Hi Patrick - welcome to WOL. I love your cat obit poem! Hope to see more of your work on here soon.

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Hello and thank you for the welcome, Ann. Yes, I will put something up in the blog section eventually, and hope to crit as good as I get. I'm looking foward to being here.

btw, I like what DH does with butterflies but most of the rest of it leaves me scratching my head.

Comment is about shadwell smith (poet profile)

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Hi Nigel - welcome to WOL - The Website! Great to hear that being part of the open mic nights has helped to lead you to poetry success! Hope to see more of your work on here soon. :)

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

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Hi Sheila - nice poem - and welcome to WOL. I hope you enjoy using the site. :)

Comment is about Sheila (poet profile)

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Hi JK - welcome to WOL. Hope you enjoy the site and good luck with your venture into poetry!

Comment is about JK Penny (poet profile)

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Hi Viv - welcome to WOL. I like your poem - and your attitude to life as well. And I'm sure I'm often thought of as a silly old bat too! Hope you enjoy being a part of WOL.

Comment is about Viv Blake (poet profile)

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Hi Joy - welcome to WOL. I enjoyed your poem - very lyrical! Hope to see more on here soon.

Comment is about Joy Pope (poet profile)

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Hi Mr Smith - welcome to WOL. Love your poems on the profile - I went to the Damian Hurst show the other day actually - it seemed to be full of mums and dads squeezing pushchairs in between the calf and its mother. Good to get folk interested in art at an early age I guess... I rather like DH though, I have to admit. Hope you put a poem or two on the blog section.

Comment is about shadwell smith (poet profile)

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Hi Nichola - a very warm welcome to WOL. Hope to see more of your work on here. Feedback from others is often useful and on the blogs is where you'll likely find it. Good luck with your studies! :)

Comment is about Nichola Smith (poet profile)

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Welcome, Nichola. I loved your poem - it bristled with startling imagery. Great stuff and hope you'll post more in your blog here.

Christian

Comment is about Nichola Smith (poet profile)

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hi, thank you for the comment on my poem, "he did" has now disappeared!

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Buy a map. You may have to travel!

Good luck finding a new one, though with only one filling perhaps you won't need to. You obviously have strong teeth. Or you are very young!!

Thank you for the welcome.

Comment is about Karen Robinson (poet profile)

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Hello Win - it seems that sporting poetry is something of a Cinderella interest but some of those written over the years are worth finding. I have a book devoted to the genre - once owned by an elder sister who made a gift of it to me some years ago. Some of the older fox hunting poems would make today's PC advocates writhe in exquisite agony now that the fox is a Disney demi-god in modern sensibilities. The realities of the ravages of a hen-house are easily ignored by the city dweller.
Cheers...MC

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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Apologies for the delay Cynthia I've been having some bad headaches from some meds. Don't worry about the crit, you're right, it was a rush of blood and passion upon reading the one you did for Fatima. I would like to send you a copy of The Dreaded Boy anyway so please email me an address to send it to you at caducus2004@yahoo.com

Enjoy the w/e

Ant
x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Hi MC, thx for the comments. I'm afraid I am too young to remember Frank "Typhoon" Tyson but the Hampshire burr of John Arlott is timeles and thankfully lives on in the TMS link I posted in the blog comments. Have a listen and you will hear the lines of the found poem spoken by the master. Oh and do see if you can post up your Compton/Richie Benaud piece. Win

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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@Harry: I like to play with words, I bend them, I twist them, I play with them as a child would play with a fly in a glass jar - pulling off a wing or two.
PURPOSE is used ironically and is meant as a consequence of the existence of the thing itself (there is no purpose)
KINK is the emergence of humanity, that as of yet is a solitary event. This event is the 'kink' in the time-line.
I agree with you on BILLION TRILLION as awkward, I thought so even as I wrote it, but used it to remind me of the need for a replacement.

@Graham: Thanks- I think therefore I thank.

@Yvonne: Thanks, but I'm not complaining. :o)

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Dentistry...now there's a thought. Welcome to W O L Karen. Tommy
PS I have been told today that my Dentist's practice is to close at end of June- any advice?
PPS I have only one filling.

Comment is about Karen Robinson (poet profile)

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broom broom!

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Hi John.
yes, my knickers know what you mean about elastic.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Hello Yvonne. Glad you liked my twangy thing. Unfortunately the ageing process seem to have perished the elastic these days.

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Hello MC. Thankyou for your comments on The Three Hulats and The Cart Belongs to Paddy.
A hulat is, rather disappointingly, a young owl; but I prefer the menace of interpretation of not knowing!

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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Thanks for your comment on The Three Hulats, Martin. A hulat, rather disappointingly, is a young owl.

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

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Thanks for the feedback Greg. A bit disturbing to write too. Graham

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

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Yvonne, many thanks for your kind feedback on my last couple of poems. It is very much appreciated.

Regards,

Graham

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Isobel, there it had to be you, making me do something that I hardly ever do.
I have qualified the last line as you have suggested (but don't tell anyone, I don't want to be asked to do this too often).

Seriously, thank you very much for the very generous words. It was a very worrying piece to write.

Best regards,

Graham

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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I've just read your comment in the Discussion thread. Wow, that was some sentence. I thought I could rattle on a bit without dipping into my full stop tin but that was pretty good. I am, however, dismayed by the thought of a technical god causing you some erectile distress although this is tempered by the somewhat cheering image of you racing, full throttle, into an unknown landscape in an open-top roadster, scarf rippling in a macho Dick Dastardly meets Isadora Duncan sort of way (not that I am envisaging it getting caught in the wheel)that signals a devil-may-care insouciance about what may lie over the horizon. XX

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

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Hi Shirley, thanks for your information about the newnfresh.com site I actually think your 'Mime Rhyme' is the best one but the site is not much cop overall is it? One of the little rhyming poems they have put up does not even rhyme!!

Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)

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Thanks for you comment on 'Nuclear Cradle Song' There is an audio link at the top of it ( I hope) XX

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

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re There's a sigh...' done. :o)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Hello Maggie! Welcome to the website at last. Very welcome.

Comment is about Maggie Waker (poet profile)

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@Steve: cheers :o)

@Yvonne: Things can be arranged.

@Stella: You keep your tongue off my crockery missus!

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Hi Yvonne. I think I have found the culprit to my poem "Mime Rhyme." I suggest you find this page using Google. Google Mime Rhyme, 35 short funny poems. This website will be newnfresh.com/fun_short_funny_poems.
Whoever made this page list 35 poems but not the authors. My poem is number 13 on the list.
To quote this page. "You can share these poems with kids, family members, colleagues and make them laugh."
So besides me their are at least 34 other people whose poems are at risk. To be honest I am a little flattered that some people like my poem. But I would never copy a poem and make it seem like my own creation.
Thanks for letting me rant.
Shirley

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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yes Yvonne it is a foto of my living room(no window blinds)
Steve ta you have a way with ...thingies.
Winston-you know your stuff-Tommy

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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yes Yvonne it is a foto of my living room(no window blinds)
Steve ta you have a way with ...thingies.
Winston-you know your stuff-Tommy

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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HA HA! Thanks I needed a laugh. It's just that I like to write poetry but I have no illusions of being a poet. That's why this is so frustrating.
Can't people come up with their own stuff?
My poem "Mime Rhyme" isn't that great.

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

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Hello, Sunshine Faggio

Benvenuti.

It is good to see your work on here. I especially welcome your thought about making poetry part of daily life. And I welcome your ability to write poetry - and such good poetry - in English. Bravo!

Just a little question about the last verse of Jet Set: do you mean 'wrapped in' rather than 'wrapped by'? and should that be 'How it feels good', rather than 'if...' ? This is not criticism, simply wondering. I occasionally translate from French and I find the prepositions the most difficult to get right at times. Thank you for posting. Grazie mille.

Comment is about Sunshine Faggio (poet profile)

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Sir
It has come to our attention that a formal request has been made to 'befriend' Mr Carroll. As you are no doubt aware that Mr Carroll is a very busy man with vary many obligations and there is a constant demand to 'befriend' Mr Carroll and that leaves him little time for social engagements such as you have requested. However a small number of applicants are permitted to become 'friends' of Mr Carroll and this issue is resolved by the process of elimination. Once a month we take the names of the said applicants and put them into a hat, then Mr Carroll selects one at random and the lucky winner is then allowed to be a 'friend' of Mr Carroll. Unfortunately you have not been selected this time and therefore I must convey to you the disappointing news that you are not to be a friend on this occasion. However all is not lost as we repeat the process with all new applicants and failures such as your-self on a monthly basis but let me be clear on this matter SHOULD YOU CONTINUE TO HARASS Mr Carroll in this way then your name will not be going into the hat.

yours etc
Thomas Henry Carroll

...now that will be Janet (sister of Karen). I was a fb friend and then ditched her as she can't be bothered with it- ;o) we get on in real life famously. I also ditched Hannah TWICE! (I am very choosy)She did not respond to a poem that I sent her. She spends too much time cycling(Hannah that is). Resend your request and I will place it in the in-tray.

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

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Hi Laura. Thank you for your comments on my poem "The Darkness."
Yes I agree that the evil in this world has been around a long time. It's just that with the internet and mass media hatred and bigotry have become an illness.

Thanks again
Shirley

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

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JE - many thanks for the comment on my post for
GEORGE LLOYD.
I have replied thereon but will personally
recommend you check out his prolific CV online.
His symphonies are a good place to start -
expecially those I listed (you already mention the 6th), and there are other works well worth
hearing. This shorter symphony is being performed here in central London tomorrow evening in a concert of all-British music by a
first rate pro-am ensemble that can be found on
www.ph-br.co.uk and I will be there - for a
number of reasons...but most of all, for his
music - so shamefully marginalised by the
"music establishment" of this country since WW2.
Best wishes
MC (Friday 25/5/2012)

Comment is about John Embley (poet profile)

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Hey Donna, welcome to Write Out Loud. I hope we can see you at some of the Manchester events when you guys are over here.

Comment is about Donna Pucciani (poet profile)

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Thank you for your comments on First Impressions, good to know the last two lines did kind of work as I hoped!

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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Thanks for commenting on First Impressions. Weirdly, I hadn't actually thought of it as a romance, more something which might have been but wasn't!

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

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Brilliant! You got it! Prism in Shade works brilliantly as a title!! Thank you :D and yes, that's what I meant. Without the light, all the beauty is lost - it's potentially there, but you need the light to see it :)

Ta cocker!

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

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thanks for your recent comment, Alison - i appreciate it. dt

Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)

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in In memory of Dike Omeje

the sound effects of assonance, internal rhyme and end rhyme works very effectively to create a flow. and i love the way that stanza 3 uses enjambement.........

superb methods of creating flow and rhythm here.

Comment is about Anwen Lewis (poet profile)

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Thanks for your comments on "Tanaburs", Yvonne. I'd just come off the phone from shoutng at my dad who hadn't got his hearing aid in; and I couldn't break the habit!

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Thanks for your comments on "Tanaburs", MC. The idea was suggested by (plagiarised from) a by-line in Bernard Cornwell's "The Winter King" which I have just re-read. For anyone with an interest in The Dark Ages (Romano-British, Saxon, Viking) times his stuff is a cracking read. You may be best familiar with his televised Sharpe stories.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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I'm pleased that you did not tell me that the picture was not of your room. I like a modicum of suspense. Oh, and thank you for the spare semicolon. I have put it in my bits and bobs drawer for future use. XX

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

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Hi Steven - welcome to WOL. Hope to see more of your poetry on here soon :)

Comment is about Steven Parker (poet profile)

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Well I'll be damned! Sorry Charlotte, trouble with this job, can't do right for doing wrong! Oh well, hope to make it up to you sometime, but all in a good cause if you're at Uni! Looking forward to your guest slot! X

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