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Smoke room

Still embalmed is the smell, the taste, the colour

In what was once the room of smoke

Where carefully contoured rings blew across

Louche sofa’s and upright leather bar stools

Served by barmen or brassy barmaids

In rooms filled with jaded freshly tousled men

And up and coming starlets, strumpets and harlots

Those once well thought of

Some notorious

Others vain glorious

Often the worse for wear

The like of which were sketched on the back of cigarette cards

To be swapped and collected

Arranged in matching teams and sets

Now like their images

Just cameos of a life well lived

In contrast to the spit and sawdust

Polished wooden tables

With roll out the barrel

Pints of mild and bitter

Port and lemon

Flat caps and tucked in scarves

Where laughter is loud and proud

Arriving and descending in great swathes

Never polite

Never condescending

Just honest

Sometimes rude or naugthy

Never a guffaw or chortle

 

Whilst in the salons and up town bars

Some sat holding court

Perched on the edge of leather chairs or stools

Where flappers, all feathers and beads

Sit with snappy dressing top hat and tails

Smoking sweet smelling cheroots or cigarettes through

Tooth chewed tortishell holders

Talking of the very latest sensation

Here today, gone tomorrow

Darling have you seen?

Have you heard the most divine? 

Ice slinks, chinks and slurps in tumblers

Of Johnny walkers, Gordon’s and Gilbey’s

Whilst stifled controlled laughter

Never pierces or pushes the columns of advancing fog

 

That wall of mist formed in every quarter

Every saloon, hotel, public bar and boudoir

Holding its’ own against any inward draft.

It’s warm welcome fug an antidote

To anything that might be out there

The other side of highly polished wood and brass

Where finely etched glass is labelled with public, snug, saloon

Or smoke room

The last bastion against that out there

The great unknown

The great outdoors

The open air              

◄ The enemy

You and I ►

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Martin Elder

Sat 23rd Jan 2016 22:47

Thanks Ray I count this as a real compliment. Dylan Thomas is my poetry hero

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raypool

Sat 23rd Jan 2016 17:21

Just caught up with this Martin. Fantastic detail and completely frozen in another time (which I well remember). My grandfather was a frequenter of Battersea boozers and used a Tommy lighter well before the war. This has the rolling quality of Dylan Thomas in full flow.
Ray

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Martin Elder

Sun 17th Jan 2016 16:45

Thanks John much appreciated. I always value your comparisons

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John F Keane

Sat 16th Jan 2016 22:00

I love this one. I especially like the sense of the smoke room keeping the cold night at bay with its own world of warmth, drink (and smoke!). It reminds me also of a Hemingway story where men are frightened to leave the lights of a bar for the cold, empty void of night (Nada) lurking outside.

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Martin Elder

Thu 14th Jan 2016 14:41

Thanks Andy, much appreciated

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Andy N

Thu 14th Jan 2016 13:02

remember this from monday. great piece. one of your best i think..

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Martin Elder

Wed 13th Jan 2016 14:55

Thank you all so much for your kind comments. This was inspired by a pub a few miles away from where I live that is now being refurbished , as what I am unsure but on one of the windows it bears the words' smoke room' etched into the frosted glass. This began to set my mind thinking about times even before I was around ! but also when I used to smoke hamlet cigars, cue - music ( for those who may remember the advert)

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 12th Jan 2016 17:54

A memorable evocation of the pubs and clubs of another
time - when they served as a refuge from an unfriendly
and inhospitable world beyond the ornate frosted glass.
How often I recall seeking my place at the bar, letting
the door swing shut behind me as if I was escaping
"through the looking glass" - to be greeted by the burr of
conversation and the smell of that welcoming oasis of
alcohol and fug where all were created and met as equal.
You can't properly explain how it was but these lines are
as near as anyone will get. Thank you, Martin.

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Vicki Ayers

Tue 12th Jan 2016 13:15

Martin this is so vibrant in its descriptions - I can smell the smoke & hear the chatter - brilliant x

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Stu Buck

Tue 12th Jan 2016 08:17

this is excellent. it captures the same sort of schizophrenic buildings that rays does. thats not a very good description of it, but i understand. i particularly like

Smoking sweet smelling cheroots or cigarettes through

Tooth chewed tortishell holders

Although i think it may be 'tortoiseshell'

Doesnt spoil an excellent poem though, and one that is transportative (why is this not a word?) and vivid.

also kudos for the perfect description of each customer. i chortled along the way.

Update - it just struck me you may have meant 'tortishell' as a colloquialism i am not aware of. if so, i apologise.

Lan

Tue 12th Jan 2016 02:25

Martin, I really enjoyed this - the images are so vivid, I felt like I was watching a movie, or looking at a series of paintings. Love the clarity of the last four lines :)

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