I'm so glad you enjoyed the tank graveyard. I tried one about pillboxes, but it didn't quite work. Plenty of atmosphere, which you like, I know! The final line perhaps was inspired by the Turner painting Steam Smoke and Speed(I think). Who know where these ideas come from, but that poem was an experience I had as a kid.
I enjoyed your poem Wrecks a lot. It drips with images of the sea.
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Just Hanging Around
Surrounded by Art
Pictures observe us
Collective images smile.
Poetry replaces brushstrokes
When we depart
They all comment.
Makes a change
From oddball artists
Trying to paint.
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Thanks for the advice. I will give it a go at the next open mic and see how it goes :) x
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Thanks for your comments on "Passing Feet". The poem
was inspired by my own need for a stick these days (until
the medicos get around to treatment on a back problem!).
It is even more noticeable how quick people walk when
limited to a slower pace!
Cheers.
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Reading, writing and music...and surely texting? Tommy
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Lynn Hamilton
Thu 21st May 2015 13:22
Thank you for reading and your flattering comments, Cynthia. Your comments are very much appreciated :) x
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Morning Helen
Yeh, thought it might be your mum. The best poems are often the hardest to reach, inside of you, because of the pain. It's a beautiful piece.
Re performance - absolutely. One of my favourite poets ever, Steve Smith (who is on here) often performs his sonnets. I wish I could write like you and him but I can't. But yep they can be performed. They won't come out like a big-arsed 'performance' poem and you won't be fannying around on the stage, but they can sound haunting and beautiful. Try reading it out loud in as many different ways as you can muster. Find one that you like. Do it :) And good luck :)
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Hi Cynthia,
I wanted to thank you again for your considerate comments on 'Her Scent On Silk'. I was thrilled with your response and appreciate you taking a look.
I have edited to play with the layout and text size to see if it carries more impact.
As for sonnets, I find them quite addictive. I have only been writing for a year but I am certainly leaning towards Formal Poetry. I find it gives me more creativity, despite the restrictions.
Again, your encouraging words are appreciated.
Thank you.
Helen
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Just wanted to say thanks for your comments on 'Her Scent On Silk'. It's a poem about my mother and a memory that had been locked away for many years.
Also, I am a bit addicted the formal stuff lol I don't mind a bit of free verse but unlike you, I enjoy the restrictions of formal and I find sonnets in particular a bit addictive.
Can I ask though, do you hear much formal stuff being performed?? That worries me a bit. I've only just started reading my poetry at open mic nights but have yet to read a sonnet lol.
Helen
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Welcome to WoL Leslie Joan. I hope you find both inspiration and a platform for your talents!
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Thank you Cynthia! Good to see you are still active on WOL. I've had time out from writing but getting back into the swing of things now, best wishes, Katy : )
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I don't find writing poetry relaxing, more like tearing my hair out. Not everyone who enjoys your work will respond in writing. Reciprocity is excellent.
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Helen,
I love the imagery in 'Beneath the Clouds' set up by very clever and thoughtful use of rhythm and rhyme. One of the best I've read for a while.
Keep up the great work.
Rob
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Preeti Sinha
Mon 18th May 2015 15:33
Thank you for your extremely generous comments. I am thrilled.
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Cynthia
Thanks for your comments on How dark and all that you said. Much appreciated. I look forward to seeing you on Tuesday at Sale
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God knows what rubbish is rattling around my head JC.
Bad state of affairs about Jimmy Greaves eh?
I think the Europa is a bit Mickey Mouse at best of times. Why the hell can't we get a top four spot??
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Sun 17th May 2015 13:23
Hi Andy, thanks for reading and commenting on Beachcombing - much appreciated x
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Sun 17th May 2015 13:18
Hi Michelle, thanks for commenting on Who Would? We obviously think alike, you pretty much nailed what I was trying to get at :) x
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hello there Nigel - good to see you are on form! : )
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:) It's a great poem, I just read it through again.
Thanks for your note on Majority too - aye, had thought of a couple of the lines when I found out about the majority, and it bloody lashed it down all day. Then that 'blue collar' shit's all over the radio and they're banging on about job numbers being up when in reality it's just one job divvied up into 4 zero hours contract jobs. Spitting mad. Looking forward to the one that I can hear forming in your head ha :)
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<Deleted User> (9882)
Thu 14th May 2015 09:23
Thanks Corr for appraising my work.Please accept my apologies in refusing your very kind 'offer'
Rose.x
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Preeti Sinha
Thu 14th May 2015 04:15
Thank you for your compliment. I read your comments on people's works. You give meaningful advice, you appreciate, suggest changes and put so much time and effort. Thanks, again, much appreciated.
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Laura - you have SO 'got' 'Once Upon A Time' - it was literally me wandering from my home to the shops (in my head) on the street where I grew up. I kept it deliberately simply and 'moved' on to give the effect of fleetingly passing these places - so no time to really have a look at them - just impressions - and you picked that up quite brilliantly.
Thanks for commenting - pleased that you liked it :-)
Ian
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thanks for the kind comments on 'Once Upon A Time' Isobel. I like to visit nostalgia central once in a while - it sort of lightens my mood up a bit :-)
Pleased that you liked it
Ian
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Andy
thanks very much for commenting on 'Once Upon A Time' - a little whimsy and nostalgia - but I'm pleased that you liked it
Ian
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I will make an effort to follow up on your work already here. I have a few hours to enjoy WOL this week.
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Martin, thanks for the comments on 'In the Wrong Place'. They are much appreciated and I'm glad you liked it.
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Harry,
many thanks for your generous words about 'In the Wrong Place'. I'm glad you liked it and more importantly I'm glad it made you think.
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Lynn Hamilton
Sun 10th May 2015 08:55
Again you're welcome Mr Bastard or should that now be Mr Big Ed Bastard? Thank you for your counter comment which was quite unexpected and I too experienced some swelling to the head. x
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Thank you, Tommy for the comment. Viva all countries on the globe. Viva love and peace in the whole world. Best wishes, Larisa
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<Deleted User> (13740)
Sat 9th May 2015 01:47
I like the poem , ticket to Ride , very evocative :)
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Lynn Hamilton
Fri 8th May 2015 19:34
Too crap to blog but you did ask!
Just for you Mr TC
(Top Cat tune keeps springing into my head)
Winky Face
Emotion without words
How does that work?
Display happiness with
A smiley face
Slighty abuse
Or amuse with
A winky face
Show sadness with
A downturned U
When you are so
Downturned
U don’t even know U
Are U
;)
On second thoughts I might blog. One glass of wine and it's starting to look ok ;)
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Put together a poem for the theme of humour
but not sure about the title of The Laughing Policeman
was going to call it The Hairy Banana!
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Fri 8th May 2015 10:43
Hey, hope you're doing ok, absolutely know what the negative loop stuff is like x
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Hi Michael. Thank you for your feedback. You are very kind an enthusiastic, which is good :) I am pleased that you enjoyed my work.
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Thank you for your lovely comment on "The Poetry Bug"! Was really nice to hear x
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Preeti Sinha
Thu 7th May 2015 14:59
Hello Andy, thank u for always being so supportive and kind ! Much appreciated....
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Lynn Hamilton
Thu 7th May 2015 13:37
Hmm.... I actually have a poem called 'Winky Face' somewhere lying around.
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Welcome to Write Out Loud, Melissa. Glad we were able to get along to your recent performance at Poets and Players in Manchester http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=48352
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hi friendo
thanks for reading me a while back. I haven't had much time to float along this site in a while, but I glance at it and your comments always do good to bring me back.
hope this message finds you well. :)
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thanks for the comments on 'National Wealth Service?' Harry - I think you are right - but that doesn't stop the idealist in me wishing that you are wrong - cheers
Ian
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Preeti Sinha
Wed 6th May 2015 16:05
Thank you for your wonderful feedback! I write on an impulse...cannot explain what drives me to capitalize or not :0
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Hi, thank you so much for the feedback! That was great feedback for a first revealing of one of my poems, so I really appreciate that. I also have made a commitment to focus more on my poetry and simply write more in general!
In answer to your question I haven't ever actually recorded any spoken word/audio versions of my poetry but I may think about doing so once I gain more confidence.
Are you new to this blog?
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Lynn Hamilton
Mon 4th May 2015 12:54
Hello Tommy
Thank you for both reading and your comments on Blazer Pocket. Your comment on Concrete Eyes made me giggle. I can cope with crap, poo, shit and wtf but 'hmm' is not allowable as a comment - you bugger! ;) x
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raypool
Sat 23rd May 2015 21:29
As an afterthought, Greg, have you seen any of Colin Gifford's books on UK railways. Great shots of the industrial areas in the sixties . Two reside on my bookshelf.... all the best.
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