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Yellow green iris

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Soft petals fell from her yellow 
green iris.

No sound could be heard as her petals 

fell silent.


A deep breath of air cleared some 
thorns deep inside her. 


Both feet hit the ground like a song 
drunk on cider. 


She stood tall like a tree, 
Showing strength and desire. 


Fire roared while sharp pain 
stabbed deeply inside her. 


Wild flames blazed the thorns 
that soon turned to ember. 


A time of transition she will always 
remember. 


When soft petals fall silent from yellow green iris,
It's a reminder to all, there's a fire inside us. 

 

 

 

 

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◄ Dedicated to my Mother (Happy Mother's Day)

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Emer Ni Chorra

Sun 29th Mar 2020 09:44

Thank you, Vautaw. ?

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Sun 29th Mar 2020 04:04

Lovely poem and reading Emer. Thanks for sharing! ❤️

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Emer Ni Chorra

Sat 28th Mar 2020 21:46

I like it as it is, sorry you don't.

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AM Cash

Sat 28th Mar 2020 18:31

Though I like this poem, I would mix it to avoid ends rhyming. The serious gets lost when you have end rhyming only. Keep the words just reorder. I hope my thoughts are not unwelcome....

Great picture

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Emer Ni Chorra

Mon 23rd Mar 2020 12:29

Thanks Andy. Glad to hear you enjoyed this one. ☺️

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Andy N

Mon 23rd Mar 2020 12:25

Really enjoyed this Emer. One of your best I've seen yet. More please (:

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Emer Ni Chorra

Mon 23rd Mar 2020 11:06

Thank you, Keith. ?I hope all is well.

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keith jeffries

Mon 23rd Mar 2020 11:00

Inspired writing. A fine poem Emer.
Thank you
Keith

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Emer Ni Chorra

Mon 23rd Mar 2020 02:55

Thank you kindly. ❤️

Do.RoThy

Mon 23rd Mar 2020 02:53

Motivating n inspiring words to read this morning...beautiful work!!

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