Good morning Lynn-just popped in to say I,ve popped Pepes poem on-now I,m popping off-not in the true sense of course(drat! I hear you say-lol!)enjoy your day ducky-Stef-xx(Benji-xx)

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A very good morning to you Larisa(and McCoy)hope you are both well.I am so grateful for your comments on 'Oneness' and am very pleased its given you some inspiration-look forward to your poem.thank you-Stefan-xx(McCoy-xx)

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

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Thanks 4 commenting me! Who would think that workshops turns to be so useful!? waiting for you to post your Ireland stuff here.X

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I agree with Cynthia, it's a fantastic poem and I don't think the lack of punctuation causes anything to be lacking in either meaning or imagery.
I, too, like the references to weight and there's a hardness to the imagery that is really clever - for that reason I don't like 'eider' ... everything else seems to be hard or rough, whether a thing of beauty - like the pearl, or coarse - like the rope. Eider stood out to me, or maybe that's the point?
Love the last 2 lines especially, but less keen on the use of the last line as a title - I think I'd have just called it Stone.
Very good poem though Pete.
Hope you are well - not spoken in ages!
Cx

Comment is about The Stone I Own (blog)

Lovely description, intriguing conclusion teasing the reader. Nice one

Comment is about Llanbwychllyn Lake (blog)

Agree with Andy that this could be further developed - interesting read.
Cx

Comment is about Persephone's last laugh (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I spilt a glass of red wine on my ma-in-law's brand new (expensive) cream carpet once - I was fully clothed at the time though, perhaps that's why she didn't find it funny ;)
I did wonder if this wouldn't suit being developed in to a short story?
I like the clever use of clichés throughout; poetically - I think 'a truth that could not be diminished' is something you could really develop. Interesting read.
Cx

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

lot going on here, gus.. top banana man.. i think there is defo a lot that could be said here.. would love to see you perform this.

top stuff, man

Comment is about Stolen By The Light (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

clever stuff, tommy.. very clever.. i think you could probably do more with this piece for some reason as i think it has legs for at least another few stanzas... enjoyed it still!

Comment is about Persephone's last laugh (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Yes, but it's all about death. And yes, I love the sea too!

Comment is about surfing (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

wasn't that gloomy or doomy for me, ann. i love the sea and i enjoyed this piece, in particular the first stanza..

nice one! x

Comment is about surfing (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

wasn't sure what way this was going to go, Cythnia - always a good skill..

enjoyed this a lot.. nice one x

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

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lot of power here, Georgina for a short poem.. would like to see more in this style as i think it suits you well..

excellent stuff! x

Comment is about These Days. (blog)

Thanks for the comments on 'Chaos'. The title is from an interest in Chaos Theory - and some 'poetic licence' taken in applying it (loosely!)to human relationships;and the picture is of a fractal - interpret as you will ;)
Cx

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

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Thanks for the comments on 'Chaos'. The title is from an interest in Chaos Theory - and some 'poetic licence' taken in applying it (loosely!)to human relationships;and the picture is of a fractal - interpret as you will ;)
Cx

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Yep - agree with Ann - last verse not needed; I would also lose one of your shells in the 2nd - or replace rather.And who would miss or mourn? ... well small deeds or actions by every single, solitary soul can have a chaotic impact on many others - I can get quite caught up in chaos theories :)
Cx

Comment is about Near Death (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

It's weird really,isn't it?What we do for the pursuit of pleasure!Liked the bit about the car containing your life,and the panicked feeling of death being almost upon you.The bit about the spirits of sea-faring men dragging you out to join them,lost at sea is another good bit of imagery.Sod's law-seems to prevail whatever we do,wherever we go!Are you sure you'll do this again?

Comment is about Near Death (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Thanks Anne, looking at it now you're probably right and I might well do so - will sleep on it and look again tomorrow.

Comment is about Near Death (blog)

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Aw ta Lynn-no pets at the mo-(except one called woofy the wife)I keep her on a very short lead-lol! we lost Pepe four years ago-now I am a registered dog walker at the local refuge-and sometimes 'borrow' Skip the patterdale off wifeys friend-I will put a 'Pepe' poem on tomorrow-and we can sniffle together!until then-au revoir lovely Lady-Stef-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi again Larisa-thank you very much for reading and kindly commenting on 'Truer than true' I really appreciate it.I am also enjoying all your lovely poems too-thanks-Stef-xx

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

It's amazing how often some little accident does mess up a special moment and at last someone has written a (very good) poem about it. Well done Cynthia.

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Good for you!!

Comment is about surfing (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Wow! How exciting Dermot! I was well and truly riveted! I'd lose the last verse though. It is such an exciting poem that I think the last verse is an anti-climax. And, yes, I have just done a seafaring poem too! ;-) (As you well know!!)

Comment is about Near Death (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

I've just done a seafaring one too

Comment is about surfing (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi, dear Ann! Thank you very much for your comment on my romance "Don't go away". Ann! I am just touched. Your words really encourage me. I'll try to tape another Russian romance and would like to hear your opinion. And the main point is: it's not the question of my voice but of the words in this or that romance. With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Dear Ann! I am just touched. Your words really encourage me. I'll try to tape another Russian romance and would like to hear your opinion. And the main point is: it's not the question of my voice but of the words in this or that romance.

Comment is about Please, stay with me! (Russian romance) (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I really like this, Ann. The rhythm of the short sentences really do capture the sadness of the story, but also add a simple conversational tone. Beautifully written.

Comment is about a childhood (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

When you're in a hole stop digging Stef! The lady has a lovely Marlena quality! Right, now I've told HIM off I'll say I found this very moving Larisa. xx

Comment is about Please, stay with me! (Russian romance) (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I liked this a lot Cynthia! It surprised me, made me laugh, made me think. Not bad for a semi-sunny summer Sunday! x

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

More gloom and doom from down beach!

Comment is about surfing (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

That is one fabulous woman in the photo. You should run scared. Any man will be annihilated.

Comment is about Persephone's last laugh (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

A little something light and frothy on a semi-sunny summer Sunday afternoon.

Comment is about Cliches (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I like this Alison, and it flows nicely, not only with the rhyme, but also with the repetition of the words 'If you can' and 'And'.

Comment is about If you can ... (blog)

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Yes, Stefan, you are right, as McCoy is really gorgeous. And when I go out with him everyone admires him not me.

Comment is about McCoy (blog)

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Hi again Lynn-I know what you went through losing Max-very tough isnt it? I felt same over our Pepe-the Yorkie!hope Max isnt chasing him round doggy heaven-lol! I did a poem for my Yorkhire 'terror' as I him-put it on later-Thanks Lynn-Stef-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you Lynn

I glad I'm doin it for you... Thank you so much for reading and making comment I'm very much encouraged.

Gus xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hello isobel


many thanks for your well thought through critique... you are getting warmer.. you have to wait and read the book ....one day...

Hope you are well hope to see you soon

Gus xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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Good afternoon Dave-very grateful for your apt comments on 'Truer than true' hope you and yours are well-catch thee later pater-Stef.

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

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Hi Cynthia You know I'm far too shy and polite to tear you to pieces ... the very thought!!


Thank as always for reading...

Gus
Xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Lynn-do you own a dog food factory by any chance-it must have cost you a fortune to feed all these recues doggies along the way! think I ,ll rename you St.Winalot-lol! shame Charlie did,nt work out for you-but at least you tried-well done on that score-someone will take him on I,m sure. thanks Lynn-Stef-xx good luck Charlie!xx

Comment is about Charlie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Beautiful dog Larisa! what a sight you two must have made,walking out-never seen a dog like McCoy before-as Lynn says-gorgeous!thanks Larisa-xx(McCOY-xx)-Stefan.

Comment is about McCoy (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

What a beaut Max was Lynn! and for that matter,still is,in memory without doubt.I,m no expert when it comes to breeds but am I right in assuming he is Collie-or was he crossed with another breed? he really has a lovely look on his face.And of course once again a pat on the back to you for another rescue(oh go then and a biscuit-beg!beg! lol! rest in peace Max.-best regards Lynn-Stef-xx(Max-xx)ps.love that line-'now I look for your face in the stars'really nice-SW

Comment is about Our Max (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Cynthia

Maybe this should be moved to a discussion thread. You've highlighted one of life's apparently insoluble dilemmas, which is of particular importance to those aspiring to write. To what extent should one subordinate the negative to focussing on the positive?

I don't have an answer and would be genuinely interested in what others have to say. For myself, (and I think others) I feel a periodic compulsion to write down words which express what I am gripped by. It is something to do with 'being real' (that may sound pretentious I know). Sometimes it is 'positive' sometimes it is 'negative', and a mixed diet does seem to express reality/life/the universe or whatever we call it.

I suppose there is a type of negative poetry (sometimes seen on WOL) which sets out to disturb people for no good purpose. But that can be avoided, can it not?

Comment is about Angst (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

'where once was dressed an idol, older
no longer the desire to hold her'

What cheery lines for us 'grandes dames' of the poetry world! LOL

There is much to enjoy in the rest of the poem though and I like the realism you have injected into it. Very few relationships manage to escape the cruelties of time and familiarity...

Comment is about a pilgrimage to L'Oréal (blog)

Thanks for reading and thanks for the comments, it is much appreciated. I have left a slightly longer comment on the poem itself as to interpretation.
Cx

Comment is about Shoeless Carole (poet profile)

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Thanks for reading and thanks for the comments, it is much appreciated.
Cynthia, with most of my writing I hope there are layers - that's the way my mind works - things relate to each other in both an obvious and obscure way. I like word play, and thought play, and lateral meanings - it can be as obvious, or as deep, as you want it to be. I think with a lot of poetry the interpretation belongs to the reader, not the writer; as here - both Francine and Carole have seen different things.
Sometimes, you are quite right, I am literal and obvious, and I use poetry to try to cope with, or make sense of, things that are getting on top of me - sometimes people relate to that, sometimes they don't. But whatever my frame of mind, or my intention, or my meaning when I write something, is irrelevant to how the reader will feel about it, so why does it matter whether my intention was to be deep or literal? I am a multi-faceted person, I endeavour to make my work reflect that, sometimes it works, sometimes not.
Cx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

ya! thanks L'Oréal

Comment is about a pilgrimage to L'Oréal (blog)

Mmmm... Some wonderful imaginative lines in this Peter.

'And he must taste
Fresh lilacs second skin
Like Lycra fits hips unforgiving in allure
so curves open like a chord'

'An internal wave of passion
In an opera of tenderness
This stage is a landscape
And I drape over you
You are my flavoured gloss'

'he has become
nothing more than mulled wine'

'this paper spine is torn.'



xxxxx

p.s. I love the title, but did you mean L'Oréal? Seems to make more sense then ; )

Comment is about a pilgrimage to L'Oréal (blog)

Hi Cynthia, thanks for the comment on 'stone I own' as usual I'm never sure about posting stuff, also it looks different when you post it, I would like to take guidance on punctuation etc. I dont normally punctuate, with this one I did and its no good, so ill go and edit. I have recently been joining different poems together just to try somethin new, it may head towards a cut up idea, just to keep fresh. I seem to have lost the desire to shout at moment its all Love n stuff. Bestest . Pete xxx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

McCoy is Chinese crested

Comment is about McCoy (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska