Hi Ian - exaggeration in real life equals poetic licence in another! But your lines surely ring bells with those who suffer.
Cheers...

Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)

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Thanks for your kind comments on my 'neighbours' piece Yvonne. I may have exagerated the circumstances a little for dramatic effect (I don't have a cat!) ;-)

Ian

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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thanks for your comments on my 'neighbour' piece MC. I may have exageratred the circumstances a little for dramatic efect ;-)

Ian

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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Loving the Ikea song.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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What are you calling "my auld cock"??
It's no older than me, thankyou very much!!

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Wotcha yerself, MC.
There really is a railway underpass in Castleford called "Tickle Cock Lane", so named for its use by "courting" couples.
I gather there was also Gropec*nt Lane, much frequented by ladies of the night, in London until the planners got their way and renamed it.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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Hello Ian,
Many thanks for your kind comments on "Tickle Cock Lane". I'm not exactly a Cas lad although I worked for a good number of years at Allerton Bywater.

Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)

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Pensilvania

Green spots,apples aren't done
Red Motel,Blue restorant
Invite you
In a date with Piccaso

Comment is about Leon Qafzezi (poet profile)

Original item by Leon Qafzezi

Well yes, red would be perfect - indeed!!

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Simfonia e njollave

Muzika e fjales tende me zgjon
Dehjen e mbremjes ekzotike
Kur fryn dega e palmes reres kuqe
Ne nje perendim te lakuriqte lejla
Dhe shishja e wiskit zhytur reres
Me shikon me sy pirati blu
E afshi i lambades lekundet pistash
Ne diellin e nxehte tropikal verbues
E shkumbezon ne shampanjen e bardhe
Te dallges...
Per ta pire ngadale ne buzet e tua sensuale
Nen lekundjet e nje treni veror
Kur nis e bie mbremja

Leon Qafzezi-1996(copy right)

Comment is about Leon Qafzezi (poet profile)

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Congratulations, Laura. It's a fine poem - it will be interesting to see what response there is from the wider audience. The website looks fascinating. It isn't clear whether publication will be online, but if it is, could you send a link (no pressure).

What continues to fascinate me about the ancient Japanese myth is what it says about us all being travellers who meet mysterious endless invisible walls which baffle us until we stoop low and discover their secret. So 21st century - we're all living it.

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I've just had Nurikabe Nights accepted for publishing for this lot

http://thelooseleaftea.org/

so thought I'd drop a quick 'thank you for the inspiration' note.

Ta!

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

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Hi David,

Thx for the feedback on my latest poem - life. Glad you liked it - the encouragement is appreciated.

My Best

Chris

Comment is about David Blake (poet profile)

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Thanks for the comment on 'Way Out By the Rapeseed Field' David. I certainly do have my own slant on things, that's a nice way of putting it I guess ;)

Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)

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No worries.

Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)

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Howdy Ray

I applied a couple of your suggested edits to 'Jack's Alright', and Poetry24 have just published it, so thank you for your suggestions :)

I removed the 'ing' from 'slander', and the 'But' from the start of one of the lines :)

Ta la!

Comment is about Ray Miller (poet profile)

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thanks once again David - pleased you liked 'Beneath The Watch Tower'

Ian

Comment is about David Blake (poet profile)

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..oh, and thankyou for trying to hunt down Yvonne.
I think the problem was with her Profile, not with any of us.
It seems sorted now.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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I like the idea of warming up cheese in the back of the telly.
Thanks for your thoughts, Dave.

Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)

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Thankyou for your observations on warming up bottles, Yvonne.

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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hello MC,
Thanks for your thoughts on "Progress and The Diggy Box".
Curiously we had a small portable which we used in the caravan which could pick up East German TV when we were at Filey, but struggled to pick up British channels!

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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Hello Margaret,
Many thanks for commenting on "Progress and The Diggy Box". You're right; so many had the spindly, silver legs.
We also had the record player which was a box in red and silver, so popular in the 60's.

Comment is about Margaret Holbrook (poet profile)

Original item by Margaret Holbrook

JC - I didn't succeed in locating YB's page to
leave your message - either by clicking on one
of her comments or by inserting her name under
"search". I left that problem with Isobel.
Now I notice that Julian( WOL) has left her
address above. I'll leave that to you.
Cheers.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

thanks Ann. I know a lot of people who use writeoutloud and really like it, so well done on a great site.

Mike :)

Comment is about Michael Clift (poet profile)

Original item by Michael Clift

HIYA, 'Underground' this was based on a chance browse at Waterstones. If I remember next time I go in, I will make a note of the actual title & get back to you.

Thanks for commenting.

Comment is about cbyrne (poet profile)

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Hi Mike, thanks for your comment, glad you enjoyed it. :)

Comment is about Mike Hilton (poet profile)

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I'll give it a go. Petersfield isn't too far from Farnham. Pop Up Poetry is the night in Guildford: https://www.facebook.com/PopUpPoets

Comment is about cbyrne (poet profile)

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Hi Chris, thanks for the kind words.

I've not really thought about putting it to music, despite being in various bands over the years. It's a good idea though.

Do you perform much in Guildford?

Comment is about cbyrne (poet profile)

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Hi Cynthia: I took another pass at Skin Deep. Check to see if it makes more sense to you now.
J. Otis

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

How to tell a joke
Advice to be given to a Lady

Know your audience
Know your subject

Write out your joke in full
Read it aloud many times
Remove all diversions
Check for confused references
Ensure you have a command of the required terminology
Try not to get out of your depth
Avoid sporting, scientific or technical references
Limit your choice to sex and fashion
Political issues may only result in your being confused

Practice brevity
Remove 50% of what's left
Remain calm

Practice eye contact
Learn to lower your vocal pitch
Avoid staring continually at the same person
Remember to blink

Do not wear checked shirts, dungarees or men's boots
Do not mumble
Do not rush delivery
Remember to breathe

Practice brevity
Remove 50% of what's left

Ask a chap about posture
Ask a chap for advice
Ask a chap for his approval

Turn off your mobile 'phone
Do Laugh at other peoples's jokes before attempting your own
Get the round in before attempting your joke

Try to relax

Avoid tearing-up beer-mats
Do not under ANY circumstances cough - burp - stammer- pass wind
or giggle hysterically during the performance
Do not fidget


Try not to look nervous

Do not apologize for your effort
Do not sweat
Do not show signs of fear
Do not cry
Do not attempt an encore.

Comment is about Cathy Crabb (poet profile)

Original item by Cathy Crabb

Hi Cynthia

Many thanks for your critique...I was very mindful whilst writing this short sketch that it was musical ...almost visual..

once again many thanks

Gus x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi John

I think your little bobble is well buried beneath the sepia shadow of yesteryear. As ever thank you for reading....

Regards Gus x

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi Andy
many thanks for your kind comments regarding ' Beneath The Watch Tower' much appreciated mate
cheers

Ian

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi John
many thanks for your kind and insightful comments on 'Beneath The Watch Tower'. I hope I do know what I'm doing, but day by day the doubts grow :-) I notice you give very positive feedback around the whole of WOL and it's a genuinely commendable gift that you deliver
cheers
Ian

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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They sure do! Still stinging now as you can probably guess!!

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

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Hi Ian.

Great poem, I particularly liked the second verse.

Keep 'em coming. KED.

Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)

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Hello Nigel,
Thank you for your poem/comment on my short story "The Emergency Room Visit."
I like your poetry. Good writing.

Thanks
Shirley

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Hi MC
Thank you for your comments on my short story, "The Emergency Room Visit". This story needs work but I like it.

Thanks
Shirley

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Hi Dave :o) I think you have hit it spot on. I wanted to evoke a feeling of regret and in-consequence. The brief emotion when finding a lovers note between the pages of a rarely read book.
Tommy

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Tommy, you don't need to 'impress the reader', they are already impressed!

: )

Jx

PS and I still don't think the lines need an extra syllable, they work fine without it when I speak them out loud.

Love your stuff!

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi John :o) You raise an interesting point re the 'it' in the first two stanzas. The placement and inclusion of 'it' is to impress the reader of the stress of the lines and by its use causes the line to flow more rhythmically. I appreciate you raising the point.
Tommy

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

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This is the one I've already flagged up to you Julian. At the moment that link is only working if you have an admin password.

As far as I know, it is being looked into by our technical people. It definitely hasn't been deleted - it's just invisible for now!

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Here it is MC http://www.writeoutloud.net/profiles/yvonnebrunton

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi Ann. Thx for the comments. In this case it felt right to use the lines unaltered. I was suprised how much of a flow was achievable using over 70% of first lines from recent blogs which should be about entirely ramdom subjects.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

JC - I have tried to locate Yvonne B. by clicking on her name when locating comment by
her - and also by searching under her name. In
both instances, there was no sight of any PROFILE PAGE or place where I could see I was able to leave a message.
I hope you can resolve this with Isobel - apropos my previous comment about my own problem with "permissions". ALSO - does YB
HAVE a profile page - as seen in yours and mine?
If not, has this been deleted and does she know? As I said before...weird!!
Cheers.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

JC - as a matter of interest, I have been in
touch with Isobel (moderator on WOL) about having that "permissions" issue with another
site (from a post on I tried to read from 13/2/2013 - "All Grown Up"). In that instance, she said the user profile had been
deleted and that the post in question had
hung around for whatever reason and should go in due course. Weird!
I will pass your message to Yvonne and hope
I don't get a repeat of the problem myself when
doing so.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi John. I'll let our technical people know the difficulties you are having posting on Yvonne's wall. I'm able to post on it but it would be interesting to see if MC manages to.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Hello MC,
Many thanks for your thoughts on "Our Gert" and "The plays of William Shakespeare...". The former is as close as I've got to writing a love song! The latter was inspired by an old joke about a bloke who wrote some of the world's best melodies but they never got published, like, "Life is just a bowl of f****g cherries".
On another front I don't seem able to write my thanks on Yvonne Brunton's Profile page. It tells me I don't have the necessary permissions.
As a favour do you think that you might post on her page to say that I am unable to do so? I feel terribly impolite not being able to respond to the kind comments she makes.

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Thanks for the warm welcome, Ann. I really like your Fantasia poem and look forward to reading more of your work when I'm not quite so tired! X

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks M.C.

You made my day

Ken

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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