great idea kenny, well written x

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Original item by Steven Kenny

really enjoyed this ray

Comment is about The Pits (blog)

I enjoyed this read thanks..the metaphor is strong for me :)

Comment is about You in the gilded cage (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Powerful poem Stella. As others have said, it worked as performance and it certainly works on the page

Comment is about Christmas Comes Early (blog)

You make some very unusual connections in this poem Stella. I would never have thought of combining Christmas and romance in a poem about landmines and wasted life.
The last verse carries a very powerful punch though and I like the use of colour. As Laura says, you do perform this poem beautifully. x

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A Poem entitled 'The Pull' by Graham Robinson (after divorce)

You go into a pub a club or a bar
it doesn't matter where you are-
you are looking good and smelling fine
perhaps you drinking some beer or wine-
you look around for that encouraging smile
then you sit quietly and wait for a while-
suddenly you catch a lady's fleeting glance
Yes! there is eye contact, it's not just chance-
you see her breasts rising both up and down
look she is smiling at you there is no frown-
you walk over slowly, smile and say Hi or hello
she thinks Oh bloody hell here we go-
you think she reminds you of your ex
she thinks you are like most men and just want sex-
you both feel that vital chemistry straight away
and you know that it is only a matter of time before you share that overnight stay!

(From my book 'Observations On Life' - available from Graham or www.countyvise)..this poem was read out by Graham on City talk FM.

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Original item by Graham Robinson

Hi Rob,

I have pasted in a temp photo of you for now as you said you were having a few probs. Just replace it and add some samples when you can. Winston

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Original item by Robert Goodier

I too enjoyed this Yvonne..like the jump my eyes had to make.. :)

Comment is about DEFINED (blog)

Original item by Yvonne

In late (my wol has been playing up but seems a little better now) WoW Ray...thought provoking and strong .. super work.. :)

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Oh you idolatress you...packed a punch Laura...Magog..well when that final battle comes remind which side to be on..

Comment is about Biblical Imbecility (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

J.C. - you are surely the best interpreter of your humorous verse - classic rendering that
stands alongside Stanley Holloway - no sweat!
Like Greg - I have only been a pillion passenger but that was enough for me. I had that feeling of having no control over my immediate destiny!! But a pal has a Vincent
Black Shadow and rides it all over the world.

Comment is about BSA Bantam (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I hear what you say about the last line - but
it helps if you pause just that little bit
longer after "lie" - and read the last line
almost as an afterthought.
I was torn between making it tidier and making
it say what I felt - and the latter won.
Many thanks for the comments.

Comment is about OLD SOLDIERS - a poem for Remembrance Day (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Hi Nick, 'Elegy for Youth' many thanks for the kind comments.

Comment is about Nick Coleman (poet profile)

Original item by Nick Coleman

peaches are soft and fuzzy and lovely to eat but
apples grow back at home
where youre from
in that sphere of real
and we should know better
than to think
the appeal of the peach will be enough for
us to eat and keep healthy.

blah blah, good poem, its all food for thought.

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John had a new motorbicycle
Which he used to think all very nicecycle,
But he thought it got last
When he tried to go fast
For his nose it got froze like an icecycle.

John, twenty stone on a 175 c.c. is sheer cruelty to motor bikes.

Comment is about BSA Bantam (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

My sympathies!
Had one as well ... I was working at the time in electronics design, quite complex stuff, amplifiers and suchlike for the Post Office, but one thing I couldn't fix when it went wrong was the bloody electrics on that bike ...

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Original item by John Coopey

Absolutely LOVED this when you read it at the Tudor Stella - fantastic poem, in all respects, and you are a brilliant performer to boot

Comment is about Christmas Comes Early (blog)

Thanks, Isobel, Dave, Steve, John. The poem was inspired by a book I'm very fond of, Journal of a Plague Year, by Daniel Defoe.The narrator tells of fortitude in the face of hardship and suffering yet can't help but chide humanity from time to time for its wickedness and lack of faith.
I suppose I understand and accept the need for suffering, but only in principle,only theoretically.
Ill look up those poets, Steve, thanks.Funny you should mention Eliot. The Defoe book inspired another poem of mine, His Works, which someone likened to Eliot.
The Pie Tavern is a pub in the book that the narrator retires to after some particularly distressing scenes. I wanted to include it because it's such a great name for a pub!
I guess it depends how you pronounce "torments", John.

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Moi aussi. Very powerful, Ray. I read this a few times and found some avenue of image new easch time.
I don't understand though the reference to the Pie Tavern (unless it's Mrs Miggins's from Blackadder!).
Also, I know you know what you're doing so you must have a reason for inverting the iambic rhythm into trochaic for "for what torments". This last line didn't quite work rhythmically for me.

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Powerful. Perplexity and anger in a form that works. Two books come to mind. The Problem of Pain by CS Lewis (1940). A serious attempt to cover the subject by one of the twentieth century's brightest Christians. It reads well and has sold well, but years later he admitted it was too superficial. And Silence by Shusaku Endo (1966), said to be one of the century's greatest novels. Endo was that rare thing, a Japanese Catholic. He wrestled with God's silence in the face of suffering and in the end could find no answer. If there is a God, as I believe, then there must be an answer, but it is unimaginable.

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Love the flow of this poem, beautifully written.

Comment is about Home (blog)

Original item by Ushiku Crisafulli

All this talk of bare arses reminds me ... I must find somewhere decent to park my bike!

Comment is about The male muse: poetic chaps bare more than their souls for charity (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Love the detail in this, John, although I was never a biker. But I once rode pillion and went through the pain barrier at 70mph along the A3 one January at about 6.30am, to go and queue at Chelsea for Cup tickets. That was enough for me.

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Original item by John Coopey

This is very powerful Stuff, Ray. Understanding the existence of suffering is one of the hardest things for a believer to explain. In fact it is beyond explanation.

The simplistic idea that the afterlife is some reward or penalty is also hard to believe. You are tackling the big questions in this poem...

I love the tight construction of it and the language you have used.

If I were to plead the case for God - I would say that his image and public persona is one created by man - ironically...

Comment is about The Pits (blog)

Nice poem, Stella. Maybe needs tidying up a bit.Loved these lines

fine wine loosens the tongue

and the table-top drums

to our laughter.

I assume you mean "you know too well".
Not quite sure who is the "other" but definitely think you should end the line on it, perhaps omit "you say" entirely.

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Love it. you got us old bbbbritish bbbbbikers to a tee. teenage leather gloves on cylinder fins atop the forest on 5am way to unpaid pigfarm work in the snow. Push start down the hill every day, top speed of mine -65mph for all of its 250cc's. Your poem is a Classic.

Comment is about BSA Bantam (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thought provoking. I like this. Sadly Afghanistan is a life time away for too many

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Don't worry Steve, I'm born and bred estate trash myself, if you get scared, you can hide behind me. I have to copy and paste this from FB too, hope it's OK Adam - We can confirm that our surprise naked guest poet is Owen Sheers - his image will only be shown at the exhibition... and thats legally binding (no digital copies and even the negatives have been destroyed) its your only chance to see this man. That should drag them out the woodwork.

Comment is about The male muse: poetic chaps bare more than their souls for charity (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Red very profound! white powdered habit? pulling the wrong shift? I'ts tragic really, I am having lots of probs on wol? keep struggling through. xx

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I enjoyed reading this! I love last line, brings it all together and makes you remember x

Comment is about OLD SOLDIERS - a poem for Remembrance Day (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Wotcha MC.
Another cracker. Philipos has it about right when he says the brevity and simplicity only enhances its power and poignancy.
I go back far enough to remember the Armistice Day parades being of the young men and the old. Then there seemed to be only old men. How sad there that are young men again.

Comment is about OLD SOLDIERS - a poem for Remembrance Day (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Ahh I liked this..it is very effective in it's message :)

Comment is about OLD SOLDIERS - a poem for Remembrance Day (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Me too. It's been very, very slow recently. I can almost keep up with it!

Comment is about Is Anyone Else Having Problems Navigating WOL?? (blog)

Good to see you post again, Shirley.
Enjoyed this. A true story of your expeience?
I still think it would come across even better accompanied by a southern drawl in an audio!

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Original item by Shirley Smothers

Strange to hear it. It's so easy to use, so quick to install anything here. May be your internet is slow.

Comment is about Is Anyone Else Having Problems Navigating WOL?? (blog)

Hi Julian,
Just read this as back from hols. You use use Olympian as a negative adjective, I am so excited about the Olympics!! Perhaps it's possible to be a literary athlete literally?

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Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks for kind comment. You keep on writing - and I do also like the illustrations

Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)

Original item by Shirley Smothers

I really enjoyed this it has a great economy of words without effecting its power. Might I suggest you lose one of the words in the last line of the final stanza, perhaps 'but' to maintain the otherwise excellent flow.

Comment is about OLD SOLDIERS - a poem for Remembrance Day (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Dunno bout that Adam. I'll be soooo busy with pre-arranged eating of pizza and drinking of red wine in New Brighton on the 12th.

What is your launch for, fella, any road? Is it erotic art? I'm very easily exicted.

And will there be any middle class people there - or academic feminist bluestockings? I can't be in the company of such people. They make me come out in hives.

Isobel, you will have to make to with all the pictures of me you have in that love grotto you have dedicated to Northern Love Gods in your attic.

Comment is about The male muse: poetic chaps bare more than their souls for charity (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks for that information..I would think it is only a temp glitch..but I had problems last night and this afternoon too..anyways best wait and see.. :)

Comment is about Is Anyone Else Having Problems Navigating WOL?? (blog)

I have found certain things a bit slow lately, esp getting to see the blogs. That really does take ages - about a minute in fact! (just tried it)

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hi winston,
thanks for comment it was my first attempt. Thanks too for suggesting the "found" website, along the same lines "Snakeskin" online poetry are canvassing for found poems for their Feb edition.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hello Stella - I have met some problems uploading stuff - usually in the afternoon.
Very frustrating when a full poem has been set up - only to be met with a page that tells me there is "no page to go to". I have contacted
Julian who asks to be kept informed. He thinks
a "spike" (technical) may be the cause. I have
to say this has been intermittent e.g. I have
JUST uploaded a new poem with NO problem at all...only to read your latest post to which this is a reply.

Comment is about Is Anyone Else Having Problems Navigating WOL?? (blog)

This catches well the spirit of the day

Comment is about OLD SOLDIERS - a poem for Remembrance Day (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

You have retrieved me from suspended animation....
tax reasons you see, I have to spend a certain time dead.... now you have awakened the beast you
must suffer the consequences of my poetry ha ha...
now where was I .... Oh yes ,The dank and drear... forsook thine rampasitodius flotulating mmmm...
Hope you are well Lady Lucan ;-) XXXX

Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)

Original item by Beulah

Excellent, if unsettling. There WAS a person behind that impersonal death.

Comment is about The deceased's last meal was a cheese and tomato omelette (blog)

Original item by STEVE RUDD

I would say it is safe :)xx and I'm glad to see you resurface.

Comment is about Blip Blip (blog)

Original item by Beulah

Very powerful and well written. I like the detached unemotional style you have used. It gets your point across well.

Comment is about The deceased's last meal was a cheese and tomato omelette (blog)

Original item by STEVE RUDD

Well I'm sure he could be persuaded. What better platform for his fat airy arse?

Comment is about The male muse: poetic chaps bare more than their souls for charity (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

thanks Dave, no, it's the right one.. it's all in the lyrics.. :) thanks again, Debz x

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