Sleeping with the Devil

The nightmare returns
sleepwalker I become.

Still evil beckons
me to die.

Falling into hell
intense fire below.

Then waking up
Sun and God.

They both rejoice
the battle won.

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

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Jackie, Thanks for the comment on 'Pringles Bladder', glad you liked it, to be honest I prefer to write (and perform) 'less cerebral' narrative poetry as would rather make people smile than make them think.

I should have written 'Do Not Try This At Home' on the bottom ;o)

Comment is about Jacqueline Phillips (poet profile)

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I thank God for that welcoming light
as the darkness at last fades into day
and I can say
Where is your cruel sting now
begone tormentor, enough
you shall not have my heart
my soul
it is for another
whether by day
or the dead of night
the battle rages on
but the war eternal
is forever won

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

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Hi Tommy thankyou for your comment regards Wendy

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

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Thanyou for your lovely comments I hope I have plenty more poems to write wendy

Comment is about Jacqueline Phillips (poet profile)

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I Crave Death

If the devil
demands we sleep
it is so
he can steal
our defenseless souls.

Light of day
immediately tells us
a nightmare suffered
why then do - - -
I crave death.

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

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Hi, Laura,

Such a busy week it has been. and, finally, when I sit down to scope, my VODA account runs out beneath my fingers! But my husband donned his 'rainies' and sallied forth to the shop. (His phone refused to co-operate. Sometimes modernism just freaks me out.)

I do not think age equates wisdom - far from it. Experience might, but even then, not always. IMO, WISDOM asserts itself clearly at about age five, maybe earlier, six clearly, eight absolutely. After that, it is just application as needs be. The 'scope' may be expanded, but the 'power' remains inviolate, and frequently disturbing, for all your life.

End of rant! You are such an inspiration. And nothing makes me smile as much as you do.

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Hello Aly - the art of short story writing is
challenging and demands both imagination and
a wide vocabulary. It pays to invest in the
tools of any writer's trade: a good dictionary
and a Roget's Thesaurus (often obtained cheaply
in S/H/charity shops).
Mixing tenses can be effective but needs
practice and careful revision to ensure it works in any given context.
The appropriate use of language in any given
context takes practice and thought. As I
remarked elsewhere, the term "bark(s)" cannot
be accurately applied to a woman's voice in
most people's minds and another word can be
substituted. This understanding/knowledge
is not acquired "overnight" but keep at it!
You possess the most important ingredient - the
wish to create...and the polish that the right
words give to your work will surely come with
diligence. discipline and application.
Like all arts, writing short stories demands
proper devotion towards getting it right and
the rewards are self-evident to creator and reader. Finally, age is no bar to excellence.
You show commitment and that is more important!
When you love and respect something, you always
want to do the best you can...right?
Best wishes.
MC

Comment is about Aly Hatcher (poet profile)

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Thank You for your Comment on "Above The Skyline"

Thank you for your honesty, I will soon post a Revised Copy of this material.i will be the first to admit that my story is not yet a mature story. This story has not yet been revised properly, I will take the time to revise it soon. I began typing this and 30 minutes later posted it online. My reasoning to post it was to see what others thought of the story before I invest hours in my writing. This was originally just a way to blow some time. From the looks of the story and now seeing your comment I am inspired to create a more sophisticated version of this story. Just as a 15 year old student I sometimes struggle with the right words to say.

Thank you for honest feedback.
Aly.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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Hi Bailey, welcome to the site, I hope you will find sharing your writing here helps you to develop your work. Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Bailey Lewis (poet profile)

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Welcome to the site Jenny! Blogging in prose or poetry can be a great way to get our thoughts clarified and sharing them will undoubtedly help you to develop your style.

Enjoy it all! Dave

Comment is about Jenny (poet profile)

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Thanks Lynn, I appreciate your comments on 'Last Hope Of Redemption' my friend. :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

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Oh Brutal, brutal night
get behind me
with your cruel tortuous
contemplations
exploding lamentations
and the endless
tick tock tick
of the son of lucifer
the all intrusive clock

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Thanks for your comment on my last poem Paul - I'm touched that you found it thought provoking. And I'm also sorry that you are relocating to Torquay! You'll have to come back and visit us in Wigan whenever you can - and next time, I'd love to hear you perform some of your poems too!

Take care and I hope the move goes well. xx

Comment is about Pauliegreg (poet profile)

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Welcome to the site Pixie, I can see much strength is drawn from the experiences you register in your sample piece. use that strength throughout your writing and you will achieve much. best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Pixie (poet profile)

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Hello MC, thanks for commenting on 'Don't You Dare'.

I responded there in detail and won't duplicate it here as it is a bit long. Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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Hi Martin - thanks for the comment on the prologue to Ghost story II.

The plan certainly is to read it out next month with the second prologue piece which I am still working on.

See you then.

Hope you are good

Andy

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

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Hi Pixie
Welcome to WOL. I really like your sample poem which has so much gut wrenching emotion.

Comment is about Pixie (poet profile)

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Thankyou for reading my poem kind regards Wendy .

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

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Catch you soon fella.x

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

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Thanks for your comments on 'Don't You Dare' Lynn. Peace is the only way to achieve any stable world order - we've seen all attempts to use violence fail throughout history - and each time a new megalomaniac tries his hand, their reign is shorter than the previous bunch.

Of course they are generally too egocentric to notice history shows they have little prospect of success beyond a few years at most. best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

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Hi Jacqueline thanyou for your comment on my poem EDITH my mum had eltzimers for 25 years she was lovely and died aged 95 regards Wendy Higson

Comment is about Jacqueline Phillips (poet profile)

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Hi again Mikey.'All' taken on board.Bit rushed this morning.Will get back to you.Lots of love.

Rose.x

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

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Wavelength

As the waves of poetry
flow as one into the shore
words disburse along different paths
forming again through sands of time.

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Isn't it incredible about the way words flow, perhaps it could the start of some sort of collage!

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

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thanks Autumn and Preeti! Really is wonderful being able to see people who share a love for poetry! :)

Comment is about wrestledwithjimmy (poet profile)

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Don't do that, you'll get muddy! ;D

Kind words Cynthia, thank you. Took a fair few months to kick into shape did Sophia, but I just couldn't let her lie. I'm going through a bit of an exploration of ageing at the moment - because of my growing (and sometimes painful) awareness of my own changes, in good, bad, interesting, and erm, challenging ways shall we say!

The idea that wisdom comes with age irritates me. It isn't automatic is it?

And yeh, you're right.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Hi Cynthia,
Thanks so much for reading & commenting on Finding Freya. Sad to hear you've had a couple of months with family illness & hope that improves soon. I really appreciate the time you take to read and comment. As you've noticed I can get a bit sloppy with punctuation etc, and I really appreciate reminders, and any suggestions at all so please when you have time keep reading & commenting,
Lee x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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I liked the way your words found mine.

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

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Hi Paul - thanks for the kind comments regarding 'Mama' - yes the Old Courts is a good venue for reciting the spooky stuff isn't it? I appreciate you taking time out to comment - see you next month
Ian

Comment is about Pauliegreg (poet profile)

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Thanks very much for commenting on 'Mama' Jackie - I'm pleased it spooked you (if you see what I mean)welcome to WOL - I appreciate you taking the time to comment
Ian

Comment is about Jacqueline Phillips (poet profile)

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Thanks for commenting on 'Mama' Harry - sorry I'm slow in responding. I know what you mean about the order of the stanzas, but I was trying to conceal the big reveal that it's about actual children rather than dolls. Not sure if that worked - but that was the plan. Performed it in Wigan at the Old Courts last week - a suitably spooky environment and it seemed to go down well - so looks like it may have legs as a performance piece. Cheers

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

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John, thank you for your lovely comments on my work ! I feel privileged at your comparison with the Romantics!

Comment is about wrestledwithjimmy (poet profile)

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Hi Ally, thanks for the comment and great to hear from you. Think I've lost my writing mojo a bit over the last few years; still doing it regularly but less happy with the output. Still, got to keep trying right? :) I hope that whatever you're doing, you're creating! x

Comment is about Alison Mary Dunn (poet profile)

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A chance encounter was lost when the train was on time!

Thanks for your comment.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

May I share your garden? It sounds so peaceful :)

Comment is about wrestledwithjimmy (poet profile)

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Hi Harry

Funereal thoughts not yet surely, you've too much to offer. Cheers and thanks. KED.

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

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Hi Thom, I've not been on WOL for a long time and felt curious to see what you've written recently. Really like 'ECCENTRICITIES', it's the very reason we All find ourselves lured here, eventually. Feeding our addiction to that deeper other self ;) Never stop x

Comment is about Tom (poet profile)

Original item by Tom

On Neutiquam erro

Had to look it up

Yes Mathew 18 indeed

maybe a spiritual truth

Thanks Harry

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

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Thanks for commenting on 'Last Hope Of Redemption' Harry. As the saying goes, if we don't change what we do, we can't expect the results to change either. So it's up to Joe Public to tell the government we need more than token changes that just waste billions without any effective action...

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

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Hi. Nice to meet you, too!

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

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Hi Rashida, nice to bump into you

Comment is about Natasha Tingle (poet profile)

Original item by Natasha Tingle

Jocelyn hi, advice?...write about everything, destroy nothing. Revisit, rewrite, then abandon it. :) Tommy

Comment is about Jocelyn Diane (poet profile)

Original item by Jocelyn Diane

Welcome to WOL Bailey I like Blistering Blue eyes. it could equally as a song. But either way it's good. I look forward to more.
Martin

Comment is about Bailey Lewis (poet profile)

Original item by Bailey Lewis

Hi M.C. Thanks for commenting on Mummy's Happy Rhyming Poem, glad you enjoyed it, it was a fun one to write :)

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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I appreciated the attention you paid to my sonnet and enjoyed your feedback. You're right, of course, about "crunching." I forced it a little.

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

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Welcome Jocelyn-and apologies for my refusal,re help with stories,but HEY!..you do NOT need it!

All of your work is excellent enough.Thanks for the offer just the same.

Hope you enjoy your time on here.x

Comment is about Jocelyn Diane (poet profile)

Original item by Jocelyn Diane

Holy shit Laura! I am chuffed to fuckery that the 'Motorway'audio didn't work,and the youtube link you gave me did.

Where the fuck have you been all my cardboard life!?

Dude,swear me in as a gobsmacked fan for life-
-asap!

Absolutely LOVED-'Radical Liverpool #2'!!!!!!!!

Re again the 'Motorway squawking'(which it most certainly wasn't,you golden throated,golden liquid swigger!)and all of your poetical history-
if sleepy Simon Armitage(as much as I love him)can get his fizzog on the box,what the eff are you doing second fiddling?

Fuck me stiff,every which way but loose,and bugger me bandy-YOU ROCK! x

(ps-try not to die before me..;0)

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

he he he!! that makes far more sense will do.
daz

Comment is about Adonis Storr (poet profile)

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We are all looking for four-leaved clovers ! Thank you for your comments on my work :)
Preeti

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

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