Ghazal

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You composed for her - but when a song for me?

How I wanted you to pen a song for me.


So many songs dedicated to her name,

I waited so long but then a song for me!


I can’t be jealous when she has you no more.

With this I can forget Jen, a song for me.


My first beautiful ballad that turned me on,

You wrote like no other men a song for me.


Another song, Lynn, to enjoy for your sins,

Believe it’s true!  There’s again a song for me!


Ghazal

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Lynn Dye

Mon 13th Dec 2010 13:04

Oops, rather a belated thank you by now, but no less felt, to everyone for such lovely comments.

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Jeff Dawson

Fri 10th Dec 2010 18:12

And so you should have a song! Thanx for comment on my winters poem, have a good amxas Jeff X

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Laura Taylor

Wed 8th Dec 2010 12:04

Nice one Lynn!

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Dave Bradley

Wed 8th Dec 2010 08:19

Enjoyed this Lynn. Ten lines full of hints of a long story and a rich world - lots for the imagination to work on

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Wed 8th Dec 2010 07:58

I was pulled in to this Lynn..hello..I have read this format a few times on here and now fancy having a go myself..must look up the format. Lovely work

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winston plowes

Tue 7th Dec 2010 23:29

Well done Lynn. An uplifting maqta too! :-) Win Win xx Title, maybe just Ghazal. What about the first line, could there be a ... or - or at least a , after her? might read more smoothly.

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John Aikman

Tue 7th Dec 2010 22:56

Nowt wrong with that! I echo Ann, a true Ghazal for me.

:-)

Jx

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Ann Foxglove

Tue 7th Dec 2010 19:38

Lovely, Lynne, full of love, honesty, sincerity. A true ghazal. xx

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Lynn Dye

Tue 7th Dec 2010 19:32

Another attempt!

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