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JANINE AT THE SEA`S EDGE

Behind her was a width of land,

Before, a wider width of sea,

Between, a mile of flat, wet sand

Then a track foot-trod determinedly.

 

Until, skirt-tucked, flamingo-stanced,

She stood, delighted, chortling there,

While a million crinkling ripples danced

As the cheeky sea grinned back at her.

 

Bold-eyed, elemental, kin,

They haled each other, sight to sight,

Each the other drinking in

In a mutual exchange of light

 

Then – done – the parting, to the land,

Homing-ward, the long track trudging.

(All the way the jealous sand

Every single footstep grudging)

 

She: to fetch the light, the air,

The sea, to all the folk inland.

The sea: to break the news of her

    Along the coasts………………

 

Of Casablanca, Carolina,

Sunny Cuba, India, China,

Indonesia, Mauritania,

Java, Yemen, Pennsylvania,

 

Argentina, Spain, Alaska,

Mozambique, and Madagascar.

A flip to far Franz Joseph Land,

Then home again to Wirral Sands.

 

 

 

POSTSCRIPT

 

The moon that midnight, stealthily,

Would`ve drawn a furtive sheet of sea

And kept the secret selfishly.

 

But the poet, dafted with the sight,

Sat up and scribbled all the night

And turned it into poetry.

 

                                                                                                    Tag WOL comp

◄ BETTY IN A WINDY SUNSET

POETS ON POETRY ►

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Martin Peacock

Tue 7th Feb 2012 14:05

Ola, and cheers ever so for your comments on 'Handful Of Dust', Harry. As for 'Janine At The Sea's Edge' - it scores right well with me. Just one minor cavil: a little rejigging of the punctuation would ease its flow tremendously - make a good poem a great one. And I loved the PS: '...the poet, dafted by the sight' is a line I may have to steal someday....

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 11th Jan 2012 13:03

As always, I do enjoy your imaginative scope, and I find this very interesting. To be honest, I think it is a bit 'unfinished'. Would you consider leaving out all punctuation? IMO,your word order is very self explanatory, and the roll of such fine words could then flow unimpeded. My thesaurus is a constant companion, and I use it often to find the exact word to express an elusive idea.

<Deleted User> (6895)

Sat 7th Jan 2012 17:51

Whoops!
nearly missed this beaut,

Good on yer guv'nor!

(could the coasts not have
extended to Blackpool then Harry-ha!)

best regards
Two buggerluggsies.xx

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Isobel

Fri 6th Jan 2012 20:44

Another charming poem Harry. I'm guessing you are a one for the ladies!

<Deleted User> (6315)

Wed 4th Jan 2012 21:39


Harry this is lovely.

:)

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John Coopey

Mon 2nd Jan 2012 23:08

Loved the image of the sand grudging the footsteps. You're an old charmer, you, Harry!

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Lynn Dye

Mon 2nd Jan 2012 13:07

Harry, I just noticed this doesn't appear in the WOL listings. You need to type WOL comp in the box at the bottom of the entry where it says Tag. You will probably have to press edit first for this box to appear. Hope this helps. :)

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Lynn Dye

Sun 1st Jan 2012 21:21

I found this quite delightful, Harry.

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Dave Bradley

Sun 1st Jan 2012 20:50

Thoroughly enjoyed this one Harry

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