I'd travel far

Search for Shangri-La

Pay the cash for a dash to a distant star

I'd even leave my favourite bar

If you say you'll be mine.


I'd run a mile

In Olympic style

And run right back with a Mo Farah smile

Then do it all again in a little while

If you say you'll be mine.


Like Jack and Jill

I'd take a spill

Or take a hike up Everest's hill

Or feeling ill - tear up my will

If you say you'll be mine.


Is my message clear?

Tell me - do you hear?

You can always whisper in my ear

I'd love to have you be that near

To say that you'll be mine.






Thu 6th Oct 2016 03:47

I'm hearing the Andrews Sisters or something so 40s..

It seems in this modern age, somewhat archaic, yet simple and longed for..very charming.

I used to tell my father that if circumstances were so perfect in the past, they would not have permitted change to their present state.

..but, those nostalgic sentiments still hold sway with their simplicity.


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Kimberly Ray

Thu 6th Oct 2016 03:27

Very nice!

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Tom Doolan

Wed 5th Oct 2016 11:23

Well said M.C.

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 4th Oct 2016 17:56

Thanks for the input, gents. Advice and observations
always appreciated.
The lines were formed using a songwriting style of rhythm
and were fun to do.

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John Coopey

Tue 4th Oct 2016 08:29

Difficult structure to do, MC. I'm sure she's worth it.

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 3rd Oct 2016 23:02

If you tear up that will - you`ve lost her! (don`t say I didn`t warn you)

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