BETTY IN A WINDY SUNSET
Ah, that was a sight!
Betty in the end-of-summer light.
A recent rinse of rain had washed the air
Glistening the low sun`s shining everywhere,
When a frisk wind, come upon her laughing there,
Wrestled with the sun-glints in her hair.
And, snatching her long carillons of delight,
So tossed them every place around the height
That the coming night
Was filled with Betty laughing everywhere.
And me - me stood watching -
What could I do but fall in love with her?
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Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 11th Jan 2012 12:15
I do like the aura of this, and the imagery. Often, that impact alone is enough to make a good poem. IMO, there are some words that caused blockage, like '"recent" rain' (which didn't even seem necessary for metric count). And perhaps 'carillons' is so unusual, a musical word for hair, that its originality bothered me,rather than amazed me. And yet - it sure sticks in the mind.!