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I’m glad the steam rally won’t be here again.

I can ride past on the 85 with no reminder.

Nothing to make me dwell on those three days each year

When you were so engrossed – in steam!

 

Although we had the ancient taxi – off  the plate -

You had to go there on your bike - I bussed it.

It seemed so romantic, meeting up

as you removed your cycle clips

while I forked out the £2 for the programme.

 

We had to take a flask and sandwiches,

you wouldn’t pay for tea or things to eat.

That was a given. But for those three days

we were in heaven.

 

Sometimes a funny friend of yours would turn up,

all the way from London.

I would wish we had those three days to ourselves,

but never mind.

 

Each year I’d wonder if I should find myself

a stationary engine to play with

but I never did. And now you’re gone

what would I do with it?

 

A wondrous pall of smoke slithered over Aggie,

a smell of coal and oil, a lovely smell.

And, most moving moment of them all,

about two hundred engines in the field

as one, piped up and belted out a PEEEEEP

that always made me cry.

A defiant  memory of all their years of toil

in such a far off time.

 

And now, in my far off time I am glad

the rally won’t be at St Agnes anymore.

One less memory to avoid

One more thing, once happiness, that now

would only make me sad.

 

And as I ride by, coming home from Truro on the bus

the field is full of silky golden corn.

No smoke, no crowds, no memories of us.

It's love not dirty coal that keeps me warm.

 

for Murray

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Julian (Admin)

Thu 4th Aug 2011 09:00

This is writing at its best: worlds in grains of sand, the universal in the particular.
Honesty, humanity, without sentimentality.
If you are not submitting for magazines, you should be.

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Andy N

Thu 4th Aug 2011 08:33

Probably my favourite piece of yours Ann, first rate... you've carried this piece beauitfully and you can see it's a labour of love for you.

top stuff x

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 23:49

Bittersweet and somewhat sad. This is you at your best Ann.

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John Embley

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 15:55

Beautiful - for me to say anything more with clumsy words as a comment would spoil it.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 15:18

Simplicity and sophistication - your unique skill - and a violent tug at heartstrings with sincerity.

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Isobel

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 10:15

What a lovely tribute Ann - and a glimpse into another world, another life...
I found the title clever and very appropriate for the tone of the poem and I loved the last line also. All that went between was good too. X

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Laura Taylor

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 09:36

Echo what Dave says, to the letter. Lovely Ann, and a fine tribute.

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Dave Bradley

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 09:03

Lovely. You've created a tension between the steady pace, detail and tone of restraint, and what are clearly very strong emotions. It really works.

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 07:35

Thanks so much - poem wrote itself.
And the steam rally has moved to Stithians - if anyone feels like going. (WESES - West of England Steam Engine Society)

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Francine

Wed 3rd Aug 2011 05:11

Sometimes memories can be painful to relive, so we hold on to the feelings we have in our heart - this brought tears to my eyes.

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Tue 2nd Aug 2011 23:45

Read this before Ann..now I am back.

You took me right into those days, a place that I am rather honoured to be..lovely words Ann and I very much enjoyed the feeling within your poem. :)

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Greg Freeman

Tue 2nd Aug 2011 22:41

Beautiful poem, Ann. One of your very best.

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