Thank you Jacqueline ! Jacqueline is a lovely name :)

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Sorry you found 'I dream About Love' too sad. I suppose it is in a way. Here's something about love thats a bit more upbeat:
http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=39005

Thanks for looking in,
best wishes,
Steve

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Yes just a teaspoon to a pint of vodka

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Hi Aly, thanks for taking the time to read and leaving a comment on I was young. I really appreciate it. I'll see what I can do about it.

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Aly, welcome to Write Out Loud, and I hope you find something of what you're looking for here. We're a poetry site specifically, although you're very welcome to post prose here as well. While I can't offer to critique your work as a whole, I can maybe pass across some advice. This is what I think is important:

1) Read as many other writers as you can. When you like something they do, reflect on it, and try to work out how they did it.
2) Avoid writing about abstract concepts too much. Concentrate on describing particular objects and incidents, and maybe by doing so, they will reveal greater truths.

But if what is most important to you at this time, is simply to express your feelings, then go on doing that. Don't worry about whether it's great literature. The main question is, do you feel better after writing it? Maybe that's the most important thing for you at this time. Hope this is of some help. Greg

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Would you mind giving me some feedback on the writing material I have posted? I am of little experience and I wish to have a professional's opinion.

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thanks for the kind comments on 'wide is the gate...' Harry - nice that you picked up on that 'damned' landscape - because the soul at the centre of the piece is equally damned - with work! cheers again
Ian

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thanks for the kind & supportive comments on 'wide is the gate...' Laura. I wrote it for a com petition on unrhymed couplets, so that suggested the form.
I know what you mean about the supernatural, but the example you quote was meant more as a play on 'inner demons' i.e his shadow had more life and energy than his body. cheers
Ian

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thanks laura for the praise over ghost story ii - prologue 2, really pleased with this also as you may have guessed.

this will be part of napwrimo so let's see if i do this kind of quality over 30 days! lol

but thanks again - means a lot to me you like this xx

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thanks for the comment over ghost story ii, zach. glad you liked it. hope i can keep this quality up throughout april. big difference writing one a week than one a day but i have some good ideas in mind for it i hope!

P.S. - i will be recording this shortly.

Last year's story (for this this is a sequel can be heard here - https://andyn.bandcamp.com/album/ghost-story-i)

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Hi Harry
Glad you enjoyed the 'marathon'. The one thing I hope I can say about it is that it is politically even-handed. They're all a bunch of ********

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Thanks Andy for suggestion, I have done it and it works better now! Thank u

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Oh lord,
you're really too kind. Thank you for reading. :)

I think that being vulnerable is a huge part of all artforms, and most art is humanity clawing its way out. I'm just lucky that words and I have gotten along so far.

writing, like life, can hurt. It can be an uncomfortable admission to yourself and to other people, but usually it's for the better. Steps forward on glass are better than none at all. Or at least that's what I think right now.

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Hey there Mr Bastard, sorry it has taken me such a while, but I read through you Ray Charles letters and I wanted to mull them over a bit before getting back to you. I think what I love about your poetry is that you truly open yourself up. When I read your poems I feel that it is a little piece of the inside you that you have put on the page which is a brave thing to do. Because of the truth you show I find it easy to empathise and I can relate your words to my own feelings. They work on me in a similar way to the poetry of Allen Ginsberg, which I hope doesn't sound to pretentious, and I very much enjoyed reading them. I hope you will continue to share your work on WOL as I am greatly interested to see how your work develops.

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Is the Collage Poem for March in exile? or what!

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Hello Eleni,
Very impressed with the youtube clip, very original and fine words too.

regards,

Graham

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Thankyou Brian for your lovely comments Wendy

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Thankyou jack lots of memories still to come I hope . My head is full of things I would love to write down ,time will tell Love wendy .

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Why thank you Jack. You're missing nothing, not driving. Bloody M6 - wacky races!

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Ha - cross posting :)

Thanks for y'note on me tree pome :) I was having a bit of a go at Wordsworth's idea that we lose our 'visionary gleam' when we get older. Remember I mentioned it in The Raven that time? Anyway, fuck Wordsworth :D

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Good stuff

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Thanks for making sure we had a good meeting last night you did a great job and I thought it went very well.

Good luck with the Ghost project loved what you read last night.

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Thanks for dropping me a comment, Tommy. Had a read through your poems - the cynical tone resonates with me. A nice change of pace from all the usual sorts out there :)

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Thanks, I write to emulate a voice for the voiceless as I myself have trouble speaking out.

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thanks for the comment on 'Dexteram Patris' John - yes I also have that vague feeling of looking at my father in the mirror when I shave - I think it's a universal human gliche

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cheers for the kind remarks regarding ' Dexteram Patris' MC - I'm pleased that it resonated with you

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I like this. I know many people like this. I hope she gets help. You have captured despair so well !
Preeti

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Many thanks, MC, for your kind thoughts on my Ring of Fire.

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Thank you so much for reading and your lovely comment!

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Well, I have to say that the 'sitting on it' and the work you've put into it clearly show. It is really well crafted. More of this sort of thing! ;)

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Hi Andy, thanks so much for reading and your comment !

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aye up - thanks for the kind and supportive comments on 'Dexteram Patris' Laura. It's one I've been sitting on and couldn't get the tone quite right - and originally I was concentrating too much on the chair that's set apart - once I got he 'busted' line it clicked into place.
good spot with that full stop - I deliberately spaced those lines like that and then left the chuffing full stop in - aaghhh!
Appreciate your comments as always
Ian

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thanks so much for your kind comment on 'Dexteram Patris' Jacqueline - much appreciated x

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thanks very much for the kind comments on 'Dexteram Patris' Gray, pleased that you liked it mate

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Laura, thank you for the kind words on Tartan Beret.
I've just been looking at some of your youtube clips (very impressive) how do you do it?

very best regards,

Graham

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Thanks, Jojo!

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Thanks for commenting on 'TheFamily' Harry. :)
Best wishes, Dave

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Hello Harry. Thank you for your points on Tartan Beret.
As you know I'm not a good changer once done but I always appreciate your point of view. It makes me look at the work a different way.
With me the picture comes complete and leaving anything out would be like an incomplete jigsaw, so there it is.
Thank you for taking the time to put pen to paper though. I really do take your views seriously.

regards,

Graham

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Your writing is simply amazing!

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morning/evening jaqueline

I'm smiling like an idiot that you called Raycharles a 'piece.' If I was pretentious I'd describe it as a satire of found poetry, but it's really literally a personal conversation copied, pasted, and reformatted to make it readable. But it is verbatim: it was a bad night with a good ending.

Sometimes my life feels like somebody's making it up, and when I'm talking to someone my mouth moves like I'm an actor, before I even have a chance to think about what I want to say.

If you want to know more about Raycharles, there are some other things way way way back that I wrote like loveletters before I was on WoL that I imported onto here. They are all named 'Ray Charles' followed by a number. http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=45923

Just went over your new pieces. I would love to hear R.A.M. recited -- I, too, suffer the malady of a drifting mind. The problem is finding the surface again, sometimes.

Lady Spodden is simply fantastic -- very well paced and the language is fucking perfect. genuinely, i'm impressed and humbled.

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Hi Gray, thanks for taking the time to read & comment on The Tree House. I love If I Were a Proper Poet, can really relate :)

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Hi Andy, thanks for your very kind comment on tree house xx

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Thanks for your comments on my Tewkesbury poem, John / Zach. Appreciated.

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Hiya Pixie
thanks so much for commenting on 'st. valentine's day mascara' very kind of you - I appreciate it. Welcome to WOL hope you enjoy the ride
Ian

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Hi Andy, thanks for taking the time to read and comment on The Gift, very flattered that you liked it :)

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sure. I'm not very good at recital -- part of the reason why I'm here in the first place-- but I can give it a shot.

pick one.

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Zach - thank you so much for the lovely comment on my profile page. It is great to know that those ttiny snippets of feedback on your poems have had such a good effect and are appreciated. Particularly by someone who's poems I admire and 3njoy so much. I would love to hear a reading of one of your poems - any chance of you uploading a recording?

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Thank you for continuing to read me.
Embarrassingly enough I get excited when my inbox reads that you've been over something new I've put up. :)

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U r wellcome Martin for the "Moment..." post (l keep forgetting its title) :)ta

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Hi Harry Thanks for comment on my starlings. David

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