<Deleted User> (7789)
Sun 23rd Jan 2011 13:29
Hey, some really top quality observations there Larisa!
Comment is about RZHEPICKS (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
great poem and imagery very well written i will be checking out the vid
Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)
Original item by Andy N
So who's a big romantic then? I would be very touched if someone wrote this for me. x
Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Then I'm an idiot for not realising that Dan and I will happily add you to my FB friends and get you to take my piccie if we ever meet! ;)x
Comment is about Are you a narcisst (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hooks
thankyou for your comment!
Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Hi Isobel the poem is a spoof and a meant to be funny or humouress i hope it suceeds in its aims it was brought about by one of my female friends joking that she was an narcisst and I wrote it for her for a giggle
Dan
Comment is about Are you a narcisst (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hooks
I can't. I have too many clothes and my friends think I'm great. They wouldn't be my friends if they didn't :)
I'm very punctual though cos I see it as disrespectful to others not to be - so perhaps I'm not a total narcissist.
I can see elements in the poem that would be very objectionable in others - I can't see the motivation in writing such a poem though. I would just say let them get on with it - they're not ruining my life.
Comment is about Are you a narcisst (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hooks
i can confidently say no to all the aboves but i can more confidently say yes to the greatness of this poem. it has a deserving disgust at the perpatrators of the theme
Comment is about Are you a narcisst (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hooks
I was going to comment on the last poem you posted but it has gone now. I'd meant to come back to it when I had more time and thought that it had been buried by ten tons of.... as happens on here.... but I see that it has quite simply gone.
There was a lot of great imagery in it - parts of it were a bit repulsive though - the worming cold tongue and all... couldn't make my mind up whether it was old man with young girl or two old people - the female being a nicer person :)
Ho hum. It was different anyway. x
Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 22nd Jan 2011 17:12
ta Mr Burns for night walking comments-glad you like-as I do yours to be sure-just keep rockin is all I ask..fanx-SW
Comment is about Burns (poet profile)
Original item by Burns
Ha - I did think about something along those lines Paul - that was the only thing missing.
The poem is about WOL weariness, which can quite often mirror world weariness. It isn't a good poem but it reflects quite well how I was feeling on Friday 21st January at 10.00 pm. :)
Comment is about La dee da dee da (blog)
Original item by Isobel
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 22nd Jan 2011 16:43
I like it Dave-very cute! oh those Aunties eh-having said that,my Aunty Molly(and Uncle Vic)were life savers-always there with a lovely Sunday dinner and half a crown spends-in our days of having bugger all never mind food-I can still see my little sister and I walking down the little whitewashed hallway into Aunty Mollys tiny living??room-Billy Cotton blaring away and the old cast iron range emitting the most wonderful meaty aromas-those most memorable times even if we did have to walk ten cursed miles(not having bus fare)to get there-good lessons for the future I can assure you-good poem Dave but Aunty Mollys Sunday dinner beats it....tongues hanging! ta matey-Stef.
Comment is about The Very First Time (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 22nd Jan 2011 16:27
...quarry
cruel but beautiful
in its persuasiveness
imprisoning,albeit temporarily
the awaiting metamorphosis
of spring
lifting the sheeted ghost
dissipating the shrivelled air
melting the stilled
ledge and bough adorned
jewellery.
begone glare-white mornings!
away yawnings misted!
Comment is about Fancy adding to this??? (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
great poem, i really like the repitition and i can easily empathize with the theme
Comment is about Standing close (blog)
Original item by Dermot Glennon
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 22nd Jan 2011 13:13
hi Kath-just blimped this posting-would be a pleasure to add to this brillantly started poem-off to rack my little brain and get back to you one this one-ta chuck-Stef.x
Comment is about Fancy adding to this??? (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 22nd Jan 2011 13:08
Good afternoon Ann-sorry for late response to your very encouraging comments on my last three poems-was busy-driving for four droning hours down(or up?)too many miles of motorway-hence the long lie in-the consolation of the drive was the accompaniment of a lovely lovely yellow(cheeses coloured you would say)Moon,smiling ever so sweetly-wowsers! thanks again darling-means so so much..Stef.xx
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
<Deleted User> (7212)
Sat 22nd Jan 2011 12:05
"thats all folks"
Hi - Good one Kealan - but what you omit to say is that we're ALL dead already ;)
Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)
Original item by Kealan Coady
<Deleted User> (7212)
Sat 22nd Jan 2011 11:50
if people keep posting - where's all my F***ing mail??
the post office are shite.
...is this about people then ?
Comment is about La dee da dee da (blog)
Original item by Isobel
<Deleted User> (7212)
Sat 22nd Jan 2011 11:47
Stone me.
Glass screams shatter through the cold, stone walls,
echoed by a cruel wind.
Outside the snow-blanketed ground is harsh,
it's fleecy coverlet hiding a frozen, unforgiving
quarry - and it's not easy hiding a quarry.
Comment is about Fancy adding to this??? (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Dave, Re Ghazal (your hair) Thankyou for the comments of your kind self and your anonamous friend! :-) Win
Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
I agree with Steve. It's the nature of the electronic world that people become invisible more easily than in the 'real' physical world. A powerful, raw poem. The beat goes on, it sweeps us up, but every now and then a different mood comes along, and we stand aside and ask what is happening to people
Comment is about La dee da dee da (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Hehe - wisdom and a little wry humour :) Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Reward (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
And he looks the spit of that chap that plays James Bond!
Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Struck a chord here - very deeply. haven't yet made it to point of re-entry myself - but yes, writing and sharing experiences helps.
Well done.
Cx
Comment is about Upon Disappearing (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Many thanks, all, for the comments.
Afficionados among you will have spotted the deliberate mistake in the photo - one of the fillers is indeed himself "wrong road round". That it was posed is given away by the one on the right sporting starched white collar and cuffs - the mining equivalent of Spartacus' wristwatch.
Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Many thanks, J, for your comments on Wrong Road Roun'. Much appreciated.
Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)
Original item by John Aikman
I mean a revolution of every part of existence. Social, moral, sexual, political, poetical, symmetrical, geographical, autotraumatical....
Comment is about now (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Hi,
Thank you for reading and commenting :-)
Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
<Deleted User> (7075)
Fri 21st Jan 2011 20:13
Hi Clarissa, Nice to see you here. keep posting and commenting. Winston
Comment is about clarissa (poet profile)
Original item by clarissa
This is deadly. Theres a structured carelessness to it that I appreciate.
Comment is about Untitled Bubble (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
It's a gift, Steve.
Don't know where you get the "totally beautiful" from, Ann.But thanks anyway.
Comment is about Evanescent (blog)
Nice stuff man i like the idea of regressing soldiers. Vivid imagery throughout and an enjoyable read
Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Nice one Andy. Hope you had a balcony to sit on and enjoy the scene together.
Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Neat, neat, neat!
Fabulous poem and a great example of using a structure to drive the narrative creating double the impact. There's altogether too much 'free verse' chucked out on WOL in the name of poetry...it seldom is.
This is a poem! And a damned good one at that.
Thank you.
Jx
Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (8730)
Fri 21st Jan 2011 14:39
<Deleted User> (8730)
Fri 21st Jan 2011 14:38
Well done Andy, very romantic and very in the moment and mindful
Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Good poem,but why the snigger?
Comment is about The moon weeps (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Andy this is a beautiful poem,I really enjoyed reading it.I especially liked the last verse brilliant.
Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)
Original item by Andy N
its almost like being under hypnosis...
Comment is about Before the Curtains Open (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Thanks for your thoughts on Wrong Road Roun'. It's a phrase I heard often enough in my youth on first dates!
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thanks for your thoughts on Wrong Road Roun'. I confess I never did a stint underground although I had 21 years in the industry.
Incidentally, it's not so bad being in a confined space - I'd hold your hand.
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Same as Andy I like how it breaks down at the end. The first 2 lines of 2nd verse speak to me - grew up in a house that had ice on the inside of the windows in winter.
Strong, and haunting...quite scary too in places...those dolls eyes...
Comment is about I cannot write. (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Some lovely lines in here, cracking opening.
who knows what anybody does to another? quite.
and 'but not' :) nice ending
Comment is about Untitled Bubble (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Good stuff John - I do like how you portray these historical events. Terrible conditions back then. But humour to be found :)
Comment is about Wrong Road Roun' - An Urban Villanelle (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (7789)
Sun 23rd Jan 2011 13:53
We would all like to be narcissists though if we could. I wish I could be - altho admittedly I probably was a bit when i was younger!!
Comment is about Are you a narcisst (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hooks