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He Didn't Care

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On the day of her death

he didn't cry.

Everyone said

"He doesn't care!"

 

On the day they laid

her to rest

he didn't cry.

Everyone said

"He never loved her!"

 

On the one month anniversary

of her death he was found

lying next to her grave.

An empty bottle of poison

in his hand. A note

that simply read,

"I can't live without her."

 

This the man

"Who didn't care."

This the man

"Who never loved her."

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John Coopey

Thu 22nd Dec 2011 22:07

Very good, Shirley.
I just wonder if it would be stronger still without the last 4 lines. (English understatement, and all that!)

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Isobel

Wed 21st Dec 2011 23:47

A fascinating story Shirley. The outside world doesn't really know what goes on behind closed doors, does it? That reminds me of a poem I need to write when I get round to it.

I'm left wondering if the deceased wife knew she was loved. That is the important part of the story for me.

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Andy N

Wed 21st Dec 2011 23:02

clever stuff, Shirley.. this style suits you really well i think.. keep em coming xx

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Nick Coleman

Wed 21st Dec 2011 20:01

Good. Some hide their emotions too well, and others don't try to see past the wall. And love your illustrations

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