M.C. Newberry

FALLEN ANGEL - a song

by M.C. Newberry

Wednesday 22nd January 2014 1:00 am

You sparkled like a shining star

When I first saw you from afar

You promised what I'd never known

And I sought you for my own

But love with you was not to be

You couldn't share your light with me

However hard you said you tried

The glow between us dimmed and died

Angel - you are my fallen Angel

All hope of love with you has flown

Angel - you are my fallen Angel

And now I'm all alone

When I look up at starlit skies

It seems I see into your eyes

I have to turn and look away

I try to get by - day by day

But darkness brings that heavenly gleam

And memories of a vanished dream

I hurt in ways I never knew

Each moment when I'm without you

Angel - you are my fallen Angel

All hope of love with you has flown

Angel - you are my fallen Angel

And now I'm all alone

Angel

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Comments

M.C. Newberry

Sat 25th Jan 2014 16:47

Thanks Harry.
But I must admit...there is something very
satisfying about alliteration: perhaps to do with the form of rhythm it employs.

Harry O'Neill

Fri 24th Jan 2014 21:26

Agree with all said.

My mate always used to say:

`When your poem`s not doing well
Alliterate like bloody hell`

M.C. Newberry

Thu 23rd Jan 2014 11:48

It's always a pleasure to bring pleasure!
JC - a niece made a similar comment about the
tune. If I find a stronger one, I'll go to it!!
In the meantime, it pleases me.
As for the line kindly referred to: I was torn
between "memories" and "visions". Such is the
hardship and toil of the lyric writer! I'm still
unsure which is best, with the appeal of the
alliteration lurking in the latter. Decisions...decisions!

Lynn Dye

Wed 22nd Jan 2014 23:33

I enjoyed this, MC, and agree with John about the best line.

John Coopey

Wed 22nd Jan 2014 18:40

Nice to see the audios being posted again, MC.
I liked the "darkness brings that heavenly gleam and memories of a vanished dream".
If I had a minor issue it was that I felt the melody a bit shy compared with the lyrics.

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