Hi Dave - many thanks for the comments - was especially pleased to get through the first hurdle attempt

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Thank you for the positive feedback - how do I tag my Ghazal please

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Thanks for your comments on Gaspers.
What fabulous ingredient do they put in fags which makes people stand in all kinds of shite to smoke?

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Hi Mark, Welcome to our web site, hope you find something of interedt here, Winston (Admin)

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Yeah, but did you like it?

Triolets are basically a bit easier than a Villanelle..wot I find fiendishly difficult...easier than a ghazal too if you can find a 'killer couplet' to start off with...after that they nearly write themselves, what with the repetition etc. I found this link very helpful. Have a go...if they are anything like your ghazals you will dazzle us!

http://www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/triolet.htm

:-)

Jx

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Hey Laura,

Thx for comments on my moderate man (rant).

Glad you liked the sentiments and spirit.

My Best

Chris

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Hi Isobel,

Thx for the feedback and proper thoughts on both my last two poems...very kind.

The Starstuff one is a little more me and closer to my heart..but the rant can have its place too Hehe

It seemed to go down quite well at the Tudor...worked with the Bohemian atmosphere LOL

My Best

Chris

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Hi Steve,

Glad you liked the moderate man rant.

Hope to se ya soon...that meal remember.

Chris

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Hi Marianne,

Thx for the feedback on my moderate man poem...glad you approve of the spirit Hehe

My Best

Chris

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thanks Lynn,
for your comment on 'hope through a telescope' always appreciated :) x

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Thanks for the comments on Gaspers, John. I don't smoke myself (or drink, or eat meat) so pleasures are at a premium.
I do enjoy, though, trying to cause accidents on the motorway.

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Thanks for your comments on Gaspers.
I don't actually smoke, although in my younger days I have smoked anything combustible.
Nevertheless I admire the hardiness of those who brave the elements for a drag - they must be good those fags!

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your comments on 'obligation'very much appreciated Lynn-thanks love.x

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Glad you liked the Triolet. I found this very helpful..

http://www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/triolet.htm

If you can find a good opening two lines of 8 syllables each that don't rhyme...then you've written half the poem to start with!

Good fun!

:-)

jx

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Ah, he has added it to the list now!

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Hi Lynn,
Added Shoeless to the list - thanks
P

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Hi Carole. Have you not tagged your excellent space poem with "Space"? As I cannot see it in Paul's list for voting. All the Best, Lynn x

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Thanks for your thoughts on One Anglaland. I've just added a few spark notes to help understanding.

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Hi Andy, thanks for your comment on Skipper. I haven't perfromed it yet as I only wrote it last night :-)

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cheers for the comment over the other side, jeff.. means a lot as always and i look forward to hearing you strum something out for this..

on your winter poem of course, it is only a suggestion but i am going to print this out in a bit - see if the poem could be split between the pair of us on friday!

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hey Isobel.thx for reading and leaving your impressions on dilute to taste..at times i do tend to write with a certain ambiguity, perhaps the coward in me?..anyways look forward to seeing (and hearing) you again xx

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know I,ll get me arse kicked,but being the fun loving youthful rogue that I am I just could not resist this 'oppo'-I thought it may be permissable to use this decades one comment re your new pik...bleedin 'ell!...Nana Mouskouri gone blonde!...I,ll get me coat!(see yer this day-2020)

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Whaddaya mean I 'struggle with the erotic'...bloody cheek!

:-) :-) :-)

Hope you liked it!

Jxxx

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thankyou for taking the time to read and comment on all my work :)

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Slowly, silently, now the moon
Walks the night in her silver shoon;
This way, and that, she peers, and sees
Silver fruit upon silver trees;
One by one the casements catch
Her beams beneath the silvery thatch;
Couched in his kennel, like a log,
With paws of silver sleeps the dog;
From their shadowy cote the white breasts peep
Of doves in a silver-feathered sleep;
A harvest mouse goes scampering by,
With silver claws, and silver eye;
And moveless fish in the water gleam,
By silver reeds in a silver stream

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thankyou for commenting on my poem 'silver'

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Hi Lynn . thanks for the comment on Ghazal (your letters) I have had a lot of practice. LOL

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These ghazals are very addictive aren't they? I'm hooked! And it's lovely to see you spreading your wings! xx

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Glad you like it John. Thought it was time I gave WOL a fully focussed frontal - shimmer and all... x

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Hi Dave, thanks for reading Ghazal (your letters). I think technically this is ok, With so many rules however it is easy to end up with something that is 'forced to fit' and has no poetic merit at all. I am hoping my efforts avoid this. Thanks Win X

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Hi again Lynn. hope you find the ghazal info in discussions useful. Could you also please Tag your poem 'Invisible' as Ghazal. Win X

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Thanks Win, for the info. Can't I invent a new sort of ghazal with rhymes at the end of each line? ;-) (But these rules and regulations are enough to give you - vertigo!) Great fun though! xx

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Hi Winston, thank you for sending me the link on ghazals, I shall have to give them another try! Cheers, Lynn x

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Hi John,
thanks for your kind comment,
very much appreciated :)
peace!
Rachael x

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Hi John, thanks for your recent comments on Ghazal (your letters), I hope I am getting somewhere as I have been researching these things for nearly 3 years now on and off, Maybe its time I tried a triolet. Win X

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Fab new photo!

:-)

Jx

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hi Isobel :)
thankyou for your kind comments,
the vastness of Space is scary, prefer cosey spaces anytime, im a taurean so like my feet rooted to the Earth.
x

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I've just posted my first triolet. It's a fun form too....and a little more forgiving than Ghazals, but the rhyme scheme is a little bugger to get right.

Thanks for your fabulous help on the ghazal stuff too.

:-)

jx

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thanks Cynthia, for such positive feedback and comments,
always very much appreciated
peace to you! x

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Hi Andy :)thanks for the very kind comments, they are much appreciated.best to you!Rachael x

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Hi Isobel, Yes, have a go at a ghazal. Great. Actually for once I am not laying down a challenge. It has taken me months to getting round to posting up some information on how to write ghazals. Mainly because there is no simple answer via a template as in other forms. But people keep asking so I have finally done it. lol. Nice to think though that my posting of a few ghazals has sparked something. Win X

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Hi Ann

As for criteria 4) Rhyme.

The Qafia DIRECTLY preceeds the Radif on the second line of each Sher and not at the end of the first line as in your ghazal, ghazal - Fibonacci swirl.

If you look at Agha Shahid Ali's book I think all but one of his ghazals show this.

Also Re Criteria 1)Title.

This presents us with a problem. How do we talk about and refer to each others work when they are all just called 'Ghazal'. Well, the standard method is to refer to Ghazal (Radif), so my example above would be my Ghazal (the day). And your last offering could be Ghazal (Fibonacci swirl)

Win X

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Hi John,

An answer re Criteria 6)

The ghazal is suposed to be spoken (or sung)personaly and from the heart, hence the inclusion of the signature or takkhalus.

Traditionally most poets have used either their real name or equally common a pen name as in the cleaver maqta of Ann -

In burning brackengold the fox lies sleeping
My man is dead, all men are as snow for me.

So you can choose what you like and remain anonymous if you wish and as euphonious as you wish.

Other ideas - Poets, more recently have used the meaning of their name. Or as you say made a reference using 'I' or 'me' however since ghazals are often writen in the first person this is somewhat weak. I have used other alternatives, e.g.

Barefoot steps linger
in the wet sand, soft.

where the footsteps suggest a signature. Overall however the name or pen name is prefered.

As to Troilets, I think this reply is sanitorial enough.

Win x

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thanks for the comment Cynthia

Mormon was more of a response to the anti-gay sentiment expressed by the mormon church. They actively raised funds to vote yes on Prop 8 in Cali and wouldn't allow blacks to join their congregation this the late 70s. I hear from Wikileaks that they also funded christian terrorists in Iran. Sounds pretty violent to me.

In the nativity piece, Joseph slurs his words because he is drunk. He has always struck me as a very forgotten character. He didn't impregnate Mary and Jesus told him he wasn't his father. I think that would be enough to turn any man to drink.

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I love your new profile photo, Isobel!
You look so happy, vibrant, AND totally approachable!

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Hi Win - just posted another ghazal - didn't come as naturally or mean as much as the first one, but I did try and rhyme! xx

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Thanks for your comment on
'Dilute to Taste.' I have also enjoyed a time reading your work..wonderful writing Marianne..

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Ha, I saw it. I will be late to the Puzzle tonight as I am going to a cuts meeting. Jackie has postponed till friendlier weather so lots of Open Mic

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Just enjoyed your verses, Larisa.

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There is a new discussion topic on ghazals which may interest you, I remember you asking for a template ages ago, well it's finally here! :-) Win

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/newsgroupview.php?NewsGroupsID=3&NewsThreadsID=1127#msgcontent_11384

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