HI Lenford, I really enjoyed read loves like that ! Its very special. thanks clarissa

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Good stuff of course.. Sorry I couldn't stop to talk with you at Not Part off at the Dancehouse Theatre.. I was getting dragged all over the place there almost literally!!!!

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The Fall has a real sense of power behind it, Tony.. It actually made make shake a little when i read it! Excellent!!!

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nothing to say is also a great poem
I love the imagey please put some more up!

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I really like the way you have used the words in this poem, they give the poem a beautiful ryhthm i feel.

One of my favourite lines is 'Once her glad eyes traced masses, now a tooth retraces dynastic clashes'.

I just imagine this great woman of her time, like Joan Arc, an iconic female figure.

I think it a wonderful, powerful poem, and well thought out.

Well done

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itchy feet

if all roads lead to rome
then to roam i must go.....


stuart smith

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hi dave
sounds like a great thing to hovis in wonderland. please get in touch and let me know when the next batch is going on. i am still in penrith and a bit out of touch, but keeping bumping into old friends of mine and richards even up here. take care
stuart smith

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Lenford
I will come back to read more of your poems soon. It is a pleasure to read your poetry.
Thank you...Zuzanna

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Hello Lenford

Your love poem has many wonderful faces. The poetry shows a lot of depth, almost psychological approach toward the emotion. You have depth in expression too. Being a thinker by nature you are able to put all on paper what was on your mind merely from observing others.

Your intuitive nature helps to create with vision and easiness each line that you intent to present to the reader. Fabulous job!
Zuzanna

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Lenford

Any written word can not be judged as good or bad so I was told. This is why I would like to pass the information on you so you will not be as hard on yourself thinking that your writes are good or not. Poetry today has many different faces. Some are free style some are Sonnets, some Haiku. People use many styles. All styles are nice.

I found your writing very nice. Easy to read and your feelings are in connections with your words.
Enjoyed this stanza in particular, as it gave me the perfection of your expressed feelings toward someone special.

"Lying down, I idly stroke your face and twist your hair around my fingers
You smell delicious, your skin is so silky, I put my arms around you and
Give you the tightest of squeezes. We both hold our breath.
Two hearts beat in unison, valentine’s day is our day. "

Very well written! Great poem!...Zuzanna

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Lovely jewels of poems, the rhymes exactly right, and without undue fuss, drive the whole poems wonderfully.

Just the right amount of play with the themes to bring up the sparks, and just the right use of the colloquial to blow the blaze.
(stop using silly metaphors! Sorry aboput that!)

And what a lovely photo!

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About time you joined up Seamus - great photo of you too, you look just like that in real life ;)

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I love the idea about shooting an audience member! I also think it would be very stylish to don a shell suit at the end of my performance and then drop a lighted match into the hood.

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Mia - your poem about 'veg' had me laughing out loud! And that, believe me, is not something that I do often. Very, very, funny.
It was supposed to be funny - wasn't it?
Brilliant.

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Great poem!

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Hi Steve, nice poem. welcome

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Eh Up, Mia.

How reasurring to see that you've taken the filthy poem away and replaced it with a poem about a man's love for his bicycle. My tender and fragile sensibilities thank you. You left me quite breathless.

Oh, Happy New Year - and all that sort of thing.

Dying on your arse. Definitely one to do when you are dying on your arse. It could be a true punk poetry moment. At the end of the poem you could set off a firework or shoot an audience member just for effect...

...Please don't do that at Freed Up.

"Post-performance friendliness is directly proportional to the audience’s reaction to your poem"

True. In fact, one of life's few absolutes.

Cheery-bye!
Steve

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Hello Steve

Welcome to 'W.O.L.'World of passion in poetry.
From your Biography shows that you are creative and artistic Soul. It is good to have you here.

The poem of yours it is very well written,
mysterious and thought provoking.

Thank you for sharing your love for writing.

Zuzanna

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I want to see more of your work, Mia! I'm having Mia Darlone withdrawal-symptoms... I need a hit, lol.

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Thanks, Ricardo: and, if it's okay, I'll respond with another (introductory) peom from my collection walkaboutsverse.741.com -

Poem 3 of 230: PICTURES

Photographs and, more so, painted-
Pictures of people and places,
For ends, involve in some cases
Adjustment of what was gathered.

With restrained artistic licence,
To make metre and rhyme with sense,
All matters related here -
Save the love-songs, to be clear -
Did happen to me, no fear,
And time-ordered they appear.

(C) David Franks 2003

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Hi Allan,

I do remember you from the Greenroom at the freed up night. Thankyou for your kind words regarding my performance. I would like to gain more experience by attending more poetry events and to meet other writers.

I have been away travelling in Japan but I'm back now. I also enjoyed your performance at the Greenroom.

Best wishes for 2008

Belinda

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Dave, it is me again reading your awesome poems!

I love the imagination-how you implemented the knowledge about punctuation marks and other grammatical errors'



"Grammatical Errors

Placed on a section and pressed between these four walls,
wrote off and unpunctuated and covered in black and blue.
From waged hands I’m carelessly portrayed
disrespected and stamped with dark brown coffee stains.

A trademark that left a bad taste
I manifest on the page as a question mark
hooked and hanging,
like the misplaced apostrophes;
I’ve lost my sense of belonging."

I found that those punctuation marks are very important, especially when someone does the recording for a specific write. This poem has a great educational values.

GREAT WRITE!!

Happy New Year 2008!

I will be interested to read more of poems...Zuzanna

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Hello Dave

When I came to your Biography page, I have learned more about your motifs and the ideas why you love writing. I must admit that I have been employed in Rehabilitation Institution for over twenty years. I guess this will be the outlet for taking the mind off from the daily grind if someone has to deal with other people health issues. I found your writing very interesting. Your poetry is very easy to understand.

The poem -- "Lightness"

It was all black and bleakness until the Greek man boarded,
he must have been twenty five stone plus.
My friend and I helped him with his suitcase
as he wrestled with his breath."

This wonderful write has a depth of a traveler a someone who is not sure what he will encounter in a new place. Then the delicious description of a wonderful Greek food, cheeses...etc...
I love this type of poetry.

Great presentation and pleasant to read.
You have done an excellent job on that Poem!!

Zuzanna Musial

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Arthur,allow me to call you a poet if you can't call yourself one, ah those sleepless thinking nights, how well we know them generally less down to women these days than dyspepsia and the fortunes of Bolton Wanderers. Keep writing, love to read more.

Dave

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Hi Belinda

Welcome back!!! Gorgeous photograph. I have to say that I went weak at the knees reading 'scene from my window'...profound and beautiful.

Mel x

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Thanks for reading my poems. Im glad you liked them.To be honest I dont have a favorite poet, not a dead one anyway.LOL That sounds strange, but it seems they become famous after death. I fell into poetry on my own due to deep heartaches, due to life. I have read many poems, some famous, some not.Baudelaire and TS eliot , Eugine Field, Edmond Spencer, Hum ,so many had a few nice poems.I grew up reading Eugine Field, so I guess hes a favorite!

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More please MLP . . . . . xx

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Hello Phil, nice meeting you. I am new to this site. I have read all your poems and your poetry are excellent! They have a lot of life events in them. Your are excellent in expressing yourself through your pen. The style fascinates!

"Writing
Writing ignites a spark in me
Lighting flames of creativity
Heat warms me to my sole
Gives freedom and control

Words form and pour out of me
As does rain from atop a tree
A steady flow forms into a line
Word line begin to inter-twine

Each line or twine begins to form
I tease them together to reform
Into poems with a turn of phrase
My words flow to the next phase"

I have enjoyed this poem a lot. It tells a lot about your love for writing. This is my best choice for today. I am sure I will come across more of your writes. Please feel welcome to read some of mine and let me know what you are thinking. It is good to hear other people opinion about the thoughts behind particular write.

Have a great Christmas Season with your family and friends...Zuzanna Musial

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Veeeeeery interesting!

Very interesting indeed. But what will nurse say, Bubo? Will she laugh do you think?

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Bubo,
I cant say why as I dont understand it, excet that is a great poem but your poem called Transgender Museum touches me so. It could be the Mom in me the protector of children. Im not sure but I really like that poem. Happy holidays to you!

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Cheers Dave - I've stopped sulking now, it went so badly it's actually quite funny! If it's fancy dress then I'll do it again (I've got a robin outfit made out of teddy bear fur - it even has a fur balaclava with built-in beak. It's most excellent).
Merry Christmas to ya.

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Hi Bubo, I remember an owel with your name! I like your poems they flow very well and you have a great talent or a wonderful muse!

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If its enough to say that I like it, then good! I feel like I understand it, seems to be a longing for more and a fear at the same time,so much of this in life. Its a nice poem, if this is real feelings say the words, it helps at times to speak!

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I’m not going to roar at seagulls
Scavenging left over pickings
As they flap
Slap
Unsettling silence in the air,
Don’t really see me
When careless eyes stare.
Is there an Oliver
In all of us
Asking for more
Palms out flat
Weight of the world on our backs?

Smooth all my worry lines
Smooth my laughter lines
Lift my breasts so they sit just right,
Mold my world
While my toes curl
And Prozac hour arrives
As we develop our swallowing reflex
Guzzling a gallon of God’s water
To wash away the pain
Flood your cosmetic pores
But can’t quite numb the brain,
As I whisper in the mirror
“I don’t think so”
Today, leave me alone.

- This poem would be the star piece at any recital. The words just rolled off my tongue as I read it.
You will go far, Bubo!

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I pull you into the future
You pull me beyond
I am the adult
I should be strong,
But I’m lying between a sandwich
Of right and wrong
My loss, my son,
Stretching my configurations
Staunch and stem
To a society that will bend
Allow us to blend
In a museum of transgenders.

Judge not my child
For she came from God
And I,
I her mother
Shall be the road she is standing on
As I journey into her eyes,
Cradle the tears
Bind the ties,
I shall be the society
That shall accept
As we follow the path down
Grappling to stay in control,
But losing a foothold
On her precious soul.

- A mother's love is a blessing. You write absolutely sublime poetry, Bubo. I won't pretend I understand it all - some of it is way above my head: as all great poetry should be.
Brilliant.

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Call me damaged, call me strange
I am not this woman you claim,
Stripped
But for you
Perhaps I could spread my legs
Take out those dead
In your imagination
You’re ever possessiveness that you are blinded
By me,
Think of me
Still
While she waits for the exorcism of your hate.

Good ole catholic boy
Judge
Judge me, judge my heart
Splintering glass across years of suffocation
Darkness

Until light of lies will shine past
Alone you will stand, calling yourself a man
Amongst debris and disease,
That you call your life.

- WOW! CLASSIC STUFF, BUBO!
You're following in the footsteps of Seamus Heaney - only a brave poet would dare to do that. Fantastic!

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They approached me in a mild manner, chanting incantations while flaying my hide with a slightly warm, stout oaken branch blessed by the high priest of Nayhead. 27 years later I discovered poetry, it’s uncanny

- Even your bio is funny!
Sorry for repeating your own words back to you, but I'm highly impressed. I've never seen a genuinely funny woman before (French & Saunders and Victoria Wood and that Jenny somebody think they're funny...).

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Ironically she could probably do with getting undressed
(There’s a likely need for a darn good shag)
I’ve just said the word nob and she’s not impressed
Thank God I didn’t do ‘Cockney Rhyming Slag’
It’s not taken as intended - tongue in cheek
Do they really think I’ve slept with 8 blokes in one week?

Post-performance friendliness is directly proportional to the audience’s reaction to your poem:
They’re very friendly
If you get laughs
But they can’t possibly be seen talking to you
If you die on your ass
So assuming this type of environment exists
Will I return to the stage?
I’d rather slit my wrists!

Who am I kidding…
Next time I’ll wear tighter jeans and do ‘What a bummer’.

- LOL. You're fantastic, Mia. I always go for humour in my performances (especially on stage). It's easy to know if an audience likes you or not, if they laugh. I thought my stuff was funny, but I think I'd pay to see you.

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Stacks of DVDs are found
Mainly of the Tour de France
And a photo that has Olympic champion Chris Borderman’s face
Superimposed onto the body of a man wearing pants
They also found a bike with a hole in the seat
A dildo was positioned vertically underneath
Attached to the pedals – so it can be controlled by the feet
(At this stage an accompanying police officer’s face lit up – but she resisted taking her urge further – she was a wife and mother).

Mike was charged
He got 3 years probation
He was ordered to rehab
Where they are trying to replace bike-fucking with standard masturbation

- Jesus, Mia, that's feckin' brilliant! Absolutely hilarious - and true! LOL. I love the Queen intro.

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By all means wear tighter jeans next time, Mia, but I think you just have to write it off to experience, take stock when you've done ten. Good poem though, not a bit unlike Hilary's diatribe against slams, but she bounced back,
keep slamming

Dave

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Steve, I have no idea what you're referring to - making out that my poetry about a sacred stringed instrument has some sort of hidden sexual meaning - I'm very disappointed in you. And offended for that matter.
I shall be speaking to the chief executive to report your abuse.

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Hello you.

Well, 'Let me be your cello'! That'll be a pleaser then.

I thought it was filthy. Really filthy.

In a good way.

Steve

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Thanks for your comments about 'Craig'.
He was fed Viaga in the Far East and smuggled into the UK inside a consignment of walking sticks.
His name is of course a pseudonym. Or should that be, a psssssssssseudonym?
His sister Sharon doesn't appear to drink either. Temperance snakes - whatever next.
I like what is inside your head.

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What i especially like about this poem, and i like it v much, is that it is not 'laying any big message on us', that it exists as itself. That is one of the hardest things to learn, to let it speak for itself. We can slant and select to 'tidy up' a piece, but to contort it to what we want to say is most of our biggest blunders
All power to you!

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they are good, Happy holidays

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Very entertaining poetry. Refreshing. Racy. Pacy.
let's go go go for more.

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I am nothing short of fulfilled with merriment at receiving such a pleasant comment - many gleeful thanks to you. I am working on some clean poems to put up - most of them are for therapy and would probably have me arrested if they left my scribble book.

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Hi, thanks for introducing me to the site.

i like you're poem, 'Taboos' is a cute one.

the bit

'Then she would go and make a pot of tea.
And the end of the world was averted.'

made me giggle, reminds me of how my Mother-in-law reacts to pressure or stress

'make a cup of tea!'

:-)

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Such depth of grief and sadness in so few weords. You have touched me (as well we know)

Tx

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