Im glad yyou could appreciate the dyslexia poem, I was conviinced I was, had the tets done but I'm not according to the psychologis! Thanks for taking the time out to comment. Ric

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Hi Dave

Good to see you last night, thanks for what you said about my "Singing lound and proud' poem, I assume you've seen it but if not its my last blog on here. I thought best to keep neutral then any footy fan like yourself can feel the emotion and experience of the good old days!

cheers Jeff, ps Hope the Potters along with the Trotters of course stay up, a poem in there I think!

Comment is about Dave Morgan (poet profile)

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Cheers for the comment on the audio file. I like a bit of fun. Your 'Catherine Poem' is good too; images flying through my mind with the quick constant stream of your voice.

Comment is about alex iamb (poet profile)

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Hi Shelley, sorry, don't know what happened with the chat line. but i have to go to work now, so maybe another time?
I love going to the poetry nights, they're great fun and meeting the poets on site can be enlightening. Pity you live so far away.

ps, i'm always on the look-out for helpful hints on my poetry, so if you ever get the itch, please feel free to scratch a comment or two to my blogs or profile.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Shelley Ann Dwornik (poet profile)

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Hey Rodders...thanks for your comments but I removed them by accident, I was actually going to reply 'do you know me?' at your suggestion of the frizzy hair and cold breasts....uncanny!...anyway please replace these comments as I will gladly attempt those extra few lines for the fun of it-----good advice
Shelley

Comment is about Rodney Wood (poet profile)

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Hello Rodney,
thanks for your observations on my poem "gota freya." I really hadn't given a thought of "natives" being condescending as it isn't in my vocabulary. But if it gives even one person that feeling, then it's got to go, or perhaps if i put "the" before it, might not be quite so abrupt?

Any suggestions are more than welcome, and about your other observations made also.
Particularly the structure as i haven't had any training whatsoever. ( maybe i should, when i can find a really inexpensive class or workshop local to me. Or even online.)

Thanks too for all your other comments.
All of them are well received and welcome. Especially where you point out where it can be improved, but more so when you say how.

Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Rodney Wood (poet profile)

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Thanks for the advice, Janet.
I've added another couple of poems.

Comment is about Emma Purshouse (poet profile)

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Hi Emma,
Welcome to the site.
I like your sample poem, mainly because i've had the literal experience of the rabbits bottom.
( i worked in a place where we sold game and poultry.)

How about letting us in on some more, you may find you will receive more interest in your work which from your profile, seems quite extensive.

Thanks for the memory, Janet.x

Comment is about Emma Purshouse (poet profile)

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ps. it didn't transfer as i wrote it.
Not as easy as it seems. Must have to be copied from the computer i think.xx

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Richard,
Your anchor does look better, but i still think if you raised the first and last word one more time as well as raising again the ones you did, it would be spot on.

is it.
this owe
death etc. etc... etc... they


Great stuff, this concrete poetry though, and something completely new to me which you've inspired me to practice with. Thankyou.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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It was a joke Richard. Sorry to be obscure, but when you ask existential questions you will get responses from strange people like me.

Comment is about Malpoet (poet profile)

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That was a general question, I didnt post it in the what is poetry discussion but a new one. You must have me confused. Ric :-/

Comment is about Malpoet (poet profile)

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I know what you mean. I do feel compelled to leave someone a comment because they have left me one. I find the whole thing quite narcissistic, its a shame that one needs a comment to allow them to believe their poetry is good. There are however a few poets on the site who are more 'honest' than most and actually leave constructive criticism (which I am here for, I generally know whether right or wrong, what is good about my poems but Im blind to my own weaknesses) Darren for example. Do you attend the gigs?

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

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Thanks Richard for you nice comments. I generally avoid the showcase (and it took a long time before I posted a profile) because I still bear the scars of mutual self congratulatory writers workshops where people write a complimentary comment on your poems and it is expected that you will do the same for them. That said, I genuinely do quite like a couple of the ones you've posted up here - with the hopping around from one setting to the next (urban street tableau to dark forest tableau to etc.) in the first one, and the lass who'd fallen off a pier and dragged down the coast to a waiting rapist in the poet and muse thing.

As to my attitude in the discussion thing - it's mostly put on. Mind you almost everyone else is being disingenuous in that thread so it's not just me. For all the "well I could call x a poem and I could call y a poem" (and so on and so forth), if those people were reading an article in the financial times and their significant other said "what are you read dear?" they wouldn't say "a poem". So, deep down, they sort of know.

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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I read your posts on the what is poetry? argument posted by myself originally and you sounded so intelligent and confident of your opinions I alsmost hoped I wouldnt like your poems! But of what Ive read I have to say I've enjoyed and found your choice of words and language engaged me alot into the world of your poem and created very vivid images. I love the subtleness of the image of the spade against the wall. Thanks. Richard

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

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Hello, Jeff

Thank you so much for the wonderful comment on my last poem 'POETRY FRIENDS'

I have missed you my friends - glad to be back!!

Thank you and have a wonderful week!

Cheers!!
Zuzanna

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

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Hi Dave,

Thank you so much for your comments and encouragement :) Just thought I had to say it

Thanks!

Bethx

Comment is about Dave Morgan (poet profile)

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He's Rock and he's Roll
Got Be-bop, got Soul
He's a Chef
And he's cooking words
Dead-beat Dave Morgan!

Using "dead" meaning "really" as in "dead good"

Comment is about Dave Morgan (poet profile)

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Hello Cir!!

You won't believe this, but you are only the 2nd person to use the name Ffej!!! A very good girlfriend of mine who I used to go out with, used to call me that all the time, it was very sweet, until we finished!

I still keep in touch though she works in Thailand now. Uncanny though because you couldn't have seen that anywhere!

If you go to any gigs in Preston let me know, if I'm free its no problem driving up Mway, be good to see you and do a couple of poems up there, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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hiya jeff

thanx for your comment
and thank you for you advice
i apreciate it, it helps me improve

sez x

p.s

im brunette -
i got fed up of doing my roots all the time lol

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

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hiya richard

thanx for the comment
being compared to eminem is a major compliment,
thank you
i know i write angry poems about my mum
but i love her really lol

much love

sez x

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Richard - Perform? Well, I got up on stage and mumbled a load of sprouts. I did the 'Making love with a size ten' which I posted this morning. I was the penultimate poet - which is another phrase for ' blind drunk'. Good fun though.

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Unfortionately I never made it Jeff, but I'm definitely going to be at the next event in Preston because its my home town! I'm sure we'll meet eventually, we may have even already in a parallel world where my name is cir and yours is ffej

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

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Hi Richard, let me know how wigan wass if you went. I still havent been to that one yet but will get there, too much on this week.

Prob confused you, I don't play anything, just poetry with me, they had guitarists on before and after me, so quite a good night, hope to meet you soon, prob 2 poems at howcroft, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Richard,
If you do decide to tonight, i'll be there too.
It'll give you a chance to get to know the people behind their poetry. It can be a real eye opener as well as a great experience.
Bring a sample with you just in case you get drunk enough to give you some dutch courage.
Love Janet.xx

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Tomas,
thank you for the comment on my poem. Your website is amazing. You put a lot of energy into poetry. Its great to get into the Write Out Loud site and see so many people out there working so hard for poets and poetry.
Freda

Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (poet profile)

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Richard - get your ass to The Tudor House tonight. You don't have to perform, just take it all in. Watch and learn. Learn what not to do - learn what to do and get blind drunk in the process. Apart from spending a night with Emily what's her name - I can't think of anyhting better.

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Richard,
Yes, these discussion lines do get quite heated but they're all a really good bunch of people, most of them very well educated in poetic writing. They all seem to get on well together when they see each other at the gigs too.
It's great when you actually meet the poets in person. You should get yourself out to a few of them. Who knows? it might even give you that courage you need to stand up and read some of your own.
They're really informal and non- judgemental.

I see what you mean about getting Darren involved on your topic. I think you two would get on great, as he is studying and you have too.
He seems to love a good, friendly argument.
Maybe you could have a chat with him through the wol chat service, or start the line of discussion and see how it turns out.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Richard, Finity/Infinity - fair enough, doesn't take a lot to throw me, understand now! Yeah love the concept, life after death of some sort, or something after the 'end' of the universe - does my head in!

Yes, you will have to get to a gig, I'm doing loads now! I will be at Howcroft in Bolton this sunday and the boars head in Middleton next sunday. I'm also doing a gig supporting my mates punk band this saturday!

Doing a similar set to last week when I did a punk/acoustic night in Bolton. Did 13 poems incl some john Cooper Clarke, went really well! Hope to meet you soon, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Jeff, I chose timeless finity for its juxtaposition, because we really don't know if the world is infinite or if it will be bound my time just as in the case ourselves, no one really knows if our death will start another timeline going, maybe in a parallel universe, thanks for the comments Jeff! I still need to make it to one of the gigs!

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

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Hello Freda, i'm Janet. nice to meet you, to meet you, nice! in write out loud!
( don't really know why i did that introduction but it seemed right.)

Love your poetry. Especially "puppy."
The sky like a well used tea towel etc.. really made me laugh.
Great stuff.x

Comment is about Freda Davis (poet profile)

Original item by Freda Davis

Hi Richard,
Thanks for the comment to " I am me."
That word is "me " but i ended the poem like i did because it actually begins with " I. "
Do you see?

I've never attended writing classes but i stumbled on a link on wol which had a section about how to write a poem.
Played around with the words and ideas and that's what came of it.
Blogged it just for a bit of fun really.

By the way, did you see how the discussion link continued, which you started before you biked it?
The one about "what is poetry?"
Take a peek, i think it's still there.
Thanks again, love Janet.xx

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi, Richard.

Thank you for your comment on my poem, Fine Line. You hit the nail on its head with the existentialism and nihilism.

As for the soldier's life, it is something that I could never do myself, but I feel that these men and women should be recognized as heroes for putting their lives on the line.

Take care. :)

-Melissa

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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hey Richard, cheers for the comment, but don't worry - I didn't have to suffer for that particular piece, it was just for fun. Love the poet and the muse one - really good. cheers,
a
x

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Rodney - many thanks for your comment on my effort 'Slam'. At the moment, my time spent writing on the site is fettered with those cumbersome chains of revision and other commitments.
I have taken the liberty of casting an eye, or two for that matter, at your work. I detect a faint wiff of cordite left by those twin smoking gun barrels of irony and surrealism - and I like it!
Feel free to comment on anything good or BAD. I usually do. It can create a feeling of treading in those muddy waters of isolation - but if I wanted to make friends I'd be on 'Adult Friend Finder' or something as equally obnoxious.

Comment is about Rodney Wood (poet profile)

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hiya andy

thanks for the comment
im glad you enjoyed my poem

i like your poem 'perfect place'
it is such a beutiful poem

sez x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Cheers for your comment Richard.
Haha well the book is a long way off yet, it is one chapter and a notebook full of notes!
But we must perservere I guess.
I love The Poet and his Muse. Please post a clip of you reading it!

Comment is about Richard Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi Graham, thank you for the comment.
I love "A Forgotten Day" - great choice of imagery, and just good fun as a poem! Love it!
Keep on truckin'
Rob

Comment is about Graham Eccles (poet profile)

Original item by Graham Eccles

The One-Eyed Fool made me giggle, and In An Asylum is fantastic. You manage to reference the occult in a meaningful, non-pop culture format, and it is a real breath of fresh air.

Comment is about Julie Boyle (poet profile)

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Hi, Jeff. Thank you so much for your comment on my poem, Fine Line.

I love your poetry and look forward to reading it. :)

Take care.

Melissa

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

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You are very generous indeed with your praise, but all I really achieved was to bring the two sides together and get them to start talking and listening to each other rather than bombing each other, eventually bringing peace and stability to the region; so my role was really quite minor. Nonetheless, it remains a very poignant poem to this day.

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

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In the annals of recorded poetry I can't think of any poet better than you, you are (to quote another great poet) simply the best!

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

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Thanks Paul, and I know what you mean about the imagery - reading that one back I almost get the feeling that I'm actually there and that I can practically taste those chickens!

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

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What an absolutely marvellous poet you are DM! Your imagery is breath-taking, you scan with the best and your rhyme is sublime.
;)

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

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At least you can read your writing. Good range and variety of well written poem.

Comment is about Neil Francis Brooks (poet profile)

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Hi mate, thaniks for your kind comments, glad I brought a smile to your face. Unfortunately I am better at sharing my words than my nubile asians so you'll have to find your own. I really like 'I know You're There' by the way. Cheers, a

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

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Its lovely to see someone having so much fun with rhyme. Beautiful stuff. Daisy Chain Summer especially.

Comment is about Louise Fazackerley (poet profile)

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*fun*

Comment is about alex iamb (poet profile)

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i like your intelligent-yet-smutty vibe going on. and all the wordplay is fun to read. yes, wordplay is my idea of un :-)

Comment is about alex iamb (poet profile)

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Alison, when will you put new stuff up? I all love these, but speshly Loss on Paper. I want to read more of your words! :-)

sally

Comment is about Alison Mary Dunn (poet profile)

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