Thanks for your comments Katie, you are very kind :) Best wishes Dave

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Thanks Katie, you are very kind :) Best wishes Dave

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Your poetry is odd and unique the way you have no stanzas; truthful and panoramic. I can see the steps of your thought process, each line is like a step. Very inspirational, a voice of wisdom.

I adore your sample. The hole in the pocket reminds me of The Beatles Yellow Submarine when Ringo finds he has a hole in his pocket.

Cheers!

Comment is about Twilbury Wist (poet profile)

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Hi, Dave. Thank you for the inspirational words of advice.

Your sample poem is absolutely lovely. Great imagery.

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I like the lack of use of the title in the actual poem. It gives it an element of wonder. Like there is a secret only the poet is wise to. Yet it also makes us use our brains more in thinking what a dinosaur has to do with it.

But then you explained it in a comment, which is helpful.

Comment is about The Gay Dinosaur (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

It is sad but very true that nothing is original, because it is all made from this Earth and the Earth has no care in being original, but merely plots our survival and demise; much the same as we do.

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Thank you, Cynthia, for the kind words in appreciation of my poem STAGNANT and my poetry in general.

I have not spent much time reading other's poetry on this site until now. I especially connected to your poem 'The Dream-footer' in your samples; very natural imagery, absolutely pleasing, especially when reading it while listening to Chopin. The gypsy almost seemed to metaphorically be like that violet in the last stanza. Big, and perhaps a natural beauty about it no one else cares to notice.

I plan on going through each and every lovely bit of writing you have to offer.

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LOL - great stuff Lynn. In our house it is the cats that bring those gifts - rather a lot of those are frogs, some of which we discover hopping around far from the cat flap, but a couple were only discovered when furniture was moved, life long extinct... Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Unwanted Gifts (blog)

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'Then after I’ve had a skin full
Half a bargain bin full...'
This poem is like a bag of pick 'n mix... but full of little gems.
Carefree to a meek and mild superman.
I really like this Martin.

Comment is about I want more (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Hi Lynn
Thanks for the reply about World Cup Widow. I just wanted to put a different take on the World Cup and from a female perspective. Domestic Violence is dreadful and statistically it increases when England lose. Love is blind... and lets hope they win.

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Hi Cynthia
Thanks for your comments about a short walk. It was based on a walk I went on with my wife and friends around the coast of Anglesey in North Wales in the spring. It's a good point about Baroness, I like the way that word has turned out there even though I had previously thought about changing it.
Thanks again

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Hehe - a well spun tale Cynthia, with a hint of fresh mischief - on behalf of the young man of course... Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about The Single Man (blog)

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Well Richard I confess to 55 years of myopic vision, but perhaps sometimes when we close our eyes we see more clearly and capture that focus in words... Best wishes, Dave

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You already have a powerful 'voice' as evidenced by this piece and your profile alone. Keep that underlying passion and let it drive your future path as it is a well of creativity that bonds with messages worth hearing. Best wishes, Dave

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A belated welcome to WOL from me too. I hope the site proves to be a second home for you, with it's rich library of diverse poetry - and poetic voices. Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Twilbury Wist (poet profile)

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Ah yes, we all have so many of those fragments of time we could benefit from reclaiming! Well expressed thoughts...

Best wishes, Dave

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Thanks I think lol

Comment is about Beyond an end (blog)

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And a belated welcome to WOL from me too. :)

I'm sure you will enjoy the wealth of poetry to be found here and we will hopefully encourage you further. Though some 48 years have passed now, I was once a teenage poet too, finding my voice in questioning the Vietnam war among other things...

Best wishes, Dave

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Original item by Em

Hope and heartache captured in one poem - I like it. :)

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about My Smile Is Not For You (blog)

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Like it - indeed as you say there are so many people who would have had a totally different life if they just had the one person believe in them enough to open doors for them.
Best wishes, Dave

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Welcome to WOL Hari, I hope you will enjoy sharing and reading poetry with all the diverse people here. Best wishes, Dave

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Hi Hari, an interesting piece that I feel will need a few readings before I can be sure I have grasped everything you have embedded there... Best wishes, Dave

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HI Daniel, glad to see such topics being covered, I figure the medium of poetry should cover things that are often swept under the table, the lyrics of popular songs rarely manage to give victims an anthem they can adopt... Best wishes, Dave

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Thanks for your comments Daniel :)

I grew to like the Acrostic form some while ago - sometimes it can help structure a poem from a short phrase, almost like having a template to start each line with.

I hope you will enjoy experimenting with the acrostic form. :)
Sad about Elvis, often remembered for his less positive traits rather than the vocal skills he undoubtedly had. I think the line "There's a man works down the chip shop swears he's Elvis" from the Kirsty MacColl did a lot to focus on his ballooning weight issues in later years, not exactly the image his fans would want to retain!

ATB Dave

Comment is about SEESAW WHAT MORE IS IN STORE (blog)

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Thank you! I love your picture and I like your poem The Dream-footer, it's very peaceful and free

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thank heaven for fun that doggies bring eh Lynn?



keep 'em coming girl!x

Comment is about Unwanted Gifts (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Cynthia-'without squashing fruit or fresh bread'indicates to me that you have other items in your bag.

then-you 'fish for a fiver'
then-you 'pocket my change'

bloody norah! which branch of Tesco's do YOU shop at?

Comment is about The Single Man (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Well written and cutting, I think this is very good, Daniel.

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Thank you very much to you all for your kind comments :-)

Stef and Patricia, good one, funnier than my poem! Ha ha xx

Comment is about Unwanted Gifts (blog)

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Very enjoyable piece, Cynthia. I like this a lot.

Comment is about The Single Man (blog)

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Hi Cynthia, thank you very much for your kind comments on 'Unwanted Gifts', much appreciated.

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Hi Dave
I am so naive that I had seen poetry like this before but had no idea it was called an acrostic.
It has inspired me to have a go at something like this in the future. Thank you.
I think your poem captures the full imagination of the slideshow.. as if I received it myself.
Elvis is alive and well and shops in the USA at Walmart;)

Comment is about SEESAW WHAT MORE IS IN STORE (blog)

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Hello Dave,
Thank you very much for your comment on 'World Cup Widow' it was very much appreciated. Like yourself I also cannot see why any man would want to resort to any kind of violence after his team loses. Unfortunately the days of being humble in victory and gracious in defeat seem to get more rare.
Much appreciated.

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Thank you for championing Write Out Loud, MC, in the national press. Good on you.

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Hi Helene, thank you for sharing your poem. It truly is beautiful and I can so relate

Comment is about Unlovable (blog)

Hi Cynthia, thank you for your comment and your suggestion. It is truly appreciated

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Isn't it amazing how one phrase/idea/jewel-of-my-own-thought haunts a poet until it must be used!

Comment is about THE LONG VIEW (re-post). (blog)

I enjoyed this, the inherent thought and development of your theme. It's an interesting metaphor, building on a conception of 'limbo'. I'm having trouble following the 'dance' idea since I think 'limbo dancing' is a group activity of much muscular effort and noisy, vocal encouragement.

Or maybe your 'Limbo' is the 'borderline area of Hell' where undeserving souls suffer their eternal days because they have been relegated to Hell through no fault of their own, but still are denied Heaven.

But, perhaps, to be 'in limbo' is now such a casual expression it can be taken wherever the writer wants to go. But it still conflicts with current feisty, physical LIMBO DANCING.

Welcome aboard. I look forward to more of your work.

Comment is about Limbo Days (blog)

Original item by Rosie Vallack Mor

Tricia, an excellent theme, whether personal or not - trust and vulnerability smashed by dangerous truth. The 'rose' is a good metaphor and carried through to the conclusion. I suppose the use of 'gullibility' is meant to raise more general thought about the 'innately trustful'.

Comment is about THE ROSE (blog)

Original item by Tricia Hague-Barrett

Delightful, fast and funny. I love throw-offs like this; keeps poetry in perspective.

Comment is about Unwanted Gifts (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

These metaphors are not easy, but I think I'm coping - up to a point. This is a theme that thrives on all types of personal, poetical input.

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This event has now been postponed until September.

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Original item by Greg Freeman

This is an excellent theme, with a great title, and it makes some very salient points.

Comment is about Tightrope Woman (blog)

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Katie, I have been sliding over your entries because the use of such identifications as 'Pity-Poetry' usually indicates a very self-absorbed, immature dumping of personal angst best resolved in a diary until the critical urge passes, and a more reasoned need for sharing ideas emerges.

I was wrong. I will earnestly do some catch-up because you are definitely worth reading. I see we have two 'fav poets' in common. I NEVER go that route; that is, until recently.

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This work has much power, in theme, thought, and poetic skill. The diction sustains its potency. IMO, the concluding stanza is a compelling metaphor because it is both apt and humorous.

Comment is about STAGNANT (blog)

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This flows along as the reader follows 'the walk'. It's a slow read, but that is in keeping with the subject as the description 'gathers you in'.

Perhaps in line 5, you meant 'barrenness' with the idea of 'bleakness, without life'? Or, maybe 'baroness' is an old spelling of the same idea, and it has just transferred into a new meaning. I enjoy words that have done that.

Comment is about A short walk (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

This subject of this poem is utterly recognisable to me Cynthia, and the last line is quite profound.

Comment is about The Mirror (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thank you both very much. However, i admit to doubts about the pay-off. I wanted to include it in a book of poems i've put together and so i feel i perhaps rushed the ending for the sake of inclusion. I've put it back on the drawing board and plan to rework it. Your comments give me pause, but i have to be true to the poem and i think it needs attention.
It sprang from 'cobbled tongues...'; a notion i was pleased to pursue but i think it loses its way. Anyway, we'll see what happens. Thanks again though, your comments are always welcome.

Comment is about THE LONG VIEW (re-post). (blog)

I have zero interest in football and can't begin to understand the mentality of the drunken husband attacking his wife because his team lost...

But putting the topic aside it is a poem I can readily applaud.

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about WORLD CUP WIDOW (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Hi Shirley-Anne
I too have family who served, like your Paternal Grandfather, (at that time) with the Manchester Regiment. In fact Wilfred Owen himself was commissioned in June 1916 and served with the 2nd Battalion in France.
Thank you for your very kind words about 'The Place were only Dead Men Sleep'.
Much appreciated.

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