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The leftovers

The leftovers

We keep the carcass
They're not interested in that
They want the eggs
From where the birds nest sat

The carcass contained a soul
But now they attack the container of the soul bit by bit
There wasn't enough in the birds wooden bowl
So they eat down to her eyeball pits

Pecking the meat off the carcass bones
Eyeing all the other predators in beware
Stripping down her home
Only for their stomachs they care

They throw away the carcass
And boast to their friends
They leave the rest of the carcass to us
But never visited the bony carcass again

◄ The eighth sin

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<Deleted User> (6895)

Wed 12th Jan 2011 21:51

by just saying-brilliant! quantifies my personal intent!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 11th Jan 2011 12:38

This has many interesting ideas in it, and some good lines. I like: 'they eat down to her eyeball pits', very graphic. I'm presuming you are using a metaphor, but I'm not sure for what. Would you consider a bit of explanation? No problem if you don't want to; poetry thrives on the enigmatic. You will enjoy WOL; we are an eclectic bunch and do welcome newcomers.

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