Ian,
Apart from one, every time I`ve tried a sonnet I`ve found myself copying Shakespeare (as if I could!).

Unless I feel the poem going that way, I leave them alone. For me they are a straight-jacket.

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Harry
many thanks for pointing out the error in this Petrarchan Sonnet - I wrote it rather quickly to 'book-end' my first collection with a piece I put on here earlier ('A Step Towards Winter')Despite checking the manuscript a number of times this wasn't spotted, so you've saved my bacon :-)
I've amended the verse pattern if you want to have another look at it - I value your opinion and am so pleased you spotted this - so thanks once again
Ian

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Ian,
Nice sentiment and use of a sonnet form.

Maybe line three could end with something like `passed` though I can see that you might then have had to change the `past` ending line six.

(these things always get me caught up in them):)

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