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Rachel McGladdery

Tue 13th Jul 2010 10:23

Hello, sorry I have been away for so long....had something of a block of late (blog poem may explain lol)so better keep me at arm's length in case it's contagious! :)
Rach
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Andy N

Tue 13th Jul 2010 08:11

lot of good imagery in this, steven... enjoyed this however the last line 'a raw and vacuous home' is jarring a bit in my head for some reason.

top banana otherwise, bud

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Andy N

Tue 13th Jul 2010 08:09

possibly my favourite piece of yours to date, cynthia.. Loved it but it was very very sad

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Andy N

Tue 13th Jul 2010 08:08

Very powerful, Ian.

You can tell this came right from the heart.

I particularly enjoyed the drip, drip references and the ending.

Will keep my eyes open for more.

Top banana!

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Andy N

Tue 13th Jul 2010 08:01

love 'bonkersness', Dermot in particular.. top banana (to quote dom) - enjoyed this!

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Andy N

Tue 13th Jul 2010 07:59

i hinted at this on f/book last night, Georgina but this really has the feel of a song in it to me (would be a very short song of course however)... but you should certainly keep believing in yourself with your work... i remember what my work was like when i was your age and i'll tell you for nothing - it was no-where near as good! x

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Tue 13th Jul 2010 07:17

This made me feel quite sad really Cynthia, I expect a lot of people will relate to the feeling of wanting to reach out, but not wanting to intrude, or feeling it is futile, love it.

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Isobel

Tue 13th Jul 2010 06:59

Yes - that is a lovely life affirming poem with originality as has already been said.

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Tue 13th Jul 2010 06:32

It's brilliant zion, I love it.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Tue 13th Jul 2010 01:42

Thank you my dear Lynn for understanding.
With warmest wishes, Larisa

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Tue 13th Jul 2010 01:41

Thank you my dear Lynn for understanding.
With warmest wishes, Larisa

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winston plowes

Mon 12th Jul 2010 22:55

earth calling mars.... earth calling mars... comein mars. Its beena while Rachel? Win x

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winston plowes

Mon 12th Jul 2010 22:34

hi Steve, for no real reason other than ambling through the lanes of the internet I hav had a relaxing time looking at your costal views paintings .Night view 1 being my favourite. I think I will retire within the sound of the sea... both tonight and in old age. toodle pip. Win

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Isobel

Mon 12th Jul 2010 22:27

Glad to hear you still take an interest in the themed poetry project - even though you chose not to get involved much in the last one.We will probably do somthing in the autumn, if there are still any poets left on here by then. Not too sure about that theme though. I'm getting the waft of smelly carpets and rancid ginger biscuits...

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Isobel

Mon 12th Jul 2010 22:04

I would agree with the rest Cynthia - a reminder to us all of what awaits us and the need to make the most of life now, perhaps. I like the picture you have drawn - you can so imagine the brooch, carefully chosen each day and just what lies beneath...
A very haunting piece.

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Steven Kenny

Mon 12th Jul 2010 21:53

Thank-you for your comments on 'And Finally...' Marianne! It means a lot that it had such an effect on you! :-)

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Mon 12th Jul 2010 21:35

wow! a very rich tone to your voice Larisa reading this lovely poem-I can imagine you reading some of the old classics brilliantly-thanks-Stefan-xx

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Lynn Dye

Mon 12th Jul 2010 21:26

Completely agree with Cynthia and Dave, wonderful idea and it flows so well too.

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winston plowes

Mon 12th Jul 2010 21:24

Quality... I love this Heather. Win x

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Lynn Dye

Mon 12th Jul 2010 21:12

Wonderful poem, Cynthia, I really enjoyed the contrasts in this. Well done, Lynn xx

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Lynn Dye

Mon 12th Jul 2010 21:01

Hi Larisa, yes, you are so right, it is the same on television in the UK as well, especially with female presenters, news readers etc. Men can be any age but women have to be under 40 and attractive to stay on our screens. C'est la vie. Take care, Lynn xx

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Lynn Dye

Mon 12th Jul 2010 20:54

Hi Larisa, thank you for commenting on "Friendship". Just realised it has the same title as one of yours, oops, I'd have given it a slightly different title had I realised! Stay well, love, Lynn xx

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Mon 12th Jul 2010 20:27

Thanks Cynthia, understand what your saying re horses but would imagine that to the guys being charged and trampled on they were "bastard horses"
Bernie

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 12th Jul 2010 19:18

I think this is a superb poem. Sorry I'm so late in saying so. I kept saying: I must get back. It is indeed very tender, and loving, and calls out to the reader's own heart to share your feelings. The simplicity of words, actions and thoughts strike deeply.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Mon 12th Jul 2010 19:14

In this poem I speak about the generation of women over 50 in my country. May be in US, GB or France....or any other country the situation is quite different. It could be interesting to know your opinion my dear friends.

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Dave Bradley

Mon 12th Jul 2010 19:13

Terrific. So imaginative

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 12th Jul 2010 18:58

Not at all. Extremely original, and charming. Fine diction and melody.

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Mon 12th Jul 2010 18:47

Hey up buggerlugs! no, I remember asking you about Billie Davis-and indeed she was blummin gorgeous! a bit like,erm...oh yeah! you! yes had lovely paid for weekend at the very posh Albrighton Hall hotel and spa-in beautiful Shrewsbury!where a plateful of sandwhiches cost £19!!!during the stay,bumped into Tony Ha(n)dley? the once lead singer of Spandeu Ballet..in his crinkly old shirt no less! I was going to point my finger at him and hum...ah-aha-ah-ah!(opening to True)but thought otherwise-lol! yes I really loved your poem'Friendship' good work girlie-keep em coming-catch you in a thrice(and that can be painful-ha!)Mr Wilde-xxx

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John Darwin

Mon 12th Jul 2010 17:09

Ian, really enjoyed your stuff in Wigan, this is just as powerful on the page.


John

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Ian Nenna

Mon 12th Jul 2010 17:06

Thanks Cynthia, very welcome feedback. I agree that the poem does go off and loses context and I have already re-edited/written it as it didnt work fully for me either. I posted in the hope of getting some feedback that could guide. The subject matter is close to my heart, very close, so I did find it difficult to express. Thank you :)

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Mon 12th Jul 2010 16:40

Good afternoon Heather-thank you so much for your skillful advice on my poem 'Naivety'-very helpful indeed-repair job being undertaken-many many thanks for those comments-Stef-xx

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Lynn Dye

Mon 12th Jul 2010 16:33

Thank you dear Larisa and Stefan - of course you are!! xxx

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Mon 12th Jul 2010 16:09

Good afternoon Lynn-lovely honest poem for which I honestly thank you-one of yer bezzy mates(I hope!)-Stef-xxxx

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Mon 12th Jul 2010 15:53

Good afternoon Winston-I really am grateful for your kind comments on my poem'Dirt poor'hope you are well and keep so! best regards-Stefan.

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Mon 12th Jul 2010 15:46

Good afternoon Bernadette-how kind you are for all your comments and good wishes-this site needs a lot more people like your good self-many many thanks indeed-hope you are well and also hope to read some more of your work soon-lots and lots of love-Stefan-xxx

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Gus Jonsson

Mon 12th Jul 2010 14:30

Whilst the poem is superb the first stanza is ...rare...really Wonderful.

I was spellbound, caught up in the contrasting images.... of the young Lady?... and her Grandmother.


Well done!

Gus xx

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Gus Jonsson

Mon 12th Jul 2010 14:21




Hi Isobel just copied you in...

xxx


Thanks you ladies... I wouldn't dare do a follow up...but I know a a poet who may??

Perhaps it may be offered as a lemon drizzle prize subject..


LADIES OF A CERTAIN AGE

I'm sure Isobel and Francine could arrange that... I'll send the cake overseas if it comes to it... Whatya think ???

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Gus Jonsson

Mon 12th Jul 2010 14:18

Thanks you ladies... I wouldn't dare do a follow up...but I know a a poet who may??

Perhaps it may be offered as a lemon drizzle prize subject..


LADIES OF A CERTAIN AGE

I'm sure Isobel and Francine could arrange that... I'll send the cake overseas if it comes to it... Whatya think ???

Gus xx

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Gus Jonsson

Mon 12th Jul 2010 14:17

Thanks you ladies... I wouldn't dare do a follow up...but I know a a poet who may??

Perhaps it may be offered as a lemon drizzle prize subject..


LADIES OF A CERTAIN AGE

I'm sure Isobel and Francine could arrange that... I'll send the cake overseas if it comes to it... Whatya think ???

Gus xx

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Gus Jonsson

Mon 12th Jul 2010 14:16

Thanks you ladies... I wouldn't dare do a follow up...but I know a a poet who may??

Perhaps it may be offered as a lemon drizzle prize subject..


LADIES OF A CERTAIN AGE

I'm sure Isobel and Francine could arrange that... I'll send the cake overseas if it comes to it... Whatya think ???

Gusxx

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Gus Jonsson

Mon 12th Jul 2010 14:14

Thanks you ladies... I wouldn't dare do a follow up...but I know a a poet who may??

Perhaps it may be offered as a lemon drizzle prize subject..


LADIES OF A CERTAIN AGE

I'm sure Isobel and Francine could arrange that... I'll send the cake overseas if it comes to it... Whatya think ???



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Gus Jonsson

Mon 12th Jul 2010 14:05

Thank you for your very well thought out and written critique re 'Men Of A Certain Age,...

I often catch a glimpse of myself in that poem.... sad


Thanks again.

Gus xx

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Gus Jonsson

Mon 12th Jul 2010 14:02

Thank you Cynthia re the typo She's... I had originally written a different line ... overlooked the She's....
Thank once again

Gus xx

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Andy N

Mon 12th Jul 2010 13:33

Hi Bernadette;

Pleased you are back then. Any advice I think people give you on W.O.L. is open to opinion as nobody has the same opinion whether you take it or not (but I think it’s always worth posting to see what other people think)– same goes whether you get the advice at a reading or a writing group (Used to run a writing group myself – will be starting one up again in September I think) or even at a reading before or after. I think the important thing is you reach a conclusion with a piece you are happy with. If so, the world is your oyster!

Hope you are scribbling plenty still (I am in the process of sorting out some more stuff for W.O.L. as I am just back from tour with my spoken word collective and I came back with a fistful of new pieces).

Cheers

Andy N

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Andy N

Mon 12th Jul 2010 13:31

you know me too well with my boozing stories! lol

you performing for jeffarama this time?

Cheers

Andy N

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Dave Bradley

Mon 12th Jul 2010 13:29

I was strongly gripped by this Cynthia. A simple direct focussing on a universal experience from some moments and a strong image in your own life. Would probably perform well too.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 12th Jul 2010 13:17

I'm obviously almost a dinosaur - i should have twigged to the 'sonnet form' by the stanza set-up, but I missed the clear rhymes as signposts. I have yet to tackle one; maybe this summer.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 12th Jul 2010 12:37

Good piece, Alison, to highlight the effective uselessness of 'supportive' comments after bereavement. Especially when an honest answer given in confidence steers people off.
I find the alliterative 'p' simulates 'pecking' and is quite effective.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 12th Jul 2010 12:29

Strong, even though loose in context in some lines. It has a searching message that could be made into a vital poem with some careful review. It seems unlikely that the writer would ever really slash his/her wrists fatally. Too many ideas to relish.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 12th Jul 2010 12:18

Delightful, Georgina. A personality encapsulated. I really enjoyed it. Maybe because I often laugh when I'm supposed to be serious; and I always kiss with my eyes open.

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