Mothering Sunday

 

commercialism overload

Christmas

Valentines

money to pay

and so the list goes on

now it’s Mothers Day…

 

I can’t check my emails

without being instructed

my soul laid bare

to buy this or that

for my dear mum

to show I care.

                                              

so I’d love to comply

Mr. Advertiser

but Mum would need

to still be alive

wouldn’t you say?

thanks for reminding me

have a nice day

 

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Comments

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Lynn Dye

Sun 11th Mar 2012 14:31

Oops, belated thank you, MC.
I have tried to change the format, and not happy with that either! Back to the drawing board...!!

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 8th Mar 2012 16:29

I go along with TT on this with the caveat that
occasionally a mixture can work as long as there are recognisable links in the chain to
guide the mind along the path you have created.
Like Thomas, I like the last line...suitably
"acid" in the sugary context of commercial hard-sell...and the subject deserves it!

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Lynn Dye

Thu 8th Mar 2012 12:32

Thank you very much for your kind words, Thomas.
Yes, you're right about the rhyming - I guess I was aiming at free verse with the odd rhyme!
May still tinker with it yet...

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Marnanel Thurman

Thu 8th Mar 2012 12:15

Strong idea, good point, and I love the twist at the ending. The rhyming is a bit obscured by the varying numbers of lines in the verses.

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