Scallywag! Cliches have their part to play...just not strung together and presented as a 'poem'.

I often use cliches...the moon is a good example, how tired is that?

But...if you can 'make it new' then, fabuloso.

I'll never eat pit pony again without thinking of you!

:-)

jx

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Hi Ann - re The Tumbler - daft I know but so incongruous I had to write about it - glad you liked it though x

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Thanks for your comments on Night Mail, Val.
There's something almost alive about a steam train which is missing on diesels and electrics.
We go to the North Yorks Moors Railway (Pickering to Whitby) quite often which is magical - especially the Wartime Weekend (usually around October).

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Ann
Thanks for your comments on Night Mail.
I am, of course, joking about Auden's original - it's a rocker.

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Ta for commenting on my true life poem, Pit Pony. What terrible days they were and how glad I am that they are over. Although I still suffer from coal blindness I'd really love to share a cuddly bunny curry.

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Thanks for your comment on Pit Pony, how I'm glad those days are gone - though the rickets still remain with me alas

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I know it's a cliche but thanks for your comment on my poem 'Pit Pony'.

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hi young Davey lad! ta for Norma Jean info-news to me indeed.no she certainly was no bimbo-just vulnerable-keep well sir-Mr W.

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hi lynn-glad I majer laf! av put pikky now on same poem/thingy-should give you an even bigger laff-ta lovelychops-Stefano.xx

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ta funnybird for commentarios on me giggle poem-now accompanied by an explicit foter of moi!-all the georgey-Stef'oldy.xx

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Hi Kate,

Just had a wee look at your profile and really enjoyed "He Is Veg Patch"
I'll have to pop back and have another look around, the poems on your profile a quite fun which is refreshing after so much deep and meaningful :) x

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sorry i hadn't realised i had posted multiple ones i have had a look and cant see anymore i hope they have been taken down by admin

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yeh ill be there...see you then x (if i can get lift sorted!)

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Thank you for your kind messages, so sorry that its taken such a long time to get back, please charge it to my mind and not my heart. I wish you a very happy new year

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Hi Greg - I have a family funeral at Ruislip that day so not too sure - if I don't get there please tender my apologies

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Hi Cynthia, thanks for your comments on The Fairies. You're right, it can be terribly distressing for all concerned, whether the thieving is real or imaginary, and has caused family fissures in this case.

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Thanks for your comments on The Fairies, Ann. It is different, but is one of those that had to be written at the time. Please accept my belated condolences about Gemma - and hope your walking plans bear fruition this year! x

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Thanks for your generous comments on The Fairies, Andy.

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Thanks for your comment on The Fairies, Dave. Glad you saw the dignity there.

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Thanks for your comments on 13:35 Cynthia :)

Ah, that title...there's actually tons to get out of it, we were messing about with it last night. The verses are 3 line verses...and there are two 3s in the title.

You can add the 1 and the 5 to get 6, which is what the two inner threes amount to. Half of 6 is 3.

Also, 5 minus 3 = 2, as does 3 minus 1 = 2 (don't know if you yourself have a 'lucky number', but mine is two!). 1 + 3 = 4, 5 + 3 = 8, which is 4 doubled(8 is in itself 2 times 2, then times 2).

I like your thought on it too :) I am really quite interested in numerology anyway, and it all got a bit spooky last night!

Anyway, ta for taking the time to read, as always :)

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Hi Ann, If I didn't write this sort of tosh I may well be bitter. A release valve maybe :-)

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Thanks for your comment Andy (on Pit Pony). As you know I'm a weak and sickly person old before my time due to my hard life up chimneys and down pits so any kindness is always welcome.

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Thank you for your cruel comments on my emotional poem Pit Pony. I would have thought you would have empathy with an old miner what with all your tin mines down there.
Ah tin... we used to dream of tins of something, it was so hard existing on coal dust mixed with muddy water- not very appetising admittedly but a good sourceof carbon.

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Thank you for commenting on Pit Pony. I was forced to go down the pit when I was too big to go up chimneys. It was such a hard life, I'm only 16 now.

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Alan, thanks for your comments on Ghazal (your hair) No it is not my barnet! lol. Winston

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Andy . More on your recent ghazal comments. They made me think and I have started a related discussion thread -

http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/newsgroupview.php?NewsThreadsID=1150

Win

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Thanks for the thoughts on ight Mail.
"Harder than it looks..."? You need lungs like a blue whale's to recite it!

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Hello Alan
Thanks for your thoughts on Night Mail.
Not sure Clarkson would like the comparison!
I did, of course, mean the comment about Auden as tongue-in-cheek. The original is a cracker.

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Hi there,

As always, thank you for reading and commenting. Re the songwriting, not likely lol x

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Hi Cynthia,

Thank you for taking the time to comment. Having re read from the second stanza i have to say that i agree with you, that the first is not really necessary, tho i cant deecide if i want to remove it or not! x

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thanks Dave for taking time with 'remember' much appreciatied.x

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gawd knows re bugginton blues-one minute fine-then next all 'ell broke loose-but being the calm youthfully capable man wot I am,I just stopped short of putting me bloody foot(which was,nt actually bleeding)through the ******* screen-but hey! dont you being worrying your pretty little head over moi-you have enough to do-gallivanting!..ta though chuck-SW.xx

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one did indeed have said gee gee doing a plop all over the proceedings-and the bugger still aint stopped galloping! ta for concern-Mr Grrreygrumps.xx

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Laura - fancy you being at Freshfield Sands as recently as you were - wow - I'm quite sure it looks heaps better than on my last visit - nature trail and all lol x

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Dave - so glad you and your friends enjoyed Freshfield Sands and for taking the trouble of saying so

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Hi Ann - re; Freshfield Sands - yes places do move our thoughts and usually because of who we're with at the time - appreciate your getting in touch x

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hey fingy!beastie-Barlow ta for sparing me a serious view(almost)on me poo-im 'unseen foe'-el mucho thanko,s squire-Wotsisname.(me am just back from the gremlin wars...bloody so called technology!)

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hi Ann-thanks for all recent comments-just back from warring with the computer gremlins-big lot of dead good regards-SW.XX

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Hi Kate, both Sunday Morning TV and the sump hunt made me smile - I think our 'escape' video when the kids were teeny was Postman Pat, lol. Best wishes, Dave

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Hi andy, than ks for reading my Ghazals... 'the north sea rolls'I think this is the best bit too, (if it has a best bit) and yet they are all really simple words in that line (maybe that tells us something eh. Also like long words too .lol ,Win X

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Hi Andy, thanks for your comments on "Empty" the repeated no could be seen as a refusal of the fact as well as the fact...

Didn't make it to Wigan, some upset occurred which needed sorting - things don't happen when there's nothing planned! Ah well, Bolton isn't too far, used to live in Farnworth a moon or two ago, I'll check out the details, thanks x

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Thanks Laura, it was a difficult but also a deeply profound experience which was hell to go through but later provided such immense learning and opportunity for personal growth - which is often the case... xXx

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Thanks for your observations. I am interested what it means to YOU. So actually you are the person best of all to qualify on my work :-)

Whilst I like some bits, Couplets 2,6,7 & 9. Others are not poetic and are more just like statements. It's ok if they are odd and quirky or dont make complete sense but they need to do something and not be just bland. Maybe I have been reading too many free verse ghazals lately. The disconnected narative is a feature of the Ghazal form and so is ok but strange if you are not used to it. In the hair ghazal the shers are also disconnected BUT they are pulled together by the common refrain "your hair". Here the refrain "By it" makes things more random.

Also interesting that often (and on this page) people liked the shers I didn't particularly like, Hmm.

X H

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Hiya - just letting you know that you have posted multiple blogs of the same poem - you might want to remove the surplus ones :)

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Cheers ears - title is a biblical reference, Matthew to be precise. Yeh - third verse could do with something else - now changed. Better, do you think? Which line was lyrical?

Tom x

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Hi Tom. Thanks for the comments on Ghazal (your hair), this one was written over a year ago and was never happy with it . rewrote it in pub last week and like it now. The previous ghazal (by it) I am not sure about. Would be interested on your input compared to say, (your hair). Houston

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What a good evening at Bolton yesterday. Well done and thanks, Jeff.

PS. Can't make the next one - darn!

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hi dave, did i call you alan tonight?? duh so sorry. jeff informs me that alan bradley was a dirty rotter fro corrie...oops. you are not dirty or a rotter, nice to see you tonight x

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Hiya Dave! Thanks for reading 'softly.' This actually arrived not long after i had watched the life story of Edith Piaf..so there you go! (course i altered the original to make the read more ambiguous, lol i always do!) Anyways hows yourself?.not seen you for a while.

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Hi Cynthia

Thank you as ever for your very kind comment on 'Beyond the Garden #2'. Your comments are always appreciated even if I don't say so. And yes, I did think of a creature a bit like the Gruffalo - you can chalk that up as a 'gotcha'.

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