Hi Cynthia,
thank you for taking the time to comment on my poem. It is the first time I have ever wrote a blog and am a type of novice in displaying my poetry. After consideration, I felt that you were right about the "concluding line". IMO, I have a lot to learn! I appreciated what you had to say. Cheers :)

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Hi Iso

Thank you for your super douperini comments regarding The Stolen Smile...

Ive always suffered badly with wind, as well you know!

Gus xx

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Thank you so much Chris,for reading and particularly for your well thought through and encouraging comments.

I read with great interest of your current battle related to all things venue and gigs over on the wirral and Liverpool. Sounds as if I should be over to support you... whats going on???

you were very much inmy minds eye when I was writing this piece insofar as you have always shown a great interest in my prose.

The boy was on his way to his Auntie, with the intention of running away and hiding away from for ever in bungalow. There were not many circus on the Isle of Wight.

Once again many many thanks and please keep me in the loop about your current issues.

Gus x

Comment is about Chris Co (poet profile)

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Cynthia, thank you for sharing your ideas about Day 7. I love hearing how other people view what I write. It gives me a fresh way of seeing things and I think that's so helpful when it comes to improving what we write.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Yvonne, so glad you like rainbows too lol.

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Feel free to stalk me all you want. I appreciate the attention, it just lets me know I've not ran out of things to say and ways to say them.

Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)

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i've just stumbled across your troth of poems, have enjoyed reading them!

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Hi Phillip, really enjoyed reading your profile and sample poems. I especially like the first poem, the way it flows and the truth about it. Look forward to reading more.

Comment is about Phillip Kelly (poet profile)

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Hi Phillip - a warm welcome to WOL. Glad you are taking part in the site. I agree with Yvonne about having a bit of a gap between poems on the blogs though, as the newest poem you put on there will seem to hide the previous one. Good luck with all your projects - you sound a busy bee :)

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I look forward to your next poem but wait a couple of days or more before putting your next one up as this gives more members time to look at the current one. And as I mentioned earlier commenting on other's poems means they may look at yours and respond.

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thanks.....i did actually have it down in journal as that.....just written it out wrong on here......

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Hi Phillip you have an interesting format here. It actually sounds good read aloud althought the metre jumps around.I'd prefer line 4 to scan as : 'Explain it's not him' as for me this places the emphasis on the word not in an easier flow especially as the next line places the stress on 'You'

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Hi John
re Kushagarnie
Seems a good idea to me. A versatile song eh? both skipping and lullabye. Look forward to it

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Hello Greg
Kind of you not to mention Black Sunday.
There was a lot of balls spoken about your 2nd goal. We didn't lose because it didn't cross the line; we lost because we didn't score six.

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Thanks for your knowledgeable comments on Duty, John. I wasn't going to mention last Sunday. We've had a lot of luck recently. It's going to run out some time.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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What ho, Yvonne.
Im afraid my laptop gets PMT and goes all moody on me.
What I was trying to say was that A the G did loads of stuff n stuff n stuff like that but only gets remembered for burning the Xmas pud, whereas Nelson isn't quite as nice a fellow as we now think him to be but just because he saved the nation from sea invasion from the surrender-monkey froggies with their distasteful cheeses and surly waiters...
Ok - bad example. Maybe I need to think this through a bit more.

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Hi, John
Your information about Nelson to MC ref:-'Nelson was a Norfolk Lad' is very interesting. I didn't know you had studied the Anglo Saxon period in its own tongue. Maybe relaying your information to MC in aforementioned language was a tad rich. May we have a translation please?

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Thanks for the lovely comment on The Newberry-Dye-crossing.
great info about the pub.
A wonderful bird is the pelican
His beak can hold more than his belly can.
He can hold in that beak
Enough food for a week,
but I do not know how the Hell'e can. XX

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Thanks for the lovely comment on The Newberry-Dye-bypass.
A wonderful bird is the pelican
His beak can hold more than his belly can.
He can hold in that beak
Enough food for a week,
but I do not know how the Hell'e can. XX

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

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Oh bless you for your lovely comments!

Comment is about Glyn Pope (poet profile)

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CBT, Hi,
ref Dinner Date, or should that be: 'Inner Date' one never knows! you alone have delved into the thoughts behind this one. I usually expose the insipid mush but this was a fling, and yes, you triumphed! Well played, for seeing the truth inside this shallow piece of 'deception' in that I kept it simple to please the audience. I shall now be your most gracious 'watcher' Please, please me more! ta muchly, Nick.

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Sorry Mr Coop 'ey lad' i've been away for a bit. out of control is what they said. never mind, or is that midn? I understamd that a bicycle theme has errupted in the WOL. I best add me bit.
tara for now, see thee later, [in my best Yorkshire] Nick

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Hello Cynthia, thank-you .. it's strange how other people's analysis can reveal more . I thought this has to be called 'sea' .. perhaps we are just a conduit for our subconcious ideas ..cheers.

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John, I just have to tell you how much enjoyment I get out of listening to you read your poems. I wish everyone did that.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Alison, thank you for your comments on Day 6, you made it sound so much better than it was.

Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)

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Yvonne, thank you for the kind remarks on Day 6.

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Laura, thanks for reading and commenting on Day 6. I posted something earlier from this same series of poems, I just wanted to see what the reaction is to some of the other ones. In case your curious I did a group of poems called 30 days to forget her. One poem a day for 30 days about how I was feeling about her at that time.

I honestly don't think it worked, nor do I think it was as therapeutic as it could have been. In fact I think it drew out the transition phase from being involved to being single a little longer than it should have been.

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

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Hi John
to start in reverse order There was not much point in shame - it didn't rhyme with pelican!
As for all those different crossings, I'd no idea there were so many. I'd just googled pedestrian crossing when this novella on crossings popped up and tempted me - I'm easily led!
By the way if this cycle thread is to be sustained are you doing a rewrite of the pushbike song? XX

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Thanks for reading/comments on SchoolMistress. Fortunately that woman never taught me!Maybe I was a teeny bit cruel about the woman it was based on.

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Please, Glyn! Be so kind and read my comments on "I am a lady".

Comment is about Glyn Pope (poet profile)

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An emperor can walk naked but everyone will say that his clothes are beautiful.

Comment is about Glyn Pope (poet profile)

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Hello, Glyn! Thank you so much for commenting on my poems. I've read all your poems posted here and world like to say that they are not for me. It's not my style.
http://www.poetryfromodessa123.jimdo.com
Best wishes,
Larisa
PS I've commented on your comments.

Comment is about Glyn Pope (poet profile)

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Thank you for your kind comment on 'The Music'.
gx

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Hi Yvonne,

Thanks again for the kind comments on 'Jury Duty'
I'm glad you liked it.

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Hi Cynthia,
Thanks for the kind comments on 'Jury Duty' - I appreciate the amendments too - I often miss those little things even if I've read the piece 10 + times. Great of you to take time like that!

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Ouch it still hurts.
I rang my big brother Barca up and asked him to duff them up for me!

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Hello Alison
Many thanks for your comments on Metre.
I've never got round to reading Beowulf myself. I wonder if it loses something in translation to modern english

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Laura thank you for your comment. I agree re 'lays' and 'lies' and its American-ism. Recently I have been in a quandary as to the grammar. So I have lain the issue to the past(participle).
;o)

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A pleasure Jack- :o)

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Ta for the comment- :o)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Cheers JD ;o)

Comment is about John Duffus (poet profile)

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''Cheers Win-stone mah sahn''

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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I shiver at the word Anne.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Cheers Andy. :o)

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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You make me blush with your praise Laura.
And sorted those pesky hyphens- gratis-Tommy (hehe)
...ah-ray Laura-I need to have my foir-gras!
PS who is this 'BoB' person anyway?

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

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Hi Anne. I copy and paste it all from my phone, and for some reason it cuts out the paragraphs. I'll fix it soon enough when I find a pc to use. I enjoy reading your poems, Anne. Thanks for your advice.

Gareth

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Welcome to WOL. Sekou is one of my favorite poets:
Urban Music
by Sekou Sundiata

...I wanna tell you how much we wanted to make revolution
But in our yearning we learned, suffering ain’t noble and to struggle is a blessing that brings more life on the side of life itself

That wide are the rivers we know, deep is the water,
hip-hop and beyond hip-hop and before
I mean I could run out of breathe before
I could divest the rest that I don’t know

Maybe, I can break it down to you like this
We dreamed you Black, in your badness
Made you up out of poems, and lies and words to live by
And we ourselves was dreamed, most likely by some slaves
Whenever they got a little space to climb into their heads and be free
So when they closed their eyes, what did they see?
They saw you…they saw me...

Comment is about Kat Francois (poet profile)

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I love the musicality you get into these lines without once seeming to strive for it. A very effective tale simply told and made so much more poignant by the mundane details of looking round a bare flat. I'm not sure that the second half is really needed - to my mind, you've said everything you need to say supremely well in your first three stanzas. Great work.

Comment is about steve pottinger (poet profile)

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Try buying a new mouse John - last time I had the same problem I had a faulty mouse. x

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Hi Gareth - I'm enjoying seeing your work on the blogs. I just wondered if the line spacing wasn't working for you. Not sure if you want your work to be laid out like prose but suspect not due to capital letters and longer spaces between some words, and your profile poems. I think this format (looking like prose) might put some people off reading it too which would be a shame. I am not at all technical but if the poems aren't looking as you want them to then do let me know and we'll see what the probelm is.

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