Re:Poem 'Alone'
'Well jeez Gus... the girls get it ; )

'Saw the reflection' can be both his and hers - an understanding/connection of their souls...

'Felt the connection
As he glanced right through'... Too intense so is afraid to acknowledge the connection...

It was written to be interpreted as either only her perception or a shared perception...

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Hi Cynthia - thanks for the kind & constructive comments - "laying on of hands" & I agree that it would work as well without the added words & I only told it as I saw it. I do generally agree with the maxim to cut it to the bare essentials, but here the guy is stepping out into the post-coital sunshine & breeze & these were his sentiments in that scenario, but you do have a valid point. BTW Cyn - I wouldn't feel too sorry for the woman - Scarlett Johansson - I just thought that the image fitted the words. B

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Hi Ann - "laying on of hands" - thanks for your kind comments. all the best. B

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Thank you for your kind comments on "I Thought White Was Beautiful" - and I got a kick out of your story!

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Hi john.. gave a nod to The George and Dragon on Monday as I passed on my bicycle (Twice)Win :-)

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Merci toi pour tes commentaires sur mon poème 'Alone'...
Tu me connais assez bien, alors tu sais ce que je veux dire
la plupart du temps ; )

xxx

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Thank you so much for your very astute observation Cynthia... I left it as 'Saw the reflection' and not 'Saw his reflection' so that you could interpret both ways, even though my thoughts were very much on his reflection...
a meeting of souls - the connection of their souls.
What did you mean by you didn't think the poem really needed it? Knowing whose reflection, or the entire stanza?

Your comments are always greatly appreciated : )
Francine x

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Ann
She puts me in the shed!

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Beulah
Many thanks for commenting on "Greavsie and Me". I think that's what they call "Damning with faint praise"! Anyway, better that you commented than not at all.
I took the opportunity to look at your page and enjoyed your entries but was surprised that your poetry has such a theme of sadness in it. Judging by your picture you seem too young to court sadness.
Keep posting.

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Thank you very much for your kind words about the poetry. I write a piece of creative work every day at http://somethingeveryday.tumblr.comif you are at all interested in reading more of my stuff. Max

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hello Ann, I am glad to be back too!
I emailed my friend who does taxidermy and she said she'd be happy for me to give you the link to pictures of her work..but it's on facebook and I don't know if that'd be useful to you or not. Let me know and I'll comment the link to you.
x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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I'm glad you're enjoying experimenting with different poetic styles, Cynthia. I mostly write in free verse myself, but try to place it within some sort of informal rhythmic/aural structure if I can. I enjoy trying more formal poems occasionally. Last summer and autumn I wrote a few sonnets in fairly quick succession, as though it was something I had to get out of my system! I find the formality of it, the ten beats and the rhyme, pushes you in directions you had not expected to go, although I don't pretend to get the stresses right. That's a step too far for me. And it's always good to have a rhyming dictionary to hand! Greg

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Glad you found the links useful, Ann. I suppose it would be a long trek for the newspaper boy, up to your row of cottages! As it happens, there is no mention of either award in the print version of today's paper - just yards of politics and other stuff. Greg x

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Congrats on making the shortlist on the Hippocrates Prize - does it entitle you to any special medical procedures?

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Hi Rach - thanks for commenting on my bat! Glad you're back amongst us. xxxx

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Hi John - thanks for commenting on Le Weekend. I thought your Two Bar Headache was immensley powerful.

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Thank you so much for your comments on "I Thought White Was Beautiful". I always thought of it as written in metaphor but I like your interpretation of it being written in allegory is much more accurate. I very much appreciate your insight.

Lisa

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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Thanks for this Kealan.
I had the idea of starting a Discussion on this to see what we all really think about each other.
I suspect I'm not the only one who harbours dark thoughts!

Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)

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Thanks for commenting on "I Thought White Was Beautiful". It was an excerise in metaphor. So glad you liked it.

Lisa

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Hiya Tommy, I am admitting defeat over "obscenity of frogspawn" I will put in another word when I can think of one, it's been mentioned a few times and as such, in the spirit of accepting feedback it's gotta go....any ideas? (The winner will win an Easter Egg which I will eat for them.)
Thanks for commentingx

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Hello Andy, thanks for your kind words on First to Depart. It's not as personal as it might appear. There's much of me in there- particularly the obsessional behaviour!- but it's mostly about how my father mourned the loss of my mother, with a bit of Alan Bennett's Talking Heads thrown in.

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Hello Cynthia. Thanks for your kind words on First to Depart. It's empathic in as much as, though there's much of me in the poem, it's mostly about how my father may have mourned the death of my mother.

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Dave, glad you liked First to Depart.Thanks for the kind words.

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Greg, thanks for your kind words on First to Depart. It's my favourite poem and I do like that last verse a lot. Let's not mention the football.

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John, thanks for your comments on First to Depart.Glad you liked it.

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Ann, thanks for your kind words on First to Depart. Appreciated,.

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Hi Dave - glad you liked my war poem, it's not easy writing about domestic violence without making it clichéd - so I decided to ...erm... make it clichéd! I don't often rhyme these days - it often feels forced to me. I love Papa Oscar Echo Mike - nothing forced about that...very clever!
Cx

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Good on you poetry needs your verve !

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hi - "the beauty queen" - many thanks. B

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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I'm really chuffed about your comments on Semana Santa, Isobel. We were there for a week in a small town halfway between Granada and Seville, where my daughter was teaching at a little English language school. The way the atmosphere builds during the week; we saw it in Seville as well as Osuna. And as for the hoods ... you're right about the Klu Klux Klan .. slightly alarming, to say the least! Greg

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Hi Andy, thanks for your comment on 'In fidelity.' I posted a comment of my own below the poem. It is a cultural poem.
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Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Hi Isobel,
thanks for your comment on In fidelity.
I added a comment of my own below the poem if you're interested to have a gander. :-)
xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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Hi Andy, thanks very much for reading and commenting on my poem,glad you liked it.
x

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Hi Greg As ever thanks for the comments. I'm a lapsed Catholic myself and I think YouTube is about as close to the 'afterlife' we're ever likely to get! It is pretty amazing and if I wasn't always so busy I'm sure I could spend hours on it. I've wanted to do one on the Wolf Man for ages, but it only recently came together. I also quite fancy doing one on Muddy Waters and another on John Lee Hooker - a kind of holy trinity of the Chicago Blues. At the moment, though, I don't really have any angles to proceed on.

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Morning Greg, Oh I dunno about the past/present thing so much. I think yours are more immediate possibly because you have the knack of making them seem current, I'm sure yours (like mine) are from tales you heard throughout your life, mine possibly carry the second hand feeling more than yours. In any case I think the fact that yours seem less removed from the present make them more vivid and effective.
Cool coincidence though isn't it that we are both writing a similar theme, feels like we are fellow travellers if you'll allow a tired cliche!Lol.(I'm a tired cliche-er)
I have also fallen foul of the old plastic bird trick, in our case a 3x life size plastic kingfisher on the canal towpath, I hadn't seen one before (though it did look a bit too big) and me and my youngest son did a ridiculous SAS type stalk so it didn't fly off in alarm.
x

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Morning Dave, thanks for the comment on th'poem. yep, we are very lucky, not many hen harriers around anywhere these days but they nest around Bowland...I can't (without binoculars) be 100% sure it was a hen harrier but it looked very much like one.
x

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Cheers Dave-ohh! John Lee Hooker was the Man round the Manchester clubs-in the thar days-What a scene to have had the very good fortune of being in! fab gear Man! get my mojo out in a bit-sniff sniff! Stef.

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Glad you enjoyed the Kingfisher poem, Rachel. A similar thing happened to me: I carefully prepared to take a picture of an immobile heron on the far side of the canal, poised to seize a fish, marvelling at its ability to keep so still, only to discover it was a plastic one. I need new glasses.
Thanks too for commenting on Eating in Private, and feeling it so much. It's intended to be part of a sequence, which I think you may be embarked on too, with your "war at sea" poems. I'm always looking forward to the next one. You have the knack of referring the past to the present, which maybe I need to do more with mine. Greg

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Hello Cate

How lovely your comments are, almost as sad as the poem.

I agree with every thing you say, the world becomes a frightening place for many of us as we grow confused and infirm.

Thank you once again.

Augusta xx

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Thank you Anne for reading my poem reference to my grandfather's Scrotum. and in particular the last line.

You are very encouraging and ... prolific...you probably written another ten poems becuse the clocks have gone forward affording you more datlight thinking time.... whoops... another poem... oh here comes another...

lucky girl it takes me ages.

Thanks again
Augusta xx

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OI! Gladdrags! patum peperium-what disgusting language to use on Palm Sunday-wot I don,t understand anyway-heehee....ta chuck for chukkin' us a comment on me dicky..bird poo-em....in your neck of the woods(more or less,this week-Funky Fleetwood for four days-in caravan-now theres luxury!keep yer snow shoes handy-more on the way-'they' say! wot-not-a-skorcha!brrrr-Stef-xx

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Good afternoon Isobel,

Thank you for grappling with my grandfathers scrotum.

I would very much like to produce a self published book of my poetry... and 'Bollocks' might well be the Title although many of my poems do include reference to ladies gentalia... now I wonder what a combination of the two might be...

I'm open, as always, to suggestions.

Augusta

August

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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Thank you so much Cynthia for taking the time to comment on my Granfather's scrotum.

Augusta xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Hey Max, great to see you on here
rach
x

Comment is about Max Wallis (poet profile)

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Thanks Greg, my grandad's ship was partly responsible for the sinking of the Scharnhorst and it was an abomination to him that they'd killed cadets.(the sailors didn't know till later) Thanks hugely for the comments, they really are appreciated.

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Isobel, thanks for your kind remarks on Unexpected Steps. I retired over a year ago and the menagerie is somewhat depleted, 2 dogs, 4 cats and a rabbit. Can't seem to get rid of the kids, though.

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Heel Ms Foxglove, a graphic novel is a comic! Pictures (they call it 'artwork') and words (they call them 'captions')... I imagine the medium might appeal to you.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Stan's gloves definitely not in my car. I had to empty it recently cos it was going in for repairs. I found an awful lot of rubbish and things I'd forgotten I had - but no leather gloves. If they weren't at the Green Room, he may have dropped them en route to the car. I'm always doing things like that - often purses! Will defo make it to Waterside again - it was a good night. Hope you are better. xx

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Hi Cynthia, thanks for your comment on The Soldier. I think if you write about something you are passionate about, your message will inevitably be clear as day.

- Josh

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Isobel, I was ill on Tuesday gone, and missed the first Waterside in ages. Sounded like a great evening. Maybe it will take some of the 'anti' out of the venue. I see I also missed you and Janet. My loss. Speaking of - Stan still seriously wonders if his only leather gloves might not be in your car - somewhere. Did you check any further?

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