Hi Laura,
I know exactly what you mean- reference your last comment on the OK society poem.
P.S
It was nice to meet you at the Tudor.
fantastic performance of your space poem....really enjoyed it!
Happy Christmas
Chris
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Thx for the feedback and kind comment on the Ok Society poem.
Thoughtful...
Cheers Isobel
Might see you at the Howcroft..if not have a really happy Christmas.
Chris
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Thx for the generous and detailed feedback on the OK Society poem Steve.
I did perform it at The Bards and it went down in the tone/manner that felt apt.
It'll be good to be back at the Bards in the New Year!
Chris
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Appreciate the comments on the OK Society poem- if it strikes a chord then that is good.
Of course I wish our society spent less time on tittle tattle and paid far more attention to real news stories. I wish our media had more decorum, decency and taste.
If only something could be done.
Chris
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hey folks, have printed a new poem up on me Write Out Loud blog- 'Hero'. be cool to see what folk think :)
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Hi Ann, Yes. Mission accomplished. and just before the weather went wrong again. I will patch you in to the report in due course. Win :-)
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Glad you arrived safely!
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Oops - thanx for pointing me in right direction
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Thu 16th Dec 2010 23:31
Evening Lynn-thanks for hobbling to the puter and reading my pooims-to which thou hast yea and verily commentheth upon-fanx darlin! SW-xx
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<Deleted User> (7424)
Thu 16th Dec 2010 15:45
Ta Laura for the 'like' on Infinity Station... very much appreciated.
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Thu 16th Dec 2010 15:44
Ta Ann for the nice post on Infinity Station... glad you liked it.
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<Deleted User> (7424)
Thu 16th Dec 2010 15:43
Cheers for the nice words about Infinity Station. ...and yes when I look back on it that is what it's about... it was written in a bit of a rush.. I was trying to capture a moment and then riff off that so it's nice to find out what its about afterwards!
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<Deleted User> (7424)
Thu 16th Dec 2010 15:40
Hi John,
Thanks for the comment on my Infinity Station Poem...
I think you are right about the use of the word Phallic, that verse might need a bit of work I think coz the 'joke' of it doesn't quite work at the moment.
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Philipos
Thu 16th Dec 2010 14:29
Hi Lynn - yes less is sometimes best eh - I agree - thanks for taking the trouble to read and comment on Botswana and good luck with the post op recovery and to Benji say prrrp for me
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Thu 16th Dec 2010 14:26
Thank you for your comments about 'At Cromer', Lynn!
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<Deleted User> (8672)
Thu 16th Dec 2010 14:24
Thanks for the comments about 'At Cromer'.
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Hi again Ann, yes I love Cornwall, it's my favourite part of the country, yet we always seem to holiday abroad the last 15 years or so. Unfortuntely, we haven't visited my sister since she moved there, but hope to some time soon. Last time we met up at my other sister's, as she lives in Seaton. Longer ago we had holidays in Looe, Polperro and Carbis Bay.
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Many thanks for your kind words of comment Cynthia. I am pleased that you have seen in this poem (Bemused Rumination) what quite a few would be reviewers have not recognised. I am grateful and most appreciative for your input and time. Cheers, Frederick
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Philipos
Wed 15th Dec 2010 22:29
Tut and I thought no one would ever suss the place - a rich source of cameo material though I might add - and since I have a latte there most days round noon -just say the word and we can meet up for a chat
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Wed 15th Dec 2010 20:14
http://vimeo.com/5456823
I think you could do a good version of this
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Wed 15th Dec 2010 19:11
If Bertrand Russell couldn’t convince you I’m certainly not going to try. I’m not that evangelical about my atheism. In fact some of my best friends are Christians. My Dad bought me the book for Christmas many years ago, not that we celebrated Christmas. He was like the pope of atheism. I believe it had something to do with being a bomb aimer in Lancasters during the Second World War not that he talked about it much. His older brother had been a Japanese prisoner of war and became a Methodist lay preacher on his return. They would have some wonderful discussions, warm never heated. My Dad had the last word at George’s funeral when he started the eulogy with the line- I hope George is quickly coming to terms with the lack of an afterlife.......
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Hi Lynne - yes, Hayle is a few miles away but I often pass through it on the bus - on my way to St Ives. Do you ever visit your sister? Cornwall is great! xx
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The feedback on the protest poem- appreciated Laura.
The lines that you quoted were exactly the level of contempt and targets I was aiming at...bloody tragic.
My Best
Chris
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Hi Andy, thx for the feedback on my latest.
Chris
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Thx for reading Tommy- appreciated.
Hope you are well- my best
Chris
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Lynn, thanks for comments on Santa. Appreciated.
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Hello Cynthia. Thanks for comments on Santa. I can see what you mean about Dickens, Darwin, but the way I say the poem it would disrupt the rhythm too much.And rhythm is king.
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Ann, thanks for the comments on Santa. Appreciated.
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Hiya Steve – thanks for taking another look at Iconic. Yes – I think it needs more than one read to fully understand – I didn’t appreciate that at first. I’ve started telling people who the icons are now before I perform it so they have time to get the references (John Lennon, Lady Di, Marilyn Monroe, JFK, Che Guevara, Martin Luther King). I wanted to get Elvis in but it would have been too much of a squeeze ;)
Sorry you can’t make Thursday – Christmas does get manic with dos to go to – though I’m not too bad this year. Will look forward to seeing and hearing from you in the New Year – your stuff always makes me laugh! Take care and have a good one. xx
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Thanks, Isobel. Good to be back. Wolverhampton can wait.
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Hello Laura. Thanks for the comments on Santa. I've actually been Father Xmas 3 times at a kids' nursery. The red nose and beer belly help a lot.
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Hi Isobel, Hope you're doing alright. Soz I'm not coming to Wigan tomorrow as I'm working late (after the Christmas Party tonight!) but will get along in January. Hope you have a good Xmas and New Year. Just read and heard your Iconic poem - I needed to hear it a second time after Wigan and also read it to appreciate the craft of it as there are complicated themes (for me!) in there - it sparked the old debate for me in pubs, would you prefer to live a long life or burn brightly and out? I thought the recording was great also - I do love your use of song! Take care and all the best for Xmas. Love Stevexxxxxxxxx
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Hi There, Thankyou for looking at Ghazal (branches) you comments were and are always really appreciated. A detailed reply left on the blog entry itself, Win x
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Philipos
Tue 14th Dec 2010 22:01
Hi Laura - re Halo - yes the dreaded M word linked in my case I think to recent eye problems - you sound like a fellow sufferer
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Tue 14th Dec 2010 21:58
just reporting in to say me little blue light(as in broadband is back on at home-yaye!!) catch you soon Lynn-thanks-Stef.xx
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Tue 14th Dec 2010 15:25
hi Lynn-thanks for bunion news-alls fine-apart from my home 'hub' goin hoff in a huff-the bt man cometh-soon I Hope! sending this from daughters house-thanks for concern-Stef-xx
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Hi Win, belated thank you for lovely comments on my ghazal, not easy, are they, lol. x
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Hi Dave, thank you so much for lovely comments on my ghazal and for "Sharing" - ouch is right! lol.
Love your shopping ghazal too, it is excellent! x
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Hi Ann, thank you for such lovely comments on my poems, and concern for my foot, I think it's slowly healing. Hope you are getting over the sniffles by now. Take care. Lynn xx
(P.S. my sister lives in Hayle - are you anywhere near her?)
P.P.S. Love your Ruby Slippers! xx
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Tue 14th Dec 2010 12:08
Hi Dave - thanks for your comments. I accept that some of the stuff i may put up causes some disagreement and even consternation, but at the end of the day it's only a point of view so hopefully no-one takes it personally. I thought your comments were very balanced and respectful considering you might disagree with some of the substance of the poem.
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Tue 14th Dec 2010 12:05
Hi Steve - thanks for your comments. I'll hopefully get a chance to read some of yours and others' poems later today (at work!)
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Thanks, Greg. A win over the Baggies doesn't quite compensate losing to the Blues, though.Good to be back.
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Hi Andy No need to apologise! Yesterday, I had to ask the window cleaner for his name again - I just can't ever remember it! It's Jason by the way.
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hi dave; - god knows why i called john on my comment on your piece, but it's still a really good piece.
apologises again..
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Hey Gus, thanks for the feedback on Forbidden Fruit...glad you liked it.
Hopefuly catch you at an upcoming event in the New Year, be it Bolton, Middleton or Wigan.
Have a lovely Christmas
My Best
Chris
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I think you may be right I'm veering towards 'white fellas' without italics. The trouble is I write about a lot of foreign stuff and use a lot of foreign terms. It is often hard to know where to draw the line between words that are still foreign or have actually become naturalized. I also seem to be doing a lot of stuff these days that could be termed 'reportage' - which I have no problem with (I'm a big Auden fan) although some people don't seem to keen. In that context 'fellas' might be better and not so melodramatic. Its slightly dismissive tone is also a wry comment on white supremacy.
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Philipos
Mon 13th Dec 2010 15:44
Hi Greg - the feedback much appreciated and I hope the festivities go well for you and family this Christmas
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To be honest, I prefer "white fellas", David. For me, it has the ring of the here and now, and I recognised it at once. I could hear it being said, in a sort of growl. But maybe white devils would be a more powerful contrast and make the same point more forcefully. As far as italics are concerned, we italicise foreign words and phrases that haven't become Anglicised. You could argue either way on white fellas! I enjoyed it very much. I bought a couple of CDs of Aboriginal music while I was out there. Very atmospheric. But my wife can't bear to listen to them! She doesn't mind the Australian birdsong CD so much.
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winston plowes
Fri 17th Dec 2010 20:11
Re Ghazal (branches). John, I don't find your comments 'nit picky'. 1) You have spotted a missing apostrophie and 2) The line 'filing down the wind's teeth' and 'branches' raises an important point when writting ghazals in english. The poem is a compromise between, on the one hand maintaining the criteria and on the other creating a poetic voice worth hearing. In the first sher (As Philipos pointed out the voice was compromised as boughs would have been more harmonious) and yes in the 3rd sher also. To try and get round this to some degree other poets have inserted a lot of punctuation. Maybe a dash would improve the reading, some english ghazals are almost overwhelmed with punctuation IMHO,
Cheers john
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