…

…boom boom

Enjoy being ribald and risqué.

I have enjoyed my jaunt through your recent poetry postings, thank the Lord you are not as prolific as one or two on this site.

Many thanks and well done all of your work is superb.

Augusta xx

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Hi Elaine - many thanks for your kind comments on Sargasso Remembered - I do appreciate your getting in touch

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Hello Ann - thanks very much for your comments on the Leaving of Liverpool and Muntjak always great to get your feedback and much appreciated - yes and especially sad about the expectant deer x

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Have you ever read Paul Auster's "Travels in the Scriptorium"?

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Original item by John Togher

Hi, Ann! Thank you for sharing such a sweet poem. I liked it very much and it inspired me to write a new Rzhepick. Here it is:
If you want your night to be sweet
put a chocolate under your sheet,
then wrap your body in that sheet
and go your boy friend to meet.

I hope you are not angry. It's just a joke and the poem is really nice.
With warmest wishes, Larisa

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

oh so! you intend to gad about-whats new there then! as to walking the southwest way-that wouldnt be in the direction of the cliffs edge would it? hee hee...getting up hills?why walk up them when you can walk down them?..tee hee take two(stop me if I get too funny)and as for liking to be free spirited-you are a dead big lot more free spirited than Queen Freespirit herself-thats so easy to see in all your vastly-vastly-vastly improving poetry.The consolation,for the want of putting it better regarding Gems is that she is no longer suffering-and that thought you, as I do, with 'me little golden Yorkieboy (Pepe) must cling to-ok? and yes when the youth of spring takes your hand,be assured the cobwebs once more will dissipate-you have my word on it! enjoy your day Ann-if I dont see you before Christmas-all the Georgey(best)love-Stef.xx

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Good morning Ann-clear the decks for action shipmate-I,m about to give you a waffling broadside!

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good morning Dave from relentlessly rained on Rhondda-given the option of staring at the ceiling or popping a couple of kipping tablets,I know which I would opt for.As for me two bottles of laudanum a night does the trick(lol!)or better still reading my own poo-etry! haha! wifey gave me a dig in the ribs by the way for overlooking your regards to her(as in 'one' poem)she r.s.v.p's hers to you and we both keep you in mind-as to your mind being 'foggied' from the 'tabs-blimey! I would not like to observe its capabilities-'unfoggied' your poetry is as good as your kindness-sorry for waffling(yet again)but its important to me to think of other people beside myself-many thanks Mr D-catch you later-our regards-P&S.Wilde-xx(not from me...(wifeyfeatures)

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A chocolat blog! (By the way, I don't understand the message that has appeared at the top of my poem on the blog page about Flash. Nothing to do with me mate!) Also, apologies for the audio being so quiet. Not sure why, think I need to adjust something!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

'lo Elaine :)

Thank you re 'childhood'. Bang on :)

I am deffo going tomorrow night now - visitor isn't landing in Liverpool til Friday night now, so see you tomorrow our kid! Looking forward to it :)

Laura xx

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Original item by Elaine

Very tense! Cleverly done. Leaves me with a feeling of suspence!

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Original item by John Togher

Heh Andy :D

Like this Dave. Reminds me of one of the endless questions that my lass used to ask - why is a witch? I don't know!

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Sure about that? Definitely a man? ;p

The repetition of 'our man' keeps making me think of 'amen'. Linked to 'virgins'...hmmm. And waiting by a window...of opportunity, possibly.

Interesting - lots in this.

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Original item by John Togher

hi dave - i like this as it would have been easy to carry the falling on but this is clearly a short fall - lol

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