An evening with you
Poetry
Wine
Kisses
Read out to me
Jack
Kerouac
Between sips
Lips
Tasting of wine
Rhyme
An evening with you
Comments
Poetry kiss
slight taste
of rhyme.
But reading
it out
bitter lips.
Preeti Sinha
Sun 28th Sep 2014 03:37
Graham, that's a fair observation. But better is the analogy you used about the headlines and not the whole gory story :0
Am trying to learn. But words feel so wrong; I am unable to articulate exactly how I'm feeling.
Thanks for the feedback.
Preeti I don't want you to be upset by these comments because they are seriously made.
I've read most of your posts since you joined WOL and to me they are like reading the headlines of the news without the full story. I want more than what you are giving me.
Please start fleshing out these skeletons and put some serious poetic flesh on the bones. I am confident you can do it.
Very best, Graham
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Preeti Sinha
Mon 29th Sep 2014 15:36
Very nice, Nigel! Now why couldn't I do it :0