Free-Falling

I’m losing my mind.

Don’t you understand?

I’m desperately reaching out for your hand.

Don’t leave me hanging, slipping, falling…

down into the endless abyss of darkness,

Never destined to land.

 

You’ve saved me once before,

But this time there are no safety ropes.

I’m free-falling, plummeting, going down…

My only hope Is for you to save me now.

 

I’m losing my mind.

Don’t you understand?

I’m desperately reaching out for your hand.

Don’t leave me hanging, slipping, falling…

down into the endless abyss of darkness,

Never destined to land.

 

Clinging onto our past is all that gets me through,

The only thing I can trust now is the way I feel for you.

Can you not blatantly see,

That my feeling’s for you are true?

 

I’m losing my mind.

Don’t you understand?

I’m desperately reaching out for your hand.

Don’t leave me hanging, slipping, falling…

down into the endless abyss of darkness,

Never destined to land.

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Hayley Taylor

Thu 26th Jul 2018 22:29

Oh wow! And I wrote one similar without meaning to or knowing what one was? That's so crazy haha.

You learn something new every day thank you for that! 😃

Here's to writers luck 😛

Big Sal

Thu 26th Jul 2018 21:52

"a nineteen-line poem with two rhymes throughout, consisting of five tercets and a quatrain, with the first and third lines of the opening tercet recurring alternately at the end of the other tercets and with both repeated at the close of the concluding quatrain"

This is the definition according to the Wikipedia.org article. I've only ever written one before, and when they are read out loud it sounds very rhythmic and melodic. Your poem reminded me of their rhythm which was pretty damn cool since it wasn't even written as one. Nice!👍

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Hayley Taylor

Thu 26th Jul 2018 21:26

May be a dumb question, i'm not sure, but what is a Villanelle? and thank you. I wrote this a while ago during a tough time when I needed my rock 😃

Big Sal

Mon 18th Jun 2018 17:16

This poem when read aloud sounds like the rhythm of a villanelle, but the emotion of something much more personal. Well done.🌷

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