strength and Imagery

love it
Gus

Comment is about Ask (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Been there..on all fours in the loft...found a picture of her...then a ring...then one, two ten letters later I stand up only to split my head open on a beam... my heart was hurting more.

Well Done
Gus

Comment is about Banana Boxes (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Well done Steve
Love it...especially the penultimate verse...
..got me hooked.Regards
Gus

Comment is about Fresh (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

Hi Sian,
I can smell the banana ripeness of the yellow, creased, tainted scraps.
My experience with banana boxes is that they always have a huge hole in the bottom often packed uselessly with old newspapers in the hope the files wouldn't fall through.
This works on more than one level for me personally so all in all i think it's a great poem.

Each time i read it though i couldn't resist placing 'by' in it. Time's gone by..
That's not a criticism, i feel it was left out for a reason :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Banana Boxes (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Hi Andy,
I read this yesterday and i thought then, what a lovely poem. One which many people can relate to emotionally.
Today i read it again and it touched me deeply because of an experience i had last night, which left me feeling vulnerable. I could have done with a good old fashioned supportive hug.
So today your poem has a special feel to it for me because it shows there are people out there who care. Thankyou.

Janet.x

Comment is about Sadness (blog)

Original item by Andy Williamson

This is great stuff christopher - I had to read through a few times to tease out the best bits. It was a sad/rewarding/descovering process.
Winston

Comment is about A girl sat on a beach (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Hi Jeff, Good to see you at the Green Room last night and thanks for reading the bus stop thing today. I have tickets for an event next fri evening in Huddersfield so sadly wont be able to come to the gig, sounds good though. Hope it goes well. Win x

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi Mike, sums up well a terrible problem which shouldn't exist these days, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Tin City (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Good stuff, nice change of style and very different kind of poem, good use of words, see you friday mate!

Comment is about Phases of phrases (blog)

blazing stars, burning so vividly, into darkness

Beautiful poem Melissa, I can feel the anticipation in every line, great work, Jeff X

Comment is about Over Edge (blog)

I love the feeling that the poem that starts with
'I felt you today' evokes... your poetry is very heartfelt and sentimental...

Thank you for your comments too.

Comment is about Andy Williamson (poet profile)

Original item by Andy Williamson

Very touching poem... I love the lines
'It showed me your true self. Innocent…….vulnerable……caring. And... 'experience the hurt, to appreciate the pleasure' ...this is so true...

Comment is about Sadness (blog)

Original item by Andy Williamson

No matter what was written before them (I particularly like the letters of hate and hope line) the last two lines are the bedrock of the whole piece. Strength and fragility. Congratulations.Graham

Comment is about Banana Boxes (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Hi Sian
We all have these boxes don't we, sometimes for years. I love some of the lines "flakes of roses, Creased tainted scraps" especially. Maybe it would be possible to hone this poem even further and give it more life (or in this case less life maybe) still. Keep posting Winston

Comment is about Banana Boxes (blog)

Original item by sian howell

lovely poem... I can picture this so vividly...
very well written : )

Comment is about Banana Boxes (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Best wishes with them. I was at the Poetry Cafe yesterday picking up some Poetry Reviews then going to the Oxfam bookshop to hear some of the younger British poets read.

Comment is about Next Week's Gigs (March 10th -12th) (blog)

Original item by Alain English

an clever mix of words giving a strong impression of power captured with a sense of awe. Sian X

Comment is about Ask (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

perhaps you could post the audio version of this poem I really enjoyed it by the way... a great read. Sian

Comment is about Different Dad (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Hi Alain, Great to see that there are plenty of gigs to go to in London. Bit far away for me I'm afraid. There sould be a better, more specific place for your (or anyone elses) personal gigs to be listed than in the Blog section here. And maybe there actually is (in the discussions are) What do you think?
Winston, good luck in the slams.

Comment is about Next Week's Gigs (March 10th -12th) (blog)

Original item by Alain English

I am very impressed by the positivity of your work - heard ypou in Rochdale couple weeks ago and was very touched and impressed - well done

Comment is about Tony Walsh aka Longfella (poet profile)

Original item by Tony Walsh aka Longfella

excellent - loved it!

Comment is about Different Dad (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

what an entertaining read, you can feel the offspring cringe, dad keep on dancing! why do our kids think we're all wierd for dancing, singing and enjoying ourselves, who do they think they get it from? love it x

Comment is about Different Dad (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

i really like 'deafened by forgotten conversations'. great poem, provocative, heartfelt and a sentiment shared x

Comment is about stolen stars aka. any excuse to call london a cunt (blog)

Original item by owen calvert

lovely strong imagery and beautiful descriptions carry you through to the (her) deep sadness at the end. x

Comment is about A girl sat on a beach (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

it's stunning, in it's simplicity, it's imagery and it's intensity . a passionate piece of work x

Comment is about Ask (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Hi Deborah,
i just love the imagery in this mingled with the fiery reds, oranges and yellow.
Lovely and yet so powerful.
Janet.x

Comment is about Ask (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Two out of trio ain't bad!

Comment is about Winston Plowes (l) and Paul Blackburn at Hebden Bridge Mar 2009 (photo)

Photographs by Seamus Kelly www.shaysart.co.uk
If anyone wants a full size copy of their image Seamus will be happy to email it to them if they contact him on mail@shaysart.co.uk

Comment is about Julian Jordon at Hebden Bridge Mar 2009 (photo)

Photographs by Seamus Kelly www.shaysart.co.uk
If anyone wants a full size copy of their image Seamus will be happy to email it to them if they contact him on mail@shaysart.co.uk

Comment is about Simon Rennie at The Hole in the Wall, Hebden Bridge Feb 2009 (photo)

Hi Andy
Big tribute to the great man... Liked it a lot
Winston

Comment is about The Greatest Gig Of All (article)

Hi Winston, Thanks for the comment about Different Dad. Sadly the "wahey" dad with all the moves is fictional, I'm a dad who doesn't think he can dance. Your group work in Hebden was really powerful - Excellent. Seamus.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Christopher,
i rather like this, if that's the correct word for it.
Psychological scars can last a life-time but sooner or later they have to surface.
Bingo sounds like a super character to have known, someone to be proud of.
That's what stands out for me in your poem.
Is this a true story?

Janet.x

Comment is about Bingo (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

I might do a jiggle in Lidl.
Sounds like a fun, groovy dad to me Seamus.

I haven't been to Hebden yet. I really must see if anything can be done about that.
Janet.x

Comment is about Different Dad (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Eloquently written... I feel such empathy...

Comment is about Not Like the Rest (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

yes i enjoyed this too in hebden bridge , it has a nice rhythm when read aloud . ,,,, i dance anywhere :)

Comment is about Different Dad (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Hi Seamus
what a great overall picture this painted the other nght in Hebden. Nicely delivered. All dads are different, but this one has all the moves, wahey ! Winston

Comment is about Different Dad (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Hi Val,

Thanks for your comment on Different Dad. I don't think enough people currently tango in tesco. By the way I can't tango.

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Hi gus thanks again Sian x

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Hi Sian
...I cannot remember.... from one day to the next ...something to do with my reaching the ripe old age of 374...any way ..the jest of it was that.men as a hi bred species are delicate blooms...and are prone to wilting after excessive displays of vibrant exuberance....liken to my old and dear friend Rabbie Burns who's love was like a red red rose and after a wee dram or three was 'Inta Flora' like a wee timerous beastie up a drainpipe.
Great poem
Ever Male
Gus X

Comment is about Beware the Flowers (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Laura will treasure this poem. Takes me back to earlier days when my children where home. Thanks Chris.

Comment is about Laura Explorer (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Love the poem Sean. I will maybe Tangoing into Tesco this morning.

Comment is about Different Dad (blog)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Thank-you for reading and your comments on 'scrabble online' - it's much appreciated.
Cx

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

Hi Sian, Thanks for your comment on "Not like the rest". It is a true tragedy, but sadly not rare enough. I was close to psychiatric illness for a long time and got to see lots of flaws in the system, I also saw lots of good bits but don't tend to write about them.

I've a new poem going up later which is much less serious.

By the way "One step behind" is lovely and lets the reader create so much of their own story around it. It could apply to so many people and relationships.

Seamus x

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

can you hide that mouse in my room please, although I like mice so I'd probably just feed it and make it a little nest in the corner..a snake or a rat might work..
i really like this..perhaps she was conducting scientific experiments with penicillin type virus' and seeing how many clothes she could manage not to fit in a drawer, this clever lassy..so maybe dads should keep out of girls' messy rooms for fear of breaking that flow of innocent curiosity, or maybe that used to be my excuses..sorry.. deb : )

Comment is about Laura Explorer (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

hi Seamus, "Not like the rest" is a great piece of thoughtful and thought provoking writing and I can see from your other poetry that you have a keen insight and sensitivity to the subject matter. Having worked in the mental health service many years ago I can identify with the "tragedy" you speak of...there are too many people lost in the system some are lost forever. Sian x

Comment is about Seamus Kelly (poet profile)

Original item by Seamus Kelly

Hi Gus i mistakening deleted your last comment re my Beware the Flowers....my fault. i wondered if you could re list it as I enjoyed reading it . by the way the poem does not in anyway indicate my true feelings about men....or does it? Sian X

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

i really liked the rhythm of this little adventure. there's so much packed into it (like her room). a fun and endearing read x

Comment is about Laura Explorer (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Hi Winston,
thankyou for commenting favourably on my poem, ' Getting old.'
Janet.x

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi there,
Thank-you so much for your help and your input last night, I had a really good evening and it was lovely to meet you.
Hope you don't mind that I've incorporated your lines in to 'scrabble online' - as far as I remember them!
Cx

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Win
Thanks for those heady comments...intersting hearing you breaking new ground...my own view is that multi poet performance must be stage managed and directed in no less a fashion than that of theatre...I suppose what I mean is that more rehersal would make what you want it to be.... I'm wafflin' now sorry ...I am a ware of the logistics that stop that from happening....Still loved it...
Yes I agree a great night ...in my view the best WOL venue.
Many thanks once again
See you soon.
Gus

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes