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A Step Towards Summer

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A Step Towards Summer

 

I look into the mirror’s depthless space,

at what is standing in the shadows cast

by light dimming swift with each day amassed

and passing by me, at a startling pace.

I sprint to catch the future in a chase

that takes me on a journey to the past

and makes me wish each moment used will last

until the day they put me in my case.

 

Yet – later, standing in the summer sun

that spills upon a garden dressed in light,

I see that seasons end and new ones start

and if we wish to love what we have done

we must be willing to accept the night

and face each second with a fearless heart.

 

 

 

 

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 2nd Jun 2013 23:41


Ian,
Apart from one, every time I`ve tried a sonnet I`ve found myself copying Shakespeare (as if I could!).

Unless I feel the poem going that way, I leave them alone. For me they are a straight-jacket.

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Ian Whiteley

Wed 29th May 2013 16:21

Harry
many thanks for pointing out the error in this Petrarchan Sonnet - I wrote it rather quickly to 'book-end' my first collection with a piece I put on here earlier ('A Step Towards Winter')Despite checking the manuscript a number of times this wasn't spotted, so you've saved my bacon :-)
I've amended the verse pattern if you want to have another look at it - I value your opinion and am so pleased you spotted this - so thanks once again
Ian

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 28th May 2013 23:50


Ian,
Nice sentiment and use of a sonnet form.

Maybe line three could end with something like `passed` though I can see that you might then have had to change the `past` ending line six.

(these things always get me caught up in them):)

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